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Grumble!grumble!
Hanging on for dear life at the edge of the carriage, I looked below me...
And I looked up again...
What I saw is a long fall and I don't know how far it goes down but I can see fog blocking the bottom...
It's definitely a very deep ravine...
"Ugh...." (Fairy girl)
I looked at the little fairy that I was still hugging in-between my breasts...
Now, what to do...
"Ah" (Liana)
I can see that I was actually beside one of the windows of the carriage...
I can see that the window frame can be used as a support for my feet...
I put my feet at the window frame and quickly climb my way up to the roof again...
"Fuf... Well that went well" (Liana)
As I'm finally back on the roof again, I looked around...
And saw that we are still moving on the bridge...
The bridge is pretty long and was supported by some towers and cables...
The design is quite simple...
It consists of four pillars and some support beams below The bridge...
Some cables we're strung from the beginning of the bridge and connecting in the middle...
I looked toward my right and I saw the flying ship plummeting out of the sky towards the bridge...
"Okay now what to do" (Liana)
Buuusssss!
"Hm?" (Liana)
I looked beside me...
Well besides the bridge...
{Psss* Lia!? Can you hear me?} (Elizabeth)
I can see my hoverbike flying beside the bridge...
Did Eli use the megaphone mode? I could hear her loud and clear even though my hoverbike is still far away...
Wait did my hoverbike even have a megaphone attached to it?...
I shook my head and yelled...
"Yes, I can hear you!"(Liana)
"hip!?" (fairy girl)
I think I yelled too loudly as the fairy got startled...
"Ah!? Sorry! You okay?" (Liana)
The fairy looked up at me and nodded a little bit...
I looked towards the front again and saw that I'm only one carriage away from the front of the train...
I narrowed my eyes and looked towards the falling ship...
{Psss* Lia the ship will impact with the train in 30 seconds you better get ready...} (Elizabeth)
"..." (Liana)
Looking at the possible way of escaping while not letting the fairy nor myself get hurt is going to be difficult...
I sighted...
I can only rush forward or...
I looked behind...
Maybe I can-
Piusssssss~~~
BOOOOOOMMM!
A random missile hit the bridge bottom support behind me and...
The bridge behind me started to collapse...
"Welp... Crap" (Liana)
Guess there's only one way out now...
The bridge started collapsing behind me and so...
I can only dash to the front huh...
As the bridge started collapsing behind me I quickly ran towards the front of the train while still holding the fairy...
Grumble! Grumble!
The train started to shake...
I looked at the ship...
It's about to hit the bridge right in front of me...
"Hold on tight!" (Liana)
"Hiii!?" (Fairy girl)
CRAAAASSSSHHHHH!
The ship crash right in front of the train...
The fairy quickly grabbed onto my shirt while my left-hand held onto the fairy so she wouldn't fall and I jumped off the train and landed on the burning hull of the ship...
CRAAAANNGGG!
The train smacked into the hull of the ship, causing it to derail to the left side of the track and started falling from the bridge...
HOOOOOONNNNGGGGGKKKKK!
Grumble! Grumble!
"Woah!" (Liana)
The ship started to fall from the bridge as the bridge started to collapse...
I quickly ran up towards the ship thruster...
Tatatatatatatatata!
Buuusssshhh!
Buuusssshhh!
The turrets of the ship are still firing at my plane...
I quickly ran past them and moved towards the back end of the ship's hull where the ship's thrusters were...
Wuusssshhhh!...
There I could see my hoverbike stopping at the edge of the thruster...
BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!
The ship started exploding...
And I quickly ran towards the edge and then jump...
"Kiiiaaaaa!?" (Little fairy)
Still holding the fairy in my hand I can see my plane shooting a missile towards the ship...
The missile flew past me and hit a turret that was aiming at me from behind...
The turret exploded and I safely landed on my hoverbike and turned the bike away from the falling ship...
But...
Woooonnnggg!
I look back and saw the two main laser turrets of the back of the ship started aiming at me...
"Tch..." (Liana)
I looked down at the fairy that was still between my breasts and grabbing my shirt...
"Sorry, but can you stop grabbing my shirt now?" (Liana)
The fairy looks at me and stopped grabbing my shirt...
I then gently grab her with my right hand and let her sit on my hand...
I looked at the ship again...
I then raised my left hand and touched the hairpin on my hair...
Cling!cling!cling!...
The hairpin light up and turned into blue particles of light...
The particles then gathered in my left hand as I aimed my left hand on the ship...
The particle started shaping into a gun and the light started to fade replacing it with electrical current...
Buzz!Buzz!Buzz!
What appears in my left hand is the railgun I have...
The handgun version that is...
BUZZ!BUZZ!BUZZ!
My left hand started getting coiled around with blue electricity and my blue eye started lighting up as light started forming at the end of the barrel of my railgun...
The two laser turrets on the ship shot at me with their high-speed laser...
The two lasers combined together to form an even stronger laser and flew towards me...
But sadly...
Click!
I pulled the trigger...
Cling!.......POOOOOWWWWWW!
The dart from my railgun shoots out and flew towards the combined lasers...
"Welp adios~" (Liana)
PLIIIIINNNNNGGGGG!!!!....POOOWWWWW!
The laser and dart hit each other and the laser got shredded into multiple lasers...
The dart kept flying towards the ship even though it was still hitting the laser...
As the laser faded the dart flew and hit the ship...
CRAAANGG!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!
The dart pierced the rear of the ship and penetrated it until it reached the front of the ship, leaving a trail of explosions behind...
BOOOOOM!
The core of the ship then exploded and then split the ship in two, causing it to fall down towards the sea of clouds at the bottom of the ravine...
Wuusssshhhh...
"Sigh...." (Liana)
I lowered my left hand as I looked at the fairy sitting on my right hand stunned by what she saw...
Well, figures...
We just kept watching the ship fall down as the clouds in the sky began to fade away, revealing the sun that started shining behind us...
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[Note: I did a major fix on every chapter on my novel from start till now with Grammy hope it works and hopes it will make everyone understand the story a little...]
You have some fault in the first chapter to the one were she encounter Elli.
Hahaha... that's going to be a problem to fix but I mange to fix it a little from cap 1-52...
Thanks for the chapter!~
Hopefully whatever you did helps!
Hanging on at the edge of the carriage with dear life I looked below me...
=> Hanging on for dear life at the edge of the carriage, I looked below me...
What I saw is a long fall I don't know but I can see fog blocking the bottom...
It's definitely a very deep ravine...
=>What I saw is a long fall and I don't know how far it goes down but I can see fog blocking the bottom...
It's definitely a very deep ravine...
I put my feet at the window frame and quickly climb my way up to the roof again...
"If..." (Liana)
As I'm finally back on the roof again I looked around...
=> I put my feet at the window frame and quickly climb my way up to the roof again...
{|"If..." (Liana)| Getting rid of this part of dialogue, Idk what it is for/the dialogue was never really finished}
As I'm finally back on the roof again, I looked around...
The design is quite simple...
With four-towers and some support below The bridge...
Some cables hanging on the bridge connecting the bridge towards the middle...
I looked toward my right and I saw the flying ship falling towards here at fast speed...
=> The design is quite simple...
It consisted of four pillars and some support beams below the bridge...
Some cables were strung from the beginning of the bridge and connecting in the middle... {this is my best attempt at correcting this}
I looked toward my right and I saw the flying ship plummeting out of the sky towards the bridge...
Did Eli use the megaphone mode? I can hear her loud and clear even know my hoverbike is still far away...
I can hear her => I could hear her
even know my hoverbike => even though my hoverbike
I shook my head and shout...
shout... => yelled...
I think I shout too loudly that the fairy that was with me got startled...
I think I yelled too loudly as the fairy got startled...
I looked towards the front again and saw that I'm only one carriage aya towards the train...
one carriage aya towards the train... => one carriage away from the front of the train...
Looking at the possible way of trying to not get hurt with the fairy here is going to be a tuff one yet again...
=> Looking at the possible ways of escaping while not letting the fairy nor myself get hurt is going to be difficult...
As the bridge started collapsing behind me I quickly run towards the front of the train while still holding the fairy...
quickly run towards => quickly ran towards
The fairy quickly holds on to my shirt while my left-hand holds on to the fairy so she won't fall and I jump off the train and landed on the ship burning hull...
=> The fairy quickly grabbed onto my shirt while my left-hand held onto the fairy so she wouldn't fall and I jumped off the train and landed on the burning hull of the ship...
The train smack into the hull of the ship, derailing it and the train turned left and started falling from the bridge...
=> The train smacked into the hull of the ship, causing it to derail to the left side of the tracks and start falling off the bridge...
I quickly run up towards the ship
run => ran
I quickly run past them and move towards the back end of the ship's hull where the ship thruster is...
=> I quickly ran past them and moved towards the back end of the ship's hull where the ship's thrusters were...
There I can see my hoverbike stopping at the edge of the thruster...
can => could
I looked at the fairy that was still hanging on my breasts and grabbing my shirt...
=> I looked down at the fairy that was still between my breasts and grabbing my shirt...
The fairy looks at me and stops grabbing my shirt I then grab her with my right hand gently and let her sit there...
=> The fairy looked up at me and stopped grabbing my shirt...
I then gently grab her with my right hand and let her sit on my hand...
The tow laser turrets of the ship shoot out toward me at high speed...
tow => two
of the ship => on the ship
shoot out toward me => shot at me with their high speed lasers...
The dart keeps flying towards the ship even know it's still hitting the laser...
keeps => kept
even know it's still => even though it was still
T dart pierces the ship back and penetrated it till it reached the front of the ship leaving a trail of explosion behind...
T dart pierces the ship back and penetrated it till it => The dart pierced the rear of the ship and penetrated it until it
ship leaving a trail of explosion behind... => ship, leaving a trail of explosions behind...
The ship then exploded in the middle and was cut in two as it falls down towards the sea of clouds at the bottom of the ravine...
=> The core of the ship exploded and then split the entire ship in two, causing it to fall down towards the sea of clouds at the bottom of the ravine...
I lowered my left hand as I looked at the fairy on my right hand stunned by what she saw...
Well, figure...
fairy on my right hand => fairy sitting on my right hand
Well, figure... => Well, figures...
We just keep watching the ship fall down as the cloud in the sky started fading and the sun started shining behind us...
=> We just kept watching the ship fall down as the clouds in the sky began to fade away, revealing the sun that started shining behind us...