The quest book.
The book contains a hundred quests and grants a reward for any person who completed it.
“…”
“…”
I found myself staring at the plain black book without even a title.
And before me was a bookseller, staring at me with her undivided attention.
Is it okay?
I asked myself.
I’m in the starting line of my journey to know everything about this new world. Accepting a quest book would somehow derail my objective one way or another. But there is a reward waiting for me there.
This is not a fluke... right?
If I ended up doing the quests earnestly only to find out there was no gold at the end of the rainbow, there’s no doubt this will be my dumbest decision ever. Nope… I’ll be one of the dumbest people in history.
As I was having a hard time making a choice, a certain incident helps me to decide.
I see...
I shifted my mask at the book which glowed after I did something about the thief.
“S-so… A-are you going to take it? Mister Philosopher” she spoke with a shaky voice.
“I’ll take it,” I said nonchalantly.
This book just glows after a completed a quest. This was the evidence that something was waiting for me upon its completion. Isn’t unraveling the mysteries of the book coincides with my objective?
I also think having adventures while taking quests is more enjoyable. But there’s no need to get serious about the book. After all this just a side quest.
From the book, I shifted my head to return her earnest gaze.
“I’ll be having an adventure so I shall take this book for pastime.”
I have 3 comments, not on prologue content for the first two, but on the story title and the cover art and punctuation.
First, using the Caps Lock key to enter the title does make it ... less than fun to read. If you wish to get and keep readers, you do not want to annoy them ... right? So I know authors can rename their stories in their dashboard. You can do as you please but I'll be so grateful to see a more normalized title case.
Second, the cover art looks nice ... where the characters are concerned. You have the title on it twice? Honestly the angled title text is more appealing to me. Leaving a background of the covered title (and now I wonder if this isn't subtle humor too) feels an innocuous extra detail to distract the eye. Otherwise, pleasing characters and angled text layout.
Now, punctuation ... on the other hand-
This is not a fluke right?
Normally between fluke and right, one would like to see some punctuation. Either a comma inserted after fluke, or an ellipsis ... like this. Either of them will indicate a pause in thought.
I see
In this, in all paragraphs, I would expect to see an ending punctuation. Either a period, or -- in this case, less common though justifiable -- the single hyphen-
"I'll take it" I said nonchalantly.
"I'll take it," with a comma too, looks nicer.
"I'll be having an adventure so I shall take this book for pastime"
Again, this is missing an ending punctuation.
... granted, English might not be your natural language but I as a reader can still understand. I only wish to help with these examples.
Thanks for the guidance.
I's true that English wasn't my natural language so I was still having hard time to construct beautiful sentences. So I'm inclined to make a manga more than the novel. But I'm willing to learn the light novels :)
I think the text got duplicated....
oh... thanks
Interesting, with that you shall have my support as well!
woah... tnx
this was actually a plan for my manga though.