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As I added to authors note: Break until ~15th, I'm rewriting older chapters, getting them profesionally edited for the betterment of the story.
But this is going to be the only time I rewrite this novel, as such I want to make sure it is right. And to do that, while I might have my own opinions, I want to also know what you- readers liked/hated the most, so that I can improve on the bad parts, and keep the good ones.
I obviously prefer comments, but I know many of you are too lazy to do that so I also included an extensive poll! Yey!
Changes you want to be made
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Start the story in the future, when snek is stronger, and then include flashbacks Votes: 5 6.4%
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Keep the story from weak to strong Votes: 57 73.1%
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Increase the action/plot density Votes: 8 10.3%
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I like current plot density Votes: 33 42.3%
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Increase the number of normal life events Votes: 17 21.8%
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Side story with more human characters that will meet MC Votes: 16 20.5%
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MC should get stronger faster Votes: 26 33.3%
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More mystical stuff, like prologue judgment and old snake story Votes: 7 9.0%
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Less mystical stuff, more snek Votes: 30 38.5%
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More lore (but more interwoven to the story) Votes: 19 24.4%
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Less lore Votes: 3 3.8%
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Current lore levels are okay Votes: 37 47.4%
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MC should be more proactive Votes: 18 23.1%
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I want to understand MC motivations more Votes: 16 20.5%
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More snek family Votes: 32 41.0%
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More dream-mind infiltrations Votes: 29 37.2%
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More fights Votes: 11 14.1%
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Less fights Votes: 4 5.1%
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More split personalities Votes: 20 25.6%
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Less split personalities Votes: 28 35.9%
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Improve your writing style Votes: 19 24.4%
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Current writing style is okay Votes: 19 24.4%
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Moving and sad parts (brother goodbye, mother) more Votes: 12 15.4%
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Some philosopical questions maybe? Morality of jacking minds? Votes: 8 10.3%
Total voters: 78
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My biggest problem is trying to follow the story. It’s very hard to tell who is who and what is going on many times. It really needs to have an “anchor” topic that it returns to and establishes grace periods to recap different things while giving enough time for the action.
good point, will try to include it, I think that finding a friend or someone to beta-read chapters for me would help (i'm hiding this writing webnovel thing from majority of people I know, so I guess it's time to come out :D)
seems i am the minority who enjoyed confusion when mindscrewery happens like gecko fight eh? i always was under impression that was intentional. i would like "clearness" of story relate to MC handle on his own mind. think that would be more interesting then usual switch to 3rd person when MC loses control in many other media
That was the idea, that the confusion would help us empathise that MC really, REALLY has a problem, but I can also understand how it might be too much for many. Hmm but this is a challenge I knew I took upon myself when writing the story, and so I will try my best to make it work
I guess it's a bit like when you make MC unlikable on purpose- you might succeed, but is it worth it? There has to be some balance. Hmm
@Reisinling eh... they can bounce. its rare for author to even attempts that though. couple famous examples are Shield Hero and Arifureta. usually japan sticks to dense crybaby troupe till the end which is disappointing, more so when they use stat systems and boost their int 10>1000 or something and MC still cant tell apart rat from mouse. side characters usually have more success with bouncing and some gone from cunt to best for me. MC usually upgrades to "ok" i guess it comes from confidence? if at first this Snek was scared of everything invading his mind it was disappointing but when he showed initiative and started exploring mind of fish... that was a big yes. making own currents instead of waiting to be swept in someone else's. as for confusing narrative... moderation? say we meet a mouse and get to experience its point of view but next time we gloss over it instead of relieving it again? like MC training for some flashy move and we get narrative of the process but after success we just get move name and thats all? no intricate works on how he moved mana etc to achieve same move over and over
@Lachlann I see. Thanks for more feedback, I believe most of it will be addressed