“You will live.”
That’s the only thing I remember hearing. The voice of someone, feminine to be specific after which I fell asleep.
Now I seem to be lying on something soft, I am using my limited motor function over my limbs to try and scout the area, which is, I am waving my limbs around to try and feel something. Which lead to no results whatsoever.
What the flying fuck is going on around me.
I have no idea where I am, why I am here, or why I even heard someone telling me to live.
Oh, I sensed someone coming near me.
Wait what, how can I sense someone.
And I sense more than one.
“Seems like we are the only ones willing to take care of the baby.”
“What why? Send him to the orphanage, we are not taking care of that half-blood’s child.
Orphanage what are they talking about?
“The child still is an Uchiha.”
Uchiha—no way, no fucking way. And why am I a baby?
“It is not even a half-blood like him, more like a quarter blood.”
“Still an Uchiha. Tomoe.”
“And that half-blood you are talking about was a great shinobi, one of our best. His child deserves to be taken care of after all he did to Konoha whether you like it or not.
Ohmygodthereisnowayigotreincarnatedintothenarutoworld
“Fine, do what you want.” {Tomoe}
“I know it already, at least carry him to my residence.”
Someone lifted me up.
“Fine, think of it as the last time I’m helping this baby.”
“This is how you hold a baby right.” {Tomoe}
“I don’t know, just make sure to hold the baby’s head.”
I felt hands under my head.
“Like this.” {Tomoe}
“Yeah, I think it should be fine.”
I opened my eyes and tried to look but my eyes were being sensitive to light, after blinking for some time my eyes finally adjusted themselves to help me view.
The first thing I saw was the face of my carrier.
“What are you looking at?” {Tomoe}
I have never seen someone pretty like that.
She had black hair, black eyes and the standard Uchiha scowl.
Need I say more. It is confirmed that this is indeed the Naruto world.
I raised my hands towards her face and tried to speak.
“Dah ha ha bhu.”
“Oh, he’s so cute.”
I looked around for the source of the voice.
“Hello there, little one, I am Naori. I and Tomoe are going to take care of you from now on.” {Naori}
Wow, she’s like an angel.
“You know I won’t Naori” {Tomoe}
“Come on don’t be like that, can’t you see how cute the baby is.” {Naori}
“You can’t convince me to look after his child.” {Tomoe}
Oi, what’s going on here, does that woman have some bad blood with my father.
Wait
My father.
I am taking this reincarnation thing pretty easily.
Maybe it is all a dream, yeah that makes sense.
But even if it isn’t, I don’t really care either way. Maybe life here could be better than there. There is someone willing to take care of me here, that is already miles better than that life. Assuming that I have died.
“The child is innocent Tomoe; this has nothing to do with him.” {Naori}
Damn right it is.
Hey don’t look at me like that woman.
Is she going to drop me?
“Stop looking at him like that Tomoe,” {Naori}
“Hmm” Tomoe looked away.
Naori is an angel, this Tomoe woman sure is scary
Let me just close my eyes.
Though it pains to not look at women as pretty as them
Alright.
Let me think, I have somehow ended up in the Naruto world as a new-born baby, I’m going to be taken care of by an Uchiha and my father is a half-blooded Uchiha who isn’t here, presumably dead and there is a really pretty woman who seems to hate me because of my father. I don’t know what timeline this is and I really hope this isn’t an alternate universe
But Konoha exists.
I don’t even what I would have done if I was in the warring states era.
Kill myself. Most likely.
Alright so all I need to do is to never ever think of becoming a fucking shinobi and live an uneventful life.
Should be easy enough.
Right.
Yeah, what could go wrong.
Nothing.
Absolutely nothing.
But why do I feel myself pissing.
“No, the brat is pissing.” {Tomoe}
“Hahaha.” {Naori}
“You. Is this why you told me to carry him?” {Tomoe}
“I don’t know what you are talking about.” {Naori}
Oh, I am definitely not scared.
Nay, not at all.
Meanwhile.
Unknown to all a masked figure with flowing hair could be seen observing the happenings.
“I look forward to what you become, kin of Seiryoku.” Muttered the figure before fading out.
I might not be an avid reader of Naruto fanfics, but thank you for making one where the main character doesn't get straight up cheats, that's been done to death judging by all of the new fics uploaded here.
Also a quick tip for dialogue. Rather than putting the name of the speaker after each quote, maybe try to have the natural flow of the dialogue indicate who the current speaker is? If there are only two speakers, then it makes sense that each paragraph break between quotes will specify a new speaker. Each paragraph of dialogue should have only a single character as a focus, and you can make new paragraphs when you want to focus on the lines and actions of another character. And don't be afraid to have a character's lines and actions in a single paragraph. Something like:
"No, the brat is pissing!" says Tomoe with a wince. He tries to hold me as far away from him as he can, but the cuffs of his shirt still get wet.
I might not stick around for many more chapters, but know that I'm rooting for you because you're making a sincere effort to tell a story that isn't just a power fantasy where everything lands in the main character's lap. Good luck!
Thanks man, I will work on your tips.