I guess i died... So this is death im guessing
-notice, you have been accepted to use the system
Huh whats this?
-beginning user creation
-user has to choose between a demon and a hero
Demon/hero
I don't feel like helping people anymore im just tired can i just sleep in peace
-not granted user has time period of
-1 hour
-before system auto magically chooses
Well that sucks
I guess i choose demon....
-beginning
-success
-transformation shall begin in
3
2
1
0
i felt a strike of pain at my feet slowly moving up my body it hurts so much that i almost pass out i guess i cant do that though as i have no physical body right now.
-time period before transformation finishes is
-2 years
-sending user to crystal formation
please stop the pain is unbearable it hurts even more now
(Two years later)
huh it doesn't hurt anymore
Why dosent it hurt anymore
-formation and transformation is complete opening status
Name: unknown
Str:10|Agi:5 |Def:10 | Mag:0.100
Race: demon
Tittle(s): |reincarnation|
Skills: |pain resident|(Lvl max)|appraisal|(Lvl 1)|limit breaker|(Lvl 1)
Remaining skill points: 100
No wonder i don't feel anymore pain
-user has 100 skill points
-user can use skill points to upgrade stats or buy new skills
-would you like to use skill points
-yes/no
Yes
-yes has been selected
Satus
Name: unknown
Str:10|Agi:5 |Def:10 | Mag:0.100
Race: demon
Tittle(s): |reincarnation|
Skills: |pain resident|(Lvl max)|appraisal|(Lvl 1)|limit breaker|(Lvl 1)
Remaining skill points:100
Put 30 into str, 20 into agi, 20 into def 10 into mag
Name: unknown
Str:40|Agi:20 |Def:20| Mag:10
Race: demon
Tittle(s): |reincarnation|
Skills: |pain resident|(Lvl max)|appraisal|(Lvl 1)|limit breaker|(Lvl 1)
Remaining skill points: 20
Open skills i can buy
-yes
Skills: |necromance|dark magic|dark wings|shadow manipulation|dark strength|dark steps|
How much is each skill
-10
Ok buy dark wings and dark steps
-comform
-yes/ no
Yes
-confirmed
-adding skills
-success
Satus
Name: unknown
Str:40|Agi:20 |Def:20| Mag:10
Race: demon
Tittle(s): |reincarnation|
Skills: |pain resident|(Lvl max)|appraisal|(Lvl 1)|limit breaker|(Lvl 1)|dark steps|(Lev 1)|dark wings|(Lev 1)
Remaining skill points: 0
-notis
-user creation is done would you like to continue to the world
-Ark
-yes/no
Yes i would
-success
(Everything would go black and soon after he would wake up to see the blue skys but instead of one sun he saw 2 suns)
Wow thats very pretty and a pretty big upgrade from pitch black
(He would look down at his body and see a lot of white he would lift his hands up to see claws)
Seems like a demon much.
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How the hell do you misspell confirm and spell it right in the next sentence? Look over your work man
Dude, there are WAY too many typos. Not to mention the chapter was helluva short.
Ill try to make it over 1000 word next time
[ pain resident ]Typo?
I like it, he literally lived in pain for 2 years.
There's something wrong with the calculation here
Name: unknown
Str:10|Agi:5 |Def:10 | Mag:0.100
Race: demon
Tittle(s): |reincarnation|
Skills: |pain resident|(Lvl max)|appraisal|(Lvl 1)|limit breaker|(Lvl 1)
Remaining skill points:100
Put 30 into str, 20 into agi, 20 into def 10 into mag
Name: unknown
Str:40|Agi:20 |Def:20| Mag:10
Race: demon
Tittle(s): |reincarnation|
Skills: |pain resident|(Lvl max)|appraisal|(Lvl 1)|limit breaker|(Lvl 1)
Remaining skill points: 20
I'll let you discover it
I already know thats why i changed the status screen cause this one gliches
@Killman223 40 str
25 agi
30 def
10.100 mag
Nice idea~
This looks interesting. Hope you have fun with it.
The bold thoughts felt weird, might want to choose a different way.
There isn't much emotion to the character, at the start he felt tired, but near the end I couldn't feel anything from him. (i am also terrible at this so i know it's hard to fix this)
You might want to explain his thought process more? What did he think of this system he sees? Why did he choose to allocate his stats in that way? Why did he choose those skills in particular? Did he regret spending most of his points on stats? Is he just going on whims?
I will try that in the fourth chapter
nice start
Good thing were named Ununknown.