I love this story, the story is fun, the way the main character fights with the system, everything in the first three chapters was great. I really hope that the author continues this.
I do wish that the chapters were a bit longer, it's nice that they are decently long but if the author does continue and wants to compete with the more popular stories then I think they will need to make each chapter longer.
Also please add more characters, I know this was just the first three chapters but it's going to get very boring without more characters to spice things up.
The grammar isn't bad it flows but has a few parts that could be smoother but I think that will get better the more parts that are released. I can only assume that it will take some time before the author goes back and edits everything, if they do at all.
I love this story, the story is fun, the way the main character fights with the system, everything in the first three chapters was great. I really hope that the author continues this.
I do wish that the chapters were a bit longer, it's nice that they are decently long but if the author does continue and wants to compete with the more popular stories then I think they will need to make each chapter longer.
Also please add more characters, I know this was just the first three chapters but it's going to get very boring without more characters to spice things up.
The grammar isn't bad it flows but has a few parts that could be smoother but I think that will get better the more parts that are released. I can only assume that it will take some time before the author goes back and edits everything, if they do at all.
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