The idea itself has promise, but the execution and writing leaves a lot to be desired. There's quite a few cases of strange sentence structure, dialogue that feels like it's missing and generally—subjectively—it's not particularly fetching because of these issues and how they interrupt the flow of the story. The main character also feels feels pretty generic and lacking in depth of any kind. And sure, the character may develop it going deeper in the story, but given that the first few chapters are the most important to sell the story, it did not do so for me at least.
This novel got potential. I have read some of the chapters. Grammer is good. The character is also well fleshed out. The system is also explained with chapters. There is still some space for improvement. Keep up the good work. I hope you dont drop it
The idea itself has promise, but the execution and writing leaves a lot to be desired. There's quite a few cases of strange sentence structure, dialogue that feels like it's missing and generally—subjectively—it's not particularly fetching because of these issues and how they interrupt the flow of the story. The main character also feels feels pretty generic and lacking in depth of any kind. And sure, the character may develop it going deeper in the story, but given that the first few chapters are the most important to sell the story, it did not do so for me at least.
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This novel got potential. I have read some of the chapters. Grammer is good. The character is also well fleshed out. The system is also explained with chapters. There is still some space for improvement. Keep up the good work. I hope you dont drop it
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