Last Breath
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Last Breath
A single minute left
A breath to spare
A breath to spare
Gazing at the abyss
I was lost
Far from my fellows
Far from my beloved
Less than a minute left
A thought to spare
Thinking death would come, I was ready
But the lingering regrets, I was not
Half-minute left
A move to spare
Requesting help from nowhere
I feared, I cried, I'm about to die
Less than a minute left
A thought to spare
My strength demise
My heart aches
Losing hope, losing faith
I gave up
Last 10 seconds left
Memories flooded
Emotions breached
Tick, tock, tick, tock
The clock went off
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Idk much about the poem & stuff but I'll comment anyways.
I like the theme (death vs time) & the basic structure of it.
But there's no essence. More precisely, there isnt a focus point. Everyone could talk about regrets, but the whys & whats makes it stand out.
Maybe it was too short? It is about 1min left. But that 1min before death represents the lifetime of the person imo.
Nice to see you here! Whahaha~