First things, first, I definitely think I kind of fucked up the past 2 or 3 chapters.
Seems like a lot of people are unhappy with how things turned out. Specifically the topic of sexual assault and rape.
Reading the comments, I understand that I kinda fucked up the upbuild to the chapter.
But I wanted to clarify before moving forward, that Chiaki wasn't actually raped, just attempted sexual assault, similar to Mei's. In a nutshell, the stalker found and read some articles about the topic, and immediately assumed she got raped.
But still, I understand that its a touchy subject, and I didn't think things through. Especially since this novel was meant to be heartwarming and pure in the first place. I was going to put a disclaimer at the start of the chapter, but I figured I didn't need to as the novel had already been tagged with "gore" and "strong language," and from the 3rd chapter people understood it was a bit more dark from usual romcom novels.
Now for the stalker, he was meant to be that psychotic in the first place. The whole purpose for him, was simply to be hated to the bone. I have to say, I wanted to flesh out the attacks he attempted on Isamu, but in the end, it turned out like this, probably from a lack of sleep and the "rush" to just kill him off as soon as possible.
As noted from above, "killing" off people shouldn't really belong in a heartwarming novel.
The chapters each took 2-4 hrs to make, which also explains why it may seemed a bit rushed.
Anyways, I'd like to know whether or not you'd like me to just move on, or if people are more interested in a redo of the previous 2/3 chapters. Leave a comment on your opinions, if you'd like.
Moving forward, I will no longer be delving into the topic of sexual assault / rape, and more focused on the relationship between Isamu and the heroines.
As always though, thanks for reading my novel.
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Yes Votes: 44 22.0%
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No Votes: 156 78.0%
- Sexual assault/rape is/was/were always a "touchy/sensitive" psychological/emotional topic to "talk/delve" into period.
What you just did is what "might" had/has happened or not on the background of the heroines which make it much more into the "character building" resulting to their contrasting/contradictory behaviour/attitude to anyone or anybody they both interact to, of which made/make "your" heroines more "realistic/relatable".
- Regardless, as a reader (man of culture, HA!) , i get the gist of what you as the author is getting at, and grammar wise is a lot better than others (9/10) with similar tropes and story structure is consistent throughout and the "suspense/thriller" is obviously there.
- As the reader, I would call this "suspense/thriller/romance/reincarnation/slice-of-life/comedy" genre but of the ahmmm, "K Drama-ish/Telenovela-ish/Soap-ish" type, may be common to some but to me personnally, a good read enough to make me the reader anticipate MORE what is "next" in the next episode (pun much intended, hehe).
- Continue on rather than redo. It is a good "touch" on reincarnation tropes. Keep at it.
, smart-ass but down-to-earth. 
- As for your MC (Isamu)
Tyty
If you didn't really want to continue, you may call this "early ending" and make the whole story wrapped up to ending within 3-5 chapter.
I agree with the 0 to 100 comment, but would like to add some ideas of how it could have been done better. Keep in mind, I didn't really read the comments for previous chapters, so I might repeat what someone else has said.
First off, what's the end goal? Are we trying to build a harem? Are we trying to show what happens when a normal person interacts with characters from a rom-com manga? Are we trying to teach the reader that behind the happy mask that certain people exhibit, there could be a disturbing back story they're trying to hide? Of course, you could prioritize all or none of those, but I would like to discuss them anyway.
If we're building a harem, we should keep in mind what we're using it for. Is it for comedic relief, where the MC accidentally charms a bunch of girls who do silly things in order to vie for his attention? Is it to create tension, where the MC must constantly choose between making one girl happy and the rest incredibly disappointed or never making a decision and ignoring their advances? In all honesty, I'm not the biggest fan of harems, but that's partly because I feel they're often not done very well.
What about showing a normal person interacting with rom-com characters? This is actually a very popular trope. Not normal guy X rom-com characters, I mean. But, the idea of a normal guy interacting with wondrous events and characters. It's called magical realism, and it is designed to show the 'what if this happened.' If it is your goal to show what if a *normal* guy did this or that, then I have to say that the MC is very much not normal. Teenagers don't tend to have impulses for violence, unless they were trained to think that way... I'm a school teacher and I deal with kids of all ages all day every day. I'd say about 2/5 of kids would gladly talk about beating the crap out of each other, but I've only been seriously concerned they would act on their words a couple times before.
I work at a VERY strictly peaceful private school, though, so I probably get it better than most teachers.
Now, the idea of characters hiding a tragic past can be very beautiful, but the reader needs to be convinced of its importance. After all, you could probably pick a random book in the young adult section of a library and find a character somewhere within the book with a tragic story. Tragic stories are everywhere. The question the reader would ask is if it matters, if it will continue, if the character's response to said tragedy is just as tragic, if not more so. And, while Chiaki's past may be tragic, I personally have not yet seen a reason to care it was. She seems happy now. My sense of empathy is dulled by the fact her past does not visibly cause her problems.
The main take-away I want to give, though, is that the story's direction should be a little clearer and the methods of travel well thought out.
I see... Thanks for your comment!
Its all cleared up now lol. Maybe u shouldv added and authors note on the previous ch lol
I trust an author's instincts more than the peanut gallery's opinions. I'm not saying that an author shouldn't consider his readers' opinions, but I don't think he should be swayed by their opinions either. Even if you rewrite it you may not like the new version or it just doesn't feel like 'you'. Just write what you believe is right, and only fix it when you REALLY mess up.
Lmfao, some people have no backbone or are too easily triggered lol.
Nah don't re do it, let the story cook for itself and see where this is going.
I personally don't mind darker topic in a story like this, it breaks the monotony of a romcom and it is a good fuel for the drama, character motivation and the story overall.
aight bet
It's a very touchy subject no matter how you decide to approach it, so I doubt the opinions of people would change much if you were to simply tell it in a different way.
As I see it, you have a content warning at the start of the chapter, and if people keep reading anyways and are unhappy with whay they read, then that problem is theirs
Your biggest and really only fault is the lack of clear trigger warnings I'd say if anything. A story needs variables and ups and downs no matter how light hearted over all the story is aimed to be. Even slow paced slice of life stories have this mechanic. Otherwise we'd just be reading some meandering drivel in one way or another. There'd be no stakes essentially.
aight bet let me cook