Chapter 3:
Bad Worlds.
*A few hours(?) earlier...*
Cam kept on walking, and as she did, she noticed something happening to the thread. It was becoming thicker, and when she passed her hand through it, she could almost feel a susbtance, almost.
She was giddy and excited at this discovry, as what could it mean other than she is getting closer? So she kept on walking, a bit more power in her steps after this discovry.
Cam followed the pink thread, for hours and hours, and it kept gaining more and more thickness, but no matter how far she walked, nothing new happened other than the thread thickening.
At one point, Cam's body was ready to give up, even though her mind wasn't, her legs simply couldn't carry her any further.
The moment she dropped to her knees, too exhasted to even stand up, she heard a wierd splashing noise coming from underneeth her, so she looked down and saw as her sweat was dripping down and splashing into a pool of... Something red.
Cam's eyes traced along the source of this fluid, and her eyes widened as she finally saw something different from the total darkness that suronnded her for hours before.
Cam was excited, thinking she finally found something, but a moment later, her mind blanked out, trying to proccess what she was witnessing ahead of her.
A room filled with wierd contraptions, a fire place, her friends, and 6 other figures.
Cam tried to stand back up, the moment she tried to, something pushed her back down, hard, and she cried out in pain.
She tried looking back to see what was holding her, but she also couldn't, as her neck wouldn't move at all.
And then she felt it. It was not someone holding her down, it was something, she didn't know what that could be.
The thing holding her down then forced her head into a different postion, and she watched as Ana was being carried by two of the 6 figures she saw ealrier, into one of the wierd contraptions...
What ensued after would be something engraved deep into Cam's heart, mind, and soul.
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When Cam was about to drift into unconsciousness, she made a vow to herself. She vowed that, if she was given a second a chance, she would take all the power she could get, and save those who are dear to her.
Eons later, The book "Stories of Mages From The Past" Would have the last of its chapters be about Cam, The ArchWitch.
The chapter would tell the story of the time Maria, the Mind Mage, would control 97 of her fellow Mages to kill The Shadow Witch and The ArchWitch. After succesfully killing The Shadow Witch, Cam, The ArchWitch finds out, and Kills all of Gods, and takes her own life after, wiche marks the end of the God's era.
Cam's eyes opened slowly, and stayed only half-open, as she gazed into the stone cieling above her.
She was laying on a cold, and judging by the cieling, stone floor.
She didn't trying getting up, her mind too exhausted to even give the command to lift a finger up.
She stayed there, in the same postion, for what felt like hours, but according to the timer ticking in front of her, less than 8 minutes had passed.
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The shining hologram between her and the ceiling looked like something straight out of a video game, but Cam couldn't even get excited about the prospect, about the implication that this is a different world, and that it was game-like.
She had read many stories and novels telling the story of some shabby dude or gal getting transported to a different world, becoming overpowered, getting harems, getting rich, saving kingdoms, and all that other bullshit.
She liked those stories, and always daydreamed about herself being one those heroes, about being the best swordswoman in the world, or being so strong she could cut a mountain in half.
Cam used those daydreams to escape from reality. From her real world, where her parents died in a car accident while coming back from their 15th marriage anniversary vacation, leaving a 12 years old Cam all alone with her uncle. The uncle who twice tried to rape her, until Hana's mom reported him to the police and she moved to live with Hana, her sisters, and their mom.
Cam liked to engross herself in as many stories as she could find, allowing her to escape into worlds of wonder, away from all her memories.
Cam didn't like those worlds of wonder anymore.
Cam didn't like her world either.
Cam didn't like any world where her loved ones were hurt.
Cam didn't like that she could do absolutely nothing to save those she loved.
Cam was annoyed with herself.
Cam was upset and frustrated with her weakness.
Cam was angry. Cam was Angry.
Cam wanted to vent her anger upon something, or someone, and the moment the timer reached the 10 minutes mark, a target appeared.
Thanks for the chapter.
CAM WANT TO SMASH!!!!
I noticed that you edited the previous chapters to be in the third person, and have noticed that you have a rather, unique, way or writing, but I think that it is pretty likely to keep readers interested! Keep up the good work, and I hope that you can make your own community here on scribblehub! Also, potato.
Thanks for reading!
Can you please elaborate more on the "unique way of writing" part more...
@MemoDaBoi Yes I can, I'm just saying that your way of writing is unique as in the previous 2 chapters had a lot of "herself" kind of language, which is non-standard in most of the stuff I read, but I do think it is a nice change of pace compared to what I read normally.
@ImAPotato Oh, well, I guess I know where this comes from as I read somewhere once about someone asking about this, and getting the answer that using his, her, himself, and herself is totally alright, and even encoruged if you can allow the reader to distinguish who you are referring to. Guess that influenced me without me noticing.
I personally think skipping the torture entirely necesarry now that I have read the new chapter
also add a lot of blank lines and a you have been warned line to the previous chapter will help alot of people with avoiding it. (Also a good idea for any *fun* moments for people who like a story but don't want to read smut
Here is an example
Warning
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You have been warned.
Did... you not see the warning in the second chapter?
There was a whole line warning you of the scene, in BOLD LETTERS!
I needed the scene to give the idea to the reader how broken Cam's mind is, also, if you didn't pick up on it, the last bonus was for her staying partially-sane.... so yea. The scene was needed, otherwise the state Cam's mind is in wouldn't be truly explained.
Thanks for reading :D
@MemoDaBoi when I'm tend to just keep reading when there is nothing that to break my pace. Even one or two extra lines between changes of view can help someone who reads fast notice a change that needs to be noticed and not just keep on reading.
@Huskeylord Well, that's what I was going for.
I knew some readers wouldn't want to read this part, so I put the warning, but I didn't want to break the pace of someone who's actually going to read it, as breaking the pace of reading is a big turn off for me when I read a story.
I think that the Gore tag, the Adult tag, and the warning before the scene should have been warning enough.
Thank you for your feed back :D
@MemoDaBoi you kinda cut off there but I get it. Your story and your way of writing. I'm not here to foce you to change. I'm just here to read and give advice when I feel like it. Up to you to take it or not depending on how you feel the advice will affect your story and writing style.
@Huskeylord And I truly appreciate it :D
The cut off wasn't supposed to be there, so don't mind it ;)