that's happening and just follows along like a clueless idiot nor does he doubt what's happening all of a sudden, yeah to me its illogical and the story lacks EMOTIONAL DEPTH not to mention that all of the above happen in BARELY more than 1 CHAPTER which as i mentioned is too fast-paced...
Its fine... U asked what put me off so i gave my opinion... I am sure you will get better in time... Good Luck and please don't be too rushed and lose your motivation for writing, because a lot of authors are doing rushed work and they quickly drop the novels after running out of inspiration... Make aure to properly PLAN THE PROGRESSION OF THE STORY AHEAD WHEN WRITING...