- Shari -
Before we approach the gate we apply the powder again.
I am not too sure if the guards would let us through without face control.
There might be those from last time on duty but even in this case, there is still a risk of just trusting in our last agreement with the guards, hoping it might work out.
Coming closer, I discover that they truly are the same guards as last time.
Maybe it's something like a set position they have.
However, now it counts!
We approach the gate again and the guards perk up since almost no one is coming out of this direction, ever!
I mean in the east only lies Akaras, a fortress city, the wilderness, and our abandoned mine.
While Akaras is to a degree supplied from Ekoras with general goods, this isn't the usual route.
So the only ones who could come from there are we who left in this direction.
Naturally, Liqu and I have our cloaks and masks on.
And naturally, the mood is still downed.
"Ah, you made it back!" (Horace)
Please, don't ask where Chris is!
"Mhm." (Shari)
"I take it. It didn't go well." (Rodin)
At least he remembers who we were.
This might be due to the fact that we were the only ones leaving that way.
Usually, adventurers would use the south gate, as it is the more direct way into the forest.
"Not that much. Could you please make it fast? We really need some rest." (Jacob)
"Sure, but I have to ask what you brought there with you." (Rodin)
"Just some voidstone, monster parts, and proofs of subjugation, aside from the equipment we initially brought." (Shari)
I show a sample out of Elin's bag.
But the moment I touch it I already feel the drain.
I realize that this was a bad idea when only my gloves are keeping my hand from disintegrating through direct contact with this anti-monster repellant.
So I quickly put it back in.
"Oh, you really were going to that mine! I've heard it's especially bad around there." (Horace)
With a rather dark tone, Jacob speaks.
"It was. You can see." (Jacob)
Honestly!
What a stupid question if fewer come back than initially ventured out!
“Uff!” (Horace)
Rodin gives Horace a jab in the side.
“Well, it seems that everything is fine, so you can enter.” (Rodin)
It seems like painful embarrassment can speed things up.
We take him up on this invitation and just like this are back in town.
It was a hard time but nonetheless, there is first something we have to take care of.
“I know you want to go and call it a day, but before this happens we have first to go to Tamarah. We need the money now and I’m sure that you don’t want to have to meet up again tomorrow.” (Shari)
They grudgingly accept, even if Myra’s mood is rather dark.
At least she didn’t make a scene at the gates.
Like this, we are on our way and eventually reach the market where Tamarah’s shop is located.
As soon we open the door I again notice the abundance of disturbing residues in the air.
I am rather sure Liqu can identify what they are, having dissolved each of them at least once, yet I lack this knowledge.
“Hey Tamarah! We are here and brought your stones!” (Shari)
And out of nowhere she suddenly stands behind the counter.
“Ah, if it isn’t my favorite business partner! Oh, Elin! You've met them?” (Tamarah)
They know each other!?
"Yes, quite some interesting folks, right?" (Elin)
"You can bet on it! It was a fortune to meet such outstanding individuals and gain their favor." (Tamarah)
This comment makes Liqu again a little jumpy.
Probably because she doesn't like that anyone else gains my favor.
It might be best to brush over it.
“So here they are!” (Shari)
We empty the bags with the stones on the counter and Tamarah starts in an inquiring manner to examine them.
“And? Satisfied?” (Shari)
“Well, overall it seems fine yet there are some with significant impurities. However, I value the deal we have agreed upon, so I will take them all. After all, your liquid is of especially high quality and I could nowhere else get it this fresh!” (Tamarah)
And again I shiver inwardly!
Next, she goes into the back room and returns with a small box.
When she opens it I look at a fortune.
The box is really crammed with coins to the brim.
It is rather trusting to show this to us, but Jacob is more of a decent guy she seems to be well-acquainted with and I on my side cannot really risk being involved with anything that might put the guard on our tracks.
Despite this, I have still some ethics going for me.
Anyways, you can see here that her common clientele is of the wealthy kind.
Out of that box, she takes six gold and sixty silver coins and places them on the counter.
“Ahem, Jacob. Take the sixty silver. I… guess you will need it.” (Shari)
Not that I’m especially generous but because of me their team will now go through a rather hard time, since… not much is left of it.
So I want to do something to ease my guilty conscience a little and this helps.
Also in my opinion Elin hasn’t earned her share and gets rewarded in another way, so I will distribute it like this.
“I don’t like this. It hurts my pride as a professional. Sigh! But you’re right, we don't have much of a choice.” (Jacob)
With this Jacob accepts the money and the two of them leave.
Rather hurried that is.
“Did something happen?” (Tamarah)
“Chris… died.” (Shari)
“Oh, did a monster kill him?” (Tamarah)
A monster, huh?
“He tried to kill both of them. And failed.” (Elin)
“My condolences then. I hope you two don’t blame yourself too much. Haven’t known him long. Was Liqu very bad on him?” (Tamarah)
“No comment!” (Shari)
Not everyone needs to know!
I take the money without saying anything else.
Six gold should also be easier to transport.
“Oh, and I would like to take you up on our agreement. You weren’t here for quite some time.” (Tamarah)
“Uh, sorry but both Liqu and I are full right now and have barely anything to spend. It would just be detrimental for us if we would give the matter which contains energy.” (Shari)
We just ate all our provisions and intentionally emptied ourselves since it's less consuming to travel "light".
After all, we have to refill it at a cost by taking in stuff that we have to buy.
And I would want to limit such purchases as much as possible for reasons of inconspicuousness.
This deal wouldn’t make sense to me.
“Oh, now that you say it. Last time I didn’t think about this, but now I've got an idea and would like to buy a liter of the rich one for five silver. Is that alright? (Tamarah)
This on the other side sounds much more appealing.
Considering the price for the flesh from last time this would be quite a profit.
“Fine, if it’s just this.” (Shari)
“But naturally I want you for this.” (Tamarah)
“No! She's mine!” (Liqu)
“I just meant her matter.” (Tamarah)
The offer is of value, but I really don’t like to sell… well, myself.
"I would even add a nice little bonus.” (Tamarah)
Liqu is nonetheless grumbling.
“She's still mine!” (Liqu)
“Okay, you can have it.” (Shari)
Before this slime embarrasses me even more!
“Great!” (Tamarah)
She brings a flask from behind the counter.
Big enough, but it looks uncommon.
“Please fill it in here and don’t stop before you give it to me.” (Tamarah)
I take the flask with one hand and let my glove glide down from the other.
The now bare hand I bring to the opening and completely unobstructed it runs in there.
You never feel this much that your body is made of liquid and not normal, as when you have it filled up in a bottle.
When I hand it to Tamarah, in a blink she has grabbed it and corks it up.
Like this, there is now a bottle filled with me, ready for sale.
I feel considerably conflicted about this!
Especially, with the look with which Tamarah examines it now.
This smile gives me the creeps!
“You have what you want, right?” (Shari)
“This will be surely interesting! Such an ingredient is not easy to come by!” (Tamarah)
“Then please our payment!” (Shari)
“Sure!” (Tamarah)
She procures another five silver from the box and also two more of these flasks.
“What’s the meaning of this? I won’t give you any more!” (Shari)
“No, no! They aren’t for me, they are yours!” (Tamarah)
“Excuse me?” (Shari)
“I said I would have something extra for you. These flasks are made of a special kind of glass and imbued with earth magic to make them more durable and more importantly impervious. Like this, the energy should stay properly contained!” (Tamarah)
This sounds interesting, however…
“And why are you giving them to us? They should be incredibly valuable. (Shari)
“See it as an investment into our relationship. You can use them to fill mass inside and always have some for emergencies at hand. And with those bottles no one will be too suspicious. ” (Tamarah)
“Then, thank you I guess.” (Shari)
“No problem. Please come back soon!" (Tamarah)
"By the way, can I buy some cloudshroom here?" (Shari)
"Cloudshroom? Why would you want this?" (Tamarah)
"Personal reasons! Can I?" (Shari)
"I have some but... well, I guess you don't need to be too cautious. So the safety instructions are kinda obsolete. " (Tamarah)
With this, I get the particular mushrooms from her and have to pay one of our just-earned silver coins directly back to her.
"It was a pleasure to make business with you." (Shari)
Just half true, but there's no reason to be rude.
"As well as on my side! Come back soon! After all, you have quite a value for me.” (Tamarah)
I know she means as an ingredient!
Kinda creeped out I hurry up and leave the shop.
Now I have to plan my next steps!
Thanks for those chapters~ that fic is so cool.
Glad you like it. This really motivates me.
Money collected, shiny new bottles to make slime potions with, and getting rid of Jacob and Myra? All in all a productive chapter for Shari and Liqu. Plus Elin I guess since she'll be tagging along
I finished getting caught up. I do like the story. But I think I enjoy Formicea more. They each have their own respective perks to them. I feel that Slime Girl has a more character-driven story. Slime Girl has more story and personal elements of the characters. While Formicea I feel is more about the Body-horror element and the intrigue of what will happen next. Each share elements with each other. Both have things I'd say do better than the other. The body-horror element of Formicea I think will always win. Just cause turning into a bug creature than being called Princess and having to lay eggs is a bit weirder and messed up than the slime.
I like the premise for slime girl most. The fact that she's something that can't be injured or chained up. So it's fun to write about her adventures since she has the most versatile body.
On the other side, I believe that Formicea has the better world-building, regarding description of places and overlying politics.
And if I ever can get a cover for it I guess my eldritch horror has the best character interactions.
By the way, it's impressive and honoring that you managed to read this in one day. Wait for tomorrow.
@expentio Oh, has it really been a day? I guess two or so if you count Formicea. If I find a story I like and am not busy, then I'll be spending a lot of time just reading that. I even kind of put off playing Cyberpunk 2077.
Mmm, I think they both are lacking, and in opposite ways at that. Here we have a protagonist with a functioning brain capable of making decisions, but the story around her is not as grand and unusual - we had too much reborn as monster stories already, so making one stand out is rather hard. In formites protagonist, despite being way above age she'd be considered an adult in Medieval times is ret*rded, unable to adapt, and just obsessed with the same problem for over 100 chapters(egg laying). But both have a decently built world(obviously, since both are set in the same one) and decent side characters. If author ever rewrites one of them into a proper novel, they both could be considered way above average. But as of now, the writing here is bare minimum that would be required to convey the story. Dialogues are dull and there's too much useless or often repeated information. Descriptions of actions are basic, and there's barely any actions made by characters whike they talk
@GoblinsRule You know, I am no native speaker, so some grammar issues are kinda unavoidable. But most of what you mention here is about my personal style. And that's just that. I don't claim it to be extraordinary good but many are fine with it, coming from the comments and ratings, so I think generalizing that it's bad would be wrong.
On another note, you're now on the third story of mine which you reviewed two to be below average. So they might either do something right or there's another reason I just can't see.
@expentio the only reason i rated them as such is because i can see the potential. I don't try to insult you in any way, on the contrary I realised that you could write so much better, that I would readily buy your book. But you don't, for some personal reason, so i just wanted to point out the problematic parts. And speaking of being non-native english speaker - i barely could read a book in english 5 years ago without constant access to a dictionary. But after getting through 3 or 4 books I barely ever use it. So it comes with practice, and there's no rush. I was just pointing out, that you COULD make your web novel into a proper book at some point. The stories that I consider bad I wouldn't even bother to rate, usually, not saying about writing reviews or comments. But it doesn't mean that I have to ignore shortcomings which I see in stories that are potentially good, and just praise it without rime or reason.