Cultivation System and Law system (Revealed in Arc 1)
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Author's Note: Hello, Dear Readers! Here is the first Arc (14 chapters) of my book, the Goddess and the Fox. I hope you will like it keep following the story along with me!
Have a good read! ;)
May you all each Immortality and the Peak of Cultivation!
Calm Wanderer
If you enjoyed the chapter, don't hesitate to comment, it helps a lot.
Also , if you wish to help me by donating a small amount of money to myself, type /CalmWanderer in the search bar on the patreon website.
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Power System:
Mortal Layer Cultivation Levels:
Rank 1 (Mana gathering):
-Level 1 (Early, Mid, Late, Peak)
-Level 2 (Early, Mid, Late, Peak)
-Level 3 (Early, Mid, Late, Peak)
Rank 2 (Mana Liquefying):
-Level 4 (Early, Mid, Late, Peak)
-Level 5 (Early, Mid, Late, Peak)
-Level 6 (Early, Mid, Late, Peak)
Rank 3 (Mana Core):
-Level 7 (Early, Mid, Late, Peak)
-Level 8 (Early, Mid, Late, Peak)
-Level 9 (Early, Mid, Late, Peak)
The names used (mana gathering, etc) is true for the average cultivator in the Immortal Pillar Zone. However, it may vary depending on the system used. However the rank themselves and the level would be more or less similar.
Immortal Layer Cultivation Levels (*)
Divine Layer Cultivation Levels (*)
Law Comprehension System:
-Basic Level (Early, Mid, Late, Peak)
-Familiar Level (Early, Mid, Late Peak)
-Experienced Level (Early, Mid, Late Peak)
-Natural Level (Early, Mid, Late Peak)
-Transcendent Level (*)
Law Comprehension will greatly affect one's combat power and breakthrough. To go through one rank to another, a certain comprehension level is needed, and gathering more mana will be useless, unlike between level of similar rank.
Planet's Grades:
-Ungraded Planet
Possess at most enough Mana for Level 1 Beings and the creation of Level 1 Mana Materials. (Earth is an Ungraded Planet)
-Grade 1 Planet (Similar to earth in size)
Mana quality enough for up to Peak Rank 1 Beings and the creation of up to Peak Rank 1 Mana materials
-Grade 2 Planet (Similar to the sun in size which is approximately 100 times earth)
Mana quality enough for up to Peak Rank 2 Beings and the creation of up to Peak Rank 2 Mana materials
-Grade 3 Planet (Similar to a planet 100 times the size of the sun)
Mana quality enough for up to Peak Rank 3 Beings and the creation of up to Peak Rank 3 Mana materials
Other Grades (*)
Each planet's quality differs in the same rank which has an impact the quality and quantity of the Mana materials. Also, the spread of the mana on each planet is not uniform. Meaning there are some places where the mana concentration are higher than other places.
Mortal Realm's Organizations' Power Levels:
-Ungraded Level Power (Divided in Early, Mid, Late and Peak)
Possess at most Rank 1 Beings
-Kingdom Level Power (Divided in Early, Mid, Late and Peak)
Possess at most Rank 2 Beings
-Empire Level Power (Divided in Early, Mid, Late and Peak)
Possess at most Rank 3 Beings
*Will be revealed later in the story
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Wish you had put this a little earlier in the story...
Was it too messy before? I was trying to explain how it worked in the course of the different previous chapters, before making this one, so that it would feel more interesting for you readers. Also the first Arc is mostly a prologue to the story, used to understand the origin of the different important characters.
@CalmWanderer
It was the ranking system for planets and power that got me. You used the power one semi-interchangeably (Level and Rank) which confused me at first. its not that I didn't figure it out, I just wish I didnt have to. As for the planets because you had 9 levels for cultivators, I was a little confused when they were talking about which planet they should escape to vs their dream planet. I had made the assumption that there would be a planet tier for every power level rather than 1 per rank tier. And when you added in the immortal levels for just about everything, it became even more abstract because there is no real frame of reference for those. Does it really need fixing? Probably not. Does this mini explanation chapter need to come sooner? Not really.
You also felt the need to explain stuff like a dantian as well as a few other sayings. Some of that knowledge is way more common knowledge wise than your ranking system. It also took me out of immersion a few times. Objectively its not bad and could be helpful. Subjectively, I don't like it because its right there in the paragraph.
Then for your story as a whole, it isn't too relatable for me. As a reader, I am not learning with the character. Thats why I also had trouble sticking with you story when he started to learn about laws. I had no real investment in him from the start, and then he lost relatability due to his amazing genius. Then add in the whole fated/matched lovers thing, which I already really dislike, and make one partner a child and the other super old... That just sounds bad.
And while you can tell me the systems of power will become more clear, he becomes more relatable, and their relationship changes way later after he grows up, it won't always matter to the people who already left.
Ultimately, your writing isn't bad. Its way above average here. It simply doesn't feel like you had a neutral party look it over and give both objective and subjective feedback.
Edit: It contained spoilers and took up too much space.
@ARedFox
I understand where you you're coming from. For the grading in the planet, I thought it would be weird to have a grade for each level, as the biggest transformation for cultivators are between ranks and not Levels.
As for the mention of Rank and Level... I admit I was trying to find the best way to use those. Did I succeed at the beginning? Probably not. In my opinion, it does get better as the chapters go along. But it can be annoying for at first, it's true. And the power system was not completely finalized as I started to write this novel, so I may have tried to pour to much information and not in the right manner to justify everything.
Now, the whole fated lover and amazing genius. That's tricky to explain. Let's just say that it sounded better in my head. It might not have been my best idea, even if I don't regret it.
Thanks for your compliment. And yes, you're right. I've done everything on my own without any feedback. It's my first time writing, and this book is more like the introduction to the universe I'm planning to create where, hopefully, the other books I'm planning to write will be better. I'm refining everything as I go along, and I'm also trying to find the way I like to write, which is not easy. To be honest I've learnt a lot since I started, so feel like this book will keep improving.
Time will tell. Again thanks for your comment, as it did help me put my finger on the mistakes I made.