The bunker was not what she imagined it to look like, rather it seemed like it had been used so many times that the blast door seems like it would fall off, it was beyond repair with the amount of corrosion it has sustained.
'But weren't these anti-scan bunkers so durable that it was estimated to take at least 1000 years to even have a sliver of corrosion but how come this bunker has so many damages considering it hasn't even clocked 300 years after its creation?'
Even if she felt something amiss she must carry on, as she isn't that heartless to leave someone.
"NASTY, open the blast door and do an acoustic scan of the insides of the bunker as soon as I enter inside"
"Yes, Master"
SFX: Screech.
"Here we go"
'What is this...'
The bunker seems to have someone reside here and it also contains bare minimum furniture for a living like a bed, a dining table with a set of chairs, a study table with written papers strewn all over and a door which is yet to be discovered.
"Have you finished scanning the interior, NASTY?"
"Yes Master, and I have sent the results to you"
'The report seems to state the same points as my observations of this room but where is the resident of this room and who was it who screamed for help, was it the same person who was living here?'
11.An acoustic scan-a powerful, non-destructive technique that can detect hidden defects in elastic and biological samples as well as non-transparent hard materials. By monitoring the internal features of a sample in three-dimensional integration, this technique can efficiently find physical defects such as cracks, voids, and delamination with high sensitivity
Thanks for the chapter~~
One fast way I improved my writing was splitting up sentences. A lot of paragraphs you write are one whole sentence - the story is kept intact & is understandable, however it can be hard to read at times. This also does wonders for the "reading flow" on top of the readability. It can be quite hard to rewrite and split-up what you already wrote, so maybe try out writing a new chapter like this.
I don't read a whole lot on scribblehub, but I can still give you a few examples of what I mean. Try to compare the punctuation with yours, the dots and commas.
First example is from Bokuboy's Spider-Man series, he has A LOT of stuff written. I sometimes look at his stuff while writing essays cause I have the same tendency as you do lol
It was utter chaos at the compound. No one knew what was going on as real bullets flew around, smoke came from two different locations, and the power was out. It wasn't until the main storage area exploded that everyone abandoned the training scenario and ran for the surrounding jungle. It didn't take long for all of the buildings to catch on fire, especially when they were deliberately set.
The second example is from Tree of Aeons by Spaizzer.
A demon king was slain once more. Honestly, it felt like a chore, and Edna wondered whether this was how Aeon felt. It had seen so many generations of demon kings, and participated in so many of its’ conflicts.
This was a tiring, tiring chore.
There's many more examples that I reckon you can find yourself lol. I'm guessing you do some reading aswell since you write. Either way don't beat yourself up for any flaws, many of my favourite novels started out at an almost unreadable state before becoming great works
I am sorry for my very late response, but thank you so much for your comment. I can feel your thoughtfulness and kindness just by reading it ❤️❤️