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I’m wondering/think it might be interesting if the next chapter starts/is her sister’s perspective and thoughts during all of this
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It's kind of supposed to be a joke! When a kid is begging they pull down on the parent's clothes. Or even when a dog does it. So it just kind of ended like that.
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They pull down the T-shirt. And beside to get their attention, I never heard of kid pulling down clothes. Ì
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@WtfIsThis It's also kinda like a 'no please don't go, I'm begging you!' while holding onto their clothes to prevent the person from leaving them. And from her likely being on the ground, she was only able to grab onto her sister's shorts not her shirt and pulled onto them too much therefore pulling them down and 'undressing her sister'
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Interesting start.
Looking forward to more.
Thank you for the chapter!
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it added a layer of anoniminity
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Anonymity
No matter now hmany times I pinch myself
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No matter how many
up, well not like that worked...
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The thoughts part doesn't flow that well in this sentence
AAAAAAA
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This is my feelings everyday.
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Ah. I think I have managed to fix everything you pointed out! Added, ever to the sentence: Well, not like that ever worked... Should hopefully flow a lot smoother that way. Anoniminity kind of... i don't know, head thought it was right since it had no pop up error. Then forgot this isn't word and that it won't correct misspellings...
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Knees wrapped in hands I had resumed my duties.
"Waaaaaaa..."
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Lol great job there
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Cuteness is justice, so 5 stars. I mean if something cute stabbed or otherwise hurt/kill me I'd propably still be ok with that
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People : *Freaking out because of this body*
Otaku : *enjoy this body*
MC : *play VR games*
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This cover is really good. One of the few character were their drawed version is at the same level at the text version. In text you can just write "MC is more beautiful than a god" and she/he will be. But in the drawing version, you can say she/he is more beautiful than a god but either you are right and you drawing skill is the best in this Universe, either no, he/she is not. And if its the second choice, you will just looks like someone who brag about something but its not worth being brag.
Short story, your cover is really cute, I love it !
Thanks for the chapter.
Now my foremost concern is - how is she going to wear the VR gear with her horns in her head?
Em. Special strips? Or it might become a plotpoint :D
@ImACuteDragon That or the heavens might reward her with horns that function as upgradable VR gear.
@Xyll-246 or just the VR headset is on the back of the head and don't comme to the forehead so no problem
@ImACuteDragon Well, a lot of the current systems are held on by three straps (one around each side and one over the top, all meeting in the back), so finagling them past horns wouldn't be that hard...
@Piisfun yes. But maybe its full-dive VR. Or just normal VR
@WtfIsThis A lot of the fictional Full-dive systems would be much harder, true.
Linking this just because it is slightly related and funny... https://www.airspacemag.com/flight-today/barfology-27456212/
If the update rate doesn't exceed that of the mind, or the turning and movements speeds are wrong, this is what happens.