Waaa a loud cry of a baby can be Heard in the room.
So handsome
I bet he will be handsome in the future
Its unfortunate his mom died will giving birth to him, Alex looked at his dead mom and couldn't suppress his cry even though he didn't acknowledge her as his mom
The nurse went to the father and told him: it's alright you still have her baby.
Then the doctor came and told the father which' name is Richard: so what do u want to name him?
Richard looked at the doctor and said: M-Madara Uchiha.
Good name good name
Then richard stood up and left the hospital, the doctor ran behind Richard to tell him when he will get Madara.
He saw Richard in a pool of blood dead.
Thus they sent Madara to an orphanage.
7 Years Later...
Madara eyes started dropping blood and it started hurting, the caretaker of the orphanage looked at Madara and asked: W-why are your eye's dropping blood?!
She looked at Madara and saw his eyes change to a blood colored eyes with 1 jade inside it.
You unlocked your quirk Madara the caretaker said and continued: we will go to the doctor to check on it alright?
Madara nodded his head.
She knew that Madara's Mature for his age and he Dosen't speak if not spoken to.
In the doctor's office..
The doctor looked at the kid that had an mature presence sighed and said: you unlocked 2 quirks 1 is the eye quirk and second an mysterious energy in you.
So what are you gonna name them? The doctor asked Madara
The eye quirk I'll name it Sharingan and the energy I'll name it chakra.
Good names. The doctor said
After a few minutes speaking with the doctor
Madara went to do something and the caretaker went back to the orphanage.
Meanwhile Madara...
I finnaly unlocked the Sharingan Madara said excitedly in his heart
System can you show me my stats?
(P.S. If your confused yes Madara had his system since birth.)
Ding
Host: Madara Uchiha
Age: 7 years
Inventory ( can place anything in an infinite space)
Tasks (say tasks to preview):
SP (Sex points) :
Shop (Locked) :
Random skill roll ( 100 SP):
(It can have skills or clothes or weapons)
Worlds: (locked)
Skills:
Sharingan (1 jade)
Chakra: Infinite
Hmm good system do I get a starter gift?? Madara asked the system
"ding, yes every time you go to a world you get a started gift".
Hm ok how do I claim it?
"Ding, just say claim"
Claim
Ding, Congratulations on opening a starter gift and getting, Madara's full costume, plus his weapon ( the fan thing for Uchiha if u don't know what I mean I forgot it's name)
Wow that's what I need for the academy. Madara said in his heart, then he closed the system panel.
Right now Madara is trying to find an rich family to place genjustu on them to adopt me, then a few years later I'll send the dad to death and take his wife no I don't hate the orphanage but half of my system is about sexual interactions so I get the points before I start school from my adoptive mother.
A few minutes later I see a beautiful women that is in her 30's but she looks beautiful and a man in his 35's.
I place genjustu on them to make it seem that they wanted to adopt me, we talked and they agreed to adopt him.
We went back to the orphange, the orphange caretaker was surprised I meet someone that wants to adopt me, after a while they adopted me and went to his new home.
He thought to himself on the way to his new home: this how my new life will begin.
First, the multiverse system will give rewards not mainly just Naruto and there is other High rank world that need more powerful stuff then Naruto powers but naruto powers for this low level world is enough, and this is my first time writing a light novel that's why it's direct
Demasiado poder relacionado con naruto, ten en cuenta que es multiverso si terminas en un mundo por ejemplo DXD la magia es algo que se tarda en dominar y debes tener la aptitud, o terminaras como un demonio como sairaorg que pese a que es un demonio de sangre pura no tiene habilidades mágicas es como un rock lee entre los demonios. Con esos 4 deseos pudiste hacer mas, por ejemplo todo eso que pidió a dios pudo ser englobado -"deseo el poder de madara y sasuke junto con todos los doujutsus del sharingan, compatibilidad con todos los elementos y kekegenkai asi como chakra ilimitado para usarlos." -"Deseo un arma divina (ahi puedes poner un arma de cualquier anime)" -"Deseo un sistema de videojuegos que tenga opciones para comprar objetos del multiverso ver mis estadisticas una item box " -"Deseo (agregas cualquier otra cosa no se algo de comics o alguna pelicula un super poder o un linaje de sangre, quiza inteligencia para construir tecnologia).
Estos es mi humilde opinión si quieres pulir mas tu historia, además no seas tan directo en las cosas dale mas contexto no vayas ya al punto recuerda que el mc debe desarrollarse paso a paso o tu historia será demasiado predecible si lo vuelves op desde el comienzo.
Demasiado directo en el cambio de tiempo no pude percibir el punto de desarrollo del personaje, es demasiado plano; la progresión del tiempo pasa desapercibida en un momento es un bebe y al siguiente párrafo ya tiene 7 años y puede usar sus habilidades sin entrenar.
Wow! Just Wow