The ride starts with the synopsis, and in the first chapter, the author takes us on a journey to two different worlds in completely different eras. Starting with a terrific pace, the story slows itself down a bit to give the readers a breather, and then catches pace again. A good story is one in which the theme of the story is unveiled on the first page, and one that gives us a sneak peek into a character's personalities. A splendid story is all of that, plus it makes you smitten by the plot and the players. I started reading chapter one of 'Ashborn Primordial' and didn't realize how I finished thirty eight chapters.

Story: This is a story of 'nobody to somebody' with a rich backstory (or so it seems from the prologue and the synopsis). The story is one of strength, hope, and conviction. There are elements of South Asian (Indian) mythology, in a way that glorifies the story manifold. Author also sheds light on the value of deep meaningful relationships (be it between a father and son, or between friends).

Style: Thoroughly enjoyed the use of fakespletives that add to the lore. The author has clubbed a great lore, magic, mystery, emotion and progression all in one story. The story has realistic side characters with good dialogue that help the immersion. I won't spoil, but there's dialogue in chapter two that made chills go down my spine, and a dialogue between Vir and his father is on point as well. Character: Vir is unique because he's relatable, yet inspiring. His kindheartedness and determination are infectious! He converts every obstacle into an opportunity and finds ingenious ways of overcoming it. The Author has made me fall in love with not one, but two characters, Vir and Maiya. Maiya beautifies the story with her distinctive skill set, and who knows where the story will take her?

Grammar: Exceptional writing. The beautiful prose makes a reader connect with the story. Seems like the author has ensured that a reader consumes only the finest drafts. Go read it! I bet it won't disappoint you.

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seadog

Status: 40: a mejai’s first lesson

Feb 26, 2023

Here's a couple thoughts:

Worldbuilding! Book starts off in a village but you slowly get exposed to more of what's out there. Bustling cities, small towns, diverse terrain, powerful kingdoms. Best part, the author has barely scratched the surface. The artwork throughout helps tie all this together. Indian influences provide a unique spin and is appreciated. Language, weapons, character appearances all thought out and bring this story to life. Overall mystery with the ash, darkness, primordials makes this a page turner.

Characters! The two main characters are still young but they have big aspirations. They are hardworking and although the stakes are high, they remain positive. They have a great relationship and their dialogue reflects that. You can't help but root for them. I especially love Vir because of his creativity and willingness to figure things out himself. I love resourceful characters.

Great progression, pacing, plot! Stakes are high. Character progression feels earned. Chapters hit the sweet spot in terms of length. Author does a good job of not dumping everything on you, yet making sure that each chapter is meaningful. You learn a little bit more about the world. I've encountered many stories where nothing happens for pages upon pages so I'm happy to report this does not fall into that trap.

A lot of other things I love about this story like the: magic system, mythology, lore I can't really say here as we're heading into spoiler territory. So I'm gonna end it here and just say read it, you won't be disappointed!

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