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Hey Im here.
I know I've been on Hiatus and well I took some time to think and I've decided to rewrite this story.
But I wanted to take a poll first on its new direction.
I'll check back at the end of the week to see the results. Then a new chapter of the rewrite will be out by next week.
At least I intend it to be.
Which direction would you like this story rewrite to take?
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1. MC reborn as a member of the Zabi family. Votes: 8 34.8%
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2. Self-insert into Amuro Ray Votes: 3 13.0%
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3. MC reborn as the twin brother of Sayla Votes: 2 8.7%
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4. MC reborn as an orhpan in Axis just after the OYW ends Votes: 10 43.5%
Total voters: 23 · This poll was closed on Jul 17, 2023 02:02 AM.
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Just a disclaimer it has been a long time since I have watched Gundam and also I was never hyper into it. Saying that I can't really pick one of those options because I don't really know any.
Moving on, to be honest if a rewrite is what you are after then I would suggest just keeping with the same background. Just polishing up the story a bit.
However, I will say that in my opinion the original was too lackluster in the beginning. . . What I mean is that there wasn't much action or drive that I felt. Perhaps that is because of his strong beginning with his good family, connections to wealth, and then all of his inventions. Perhaps you gave him too much of a strong beginning that it just felt like the mc would roll over everything. Once again this is just my opinion.
Part of me wants to suggest to tone down the background by giving him less strong background. Two Gundam series come to mind. Gundam Seed you have the mc starting out as a Highschooler(even though he is special) and then getting thrown into conflict. But I think my second idea is better. The last Gundam series I saw was Iron Blooded Orphans and I thought that one was a good idea. A mercenary group of throw away characters. . . A background like that would give you some options and freedom to go to the different factions without being stuck. Combine that with his knowledge of world to enhance the merc group would make them a powerful force.
Whatever you choose I wish you the best of luck.
Nice to see this story is coming back(?)
I won't be voting because while I'm familiar with the overall general plot of the Universal Century timeline I've never really been invested in it and thus don't know most of the characters or their dynamics...
In regards to your rewrite, I honestly hope you wouldn't change the premise too much (meaning the overall world plot you've written not involving the MC). Your idea of this universe having characters from other series also made it quite interesting and fun.
Instead just like KidBuu699 has already pointed out his starting point / economic situation would need some change, Most of the time an MC that is able to achieve everything with a snap of the fingers is usually a detriment in the long run to a story.
- For example; I'm not saying the mc shouldn't try and introduce new tech. Like he did in this story with the introduction of the laptop or smart phone he should still do it, but make it a more hard earned process (without instant funding / friends with money). Maybe have him start of working in the family garage as a side project while he grows up or something like how the first developers of the PC did in RL.
Similarly making the mc too OP / perfect is a bit of an overused trope. Meaning it's a more engaging read if the mc could / would make mistakes in the process or fail regardless of the fact his goal, actions and reasoning behind his action being the correct one.
in conclusion (for me) I would say keep the current MC persona (not having connections to any main and influential character) but change his dynamic with the existing story and characters changing his first point of contact.
Also if possible please keep Miorine as the main girl I honestly loved the way you wrote her.
lastly please don't delete your current story (which I've notice you seem to do a lot). even if you don't continue with this version it is still written very well and it would be a shame if this would disappear...
Hey hey hey author returning
I wish you continued they story.... so I just wasted my time reading this amazing story for nothing..... Thank you but not thank you I will consider this the last chapter of the fic.
Good luck in your future projects.
Welcome back and sieg zeon!
Welcome back, ArifuretaForever! It's fantastic to have you here again. Maybe it would be advantageous to retain him as a 3rd Part main character of this story . Moreover, incorporating the original character in a cameo appearance can provide an intriguing element to the narrative.
Let's delve into a captivating tale set in the world of Gundam, specifically the Universal Century timeline. Our story will feature a remarkable Gundam Witch, the ever-present influence of Gundam seeds, awe-inspiring Gundam wings, and the enigmatic presence of Gundam 00.