Christ...I don't know what to really say. This story is genuinely one of the worst fanfics I've ever seen, and I ran a site dedicated to MSTing bad fanfiction for a year and a half.

I guess the cover art is nice? But, you know, it's bad form to judge a book by its cover, and this is certainly an example of that proverb in action.

A quick breakdown of why it's awful:

• Attrocious spelling and grammar
• Unironically uses cringe words like 'tacticool' to describe clothing without realising that phrase is generally used to describe people who are trying too hard to be tactical and cool.
• Main character is the textbook definition of a mary sue, and I don't even need to read more than the character sheet/lore page to figure that out
• Awful, awful formatting
• Chapters are short enough to barely qualify as more than a paragraph of text.
• Seems to have been written up and published without any sort of proofreading or quality checks. There are so many issues with how the story reads, and what the dialogue and prose says that I don't think this story even really qualifies as a story

One star, and that's bloody generous.

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