At night, in one of the country's largest cities, a young man writes a story on his computer. He writes a story based on his personal experiences, with a little exaggeration to make the story spicier.
"Syena Fiolera, Raihand Tritama, Ariana Freesia .. Those are the names of the main characters."
He is very focused on making the story in his apartment. Without realizing it, a mysterious girl was watching him from afar.
"Rey Hadrian .." The girl said the young man's name.
The girl then jumped down from the rooftop of a house and disappeared into the night. Rey glance at the place where the girl used to be. For a moment he saw the figure of a girl with silver-white hair, but the girl suddenly disappeared. He thought it was just his imagination.
'Ding Dong'
Rey's doorbell rang. Hearing the sound of the bell, Rey then headed for the door and greeted his guest.
"Shera, you finally arrive."
A girl with ponytail black hair was standing at the door.
"Huh .. yes I arrive.. why did you call me? It's already late at night ... Don't tell me ..."
He then blushed and quickly said "No no no, as I said earlier in the chatbox, I decided to make a new story"
"Can we not discuss this in the chatbox?"
"Your apartment is right next door. Is better to talk directly. Come in quickly .."
Rey then invited Shera in.
"Huh .. okay, so what genre do you want to try now. Your story with genre comedy and mystery is quite popular. I guess next you will make a fantasy story" Shera said as she walked in.
Rey's room is not too large, only a small apartment. This room only has one bed and a small table with a computer on it. In addition, there are two separate small rooms for the kitchenette and bathroom. Shera sat on the floor and leaned back on the bed. Rey headed into the kitchenette and grabbed a drink from the fridge.
"You're wrong, I decided to make romance stories not fantasy." Rey came out of the kitchenette with two glasses and a bottle of orange juice.
"Orange juice? really no beer?. Also romance, huh .. what do you know about romance? You got rejected then shut yourself in the room and dropped out of college" said Shera mockingly.
Rey then sat in front of Shera and poured orange juice into the two glasses he brought.
"Shut up !! I'm not rejected !!"
"Ah yes, Erika was taken by your own best friend before you could ... I want to know how they are now," Said Shera
"Ah .. don't talk about it again !!..but well, this story is inspired by that thou.." Said Rey.
"Eh .. inspired from what? ..."
"Aah !! ... see it for yourself the plot concept here," said Rey who then drank the orange juice in a sip.
Shera then read the story concept "Syena ..." Shera saw the name, then stopped for a moment.
"Hmm? what's the matter, why are you smiling like that? Do you like the concept? " Said Rey.
"The concept is quite interesting, but isn't this a very sad ending?"
"I'm just trying new things .. I've never made a story where the protagonist didn't end up happily ever after,"
"You will continue the story right? In the next volume of the book. Because I do not really like the ending of this story" said Shera.
Rey was silent for a moment, then said. "I'll consider that."
"Hey, how about adding one more character? A character who will become Syena's close friend."
"I just don't have much inspiration to create a new character, and I want to make this as soon as possible."
"Is it that difficult for you to make a character in your story, I see other writers just take a random name and make the characterization in the middle of writing."
"I need a model to make a new character. All the characters in my story have a model from someone I know. But sometimes there are also characters that I can make without a model, like Syena for example."
"How about I'll be the model for the character?."
"Hmmm... I don't know... is just..."
"Oh come on..."
"Fine ... but do you have any suggestions for the name?"
"Am ... what about Emilia, her nickname will be Lia," Shera said with a smile.
Rey then wrote a biography for Emilia's character. Then he started writing the prologue of his story. The title is 'Last Hope'. The story tells of a teenage girl named Syena Fiolera who falls in love with her childhood friend, Raihand Tritama. Syena was in a dilemma, she wanted to express her love for Raihand, but she was afraid their friendship would end if Raihand rejected her feelings. At the same time, Syena wanted Raihand to be aware of her feelings and make Raihand confess to Syena. Syena sent various signals and signs to Raihand. However, none of them was reached or understand by Raihand. Until one day, Ariana Freesia, who is also Syena's best friend, confessed to Raihand. Raihand accepts Ariana, and the two of them are dating. Syena was heartbroken, and that was the end of the story.1Syena deserves it for her approach if you ask me, also Raihand is so f***ing dense. While Ariana is f***ing bold and tames the dense boy.
"No matter how many times I read this, I really don't like the ending. Everything will look different if the protagonist is Raihand or Ariana. But why should this story be told from Syena's point of view?" said Shera.
I'm not going to correct everything, but the first "paragraph," if you might, changes tenses and has grammatical errors. By the way, I don't think the readers, I included, know what you're country you're speaking of.
At night in one of the country's big cities. A young man is writing a
story on his computer. He wrote a story based on his personal
experience, of course, with a little added spice to make the story more
interesting.
That sentence should be like this:
At night, in one of the country's largest cities, a young man writes a story on his computer. He writes a story based on his personal experiences, with a little exaggeration to make the story spicier.
Well... thank you.