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Stay Votes: 3 17.6%
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Go Votes: 9 52.9%
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Figure out your own story--lazy fan author. Votes: 5 29.4%
Author's Note:
I will be deleting a large portion of this chapter--because it is non-canonical; but some of the information will stay, some of which will be used later.
There is, of course, some 'random' information--the fact that both Roxanne and Sherry sleep naked, clinging to the MC like he is a body-pillow.
-- The first part of the dream however is some spoiler-ish 'backstory' (Which is why I am currently keeping certain parts 'censored', and haven't written the entire dream, only fragments) that may or may not appear in the rewrite in the future.
This strange dream it won't make much sense, by itself, before certain chapters are rewritten and released--they will be released in fragments, each one slightly different.
Sprawling out in front of me was a massive city; massive metallic buildings extending endlessly up into a steel-gray sky. Looking down, all I could see was a network of roads and buildings--I had no idea how high in the air I was.
The sound of a door closing behind me drew my attention from the wall-sized window that I had been staring out of.
“*****, come on. It’s time.”
A beautiful girl with black hair and green eyes had entered the room.
***
Alarms were blaring, black lights flashed.
“Damn it.” The black-haired girl, ******’s ******, spoke with irritation in her eyes, “Well, at least there will be a ******…”
The two girls were running down a partially destroyed hallway, a strange writhing mass of shadows and pulsing flesh chased after them. Screaming faces appeared and disappeared, pushing up against the ever-changing blob.
Every time a face appeared, a beam of black energy would shoot out.
“******!” ****** shouted, calling out the other girl’s name in a panic as she dodged a blast of energy that vapourised the wall next to her--a thin shell of multi-coloured light flickered around her, the shield triggered by the splash-damage.
The monstrous mass of Flesh chased the girls, its numerous faces now appearing on the same section of its body--all of them still alternating between emerging and collapsing in seemingly chaotic and random ‘patterns’ -- but they were now only paying attention to these two.
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“It seems that we will have to leave.” ******’s voice was despondent as she stared out the window.
The once glorious cityscape now in ruins, smoke rising endlessly from shattered and broken metallic husks.
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It seems that I was woken by a strange dream, confusion clouded my mind for a few seconds before I recognized the familiar softness of the bed in my new home--as well as the fragrant scent, and warmth, of the two girls who clung to me. They occupied both of my sides, wrapped around my arms as though my limbs were body-pillows: one arm was buried in a large, fluffy, valley; the other, however, was slightly lonely...
Though the smaller cushioning was still soft and comfortable, a delight in its own way.
When I shifted position slightly, preparing to go back to sleep, Sherry let out a small noise in her sleep, snuggling up against me; her arms tightened as though she was trying to stop me from getting away.
Roxanne didn't even notice--for as long as I had shared a bed with her, she seemed to be a deep sleeper.
With a smile, and a pleased mood, I closed my eyes with a sigh, happily relaxing into the warm and fluffy feeling of the two naked girls pressed against me.
This chapter is still un-named (and not officially cannon) until the next chapter release in a week--if it clashes too much (or I come up with a more entertaining idea) it may be changed.
Though the two girls, and the destruction of that world, will stay cannon--the arrival of the horror itself is currently variable. (The first part of the dream, and maybe later uncensored ones) will stay.
While I am planning/considering, and doing a little mapping; I will also put up a poll (feel free to post opinions either way in the comments as well).
This blob of evil should be a parasitic being that invades planets to eat them, lets callit blobactus (galactus).
I dont remember anything like it from the original novel, so author is this new stuff you cooked up?.
Now the big question is, how the hell do I defeat a "monster" that can withstand the temperature of atmospheric entry ranging up to 2000ºC and a heat flux as high as 1000 kW/m2 and crash land with no injuries at over 10km/second...
GUYS! LETS PACK UP AND LEAVE THIS PLANET XD
It is new stuff I am working on.
Not only does it consume everything--it also:
can take the form and power of the eaten biomass, improving itself almost endlessly--evolving like a zerg.
Well, that's the question, lol.
@Tek be careful, you might create a world ending monster and at some point you are... how the fuk can the mc kill this thing!?. Give it a weakness of some sort that the people of that planet can exploit or something.
@TypeFantasyHeart I planned on it.
If you are curious:
It is weak to Magic, having been made on a Science Fiction World. That and its mass is so great that it can only be a single super-powered being for very short periods of time, without massive amounts of sacrifices (it can be starved to be weakened--and then exiled/destroyed with Magic). The Gods have also been preparing to fight it.
Well, I am interested to see how it plays out. It is curious to me, what made you want to branch off the story at this point of all times? For me, this end of the world plot thrown in does kind of go against what I like about this particular story in the first place. I think what I like about the original is the slice of life nature with some dungeon exploration and romance/harem elements (poorly written of course). This eldritch world-destroying-hopping horror goes against that. Still, I will read this to see how it plays out, as this is obviously the story you want to tell here.
I decided to branch off around now because slice of life gets incredibly boring--and there is only so many times you can repeat a fight in a Dungeon before it feels like writing Xanxia ("Die!", "No, you die! (something about your face, spitting blood, and ancestors!" xInfinite. Along with random inserts by the followers of the Dao of Explanation (explaining every move in minute detail, before getting shocked and saying that there is no way the MC can live--before being instantly proven wrong xinfinite)
Don't worry, after the palate-cleanser of a minor Eldritch world-destroying side-story, it will get back to the boredom of slice-of-life.
And worry not, it won't stop the Dungeon stuff completely for a while, since the MC needs some power--and
the evil flesh is technically frozen and asleep; though it will slowly wake up.
@Tek I just don't see how he wins without some kind of absolutely bullsh*t power up and that worries me.
@Fulanoide Unless it isn't just one being and it is literally like
the zerg in that it is a lot of beings that evolve controlled by a leader
@Fulanoide Technically there are 8 enemies (The big one, and the 7 smaller, which are creatures formed as its lieutenants -- who need to gather energy for it to wake up *Energy being Human sacrifices).
And maybe something like the MC not actually having to fight the main body--just the 7 minions, and armies of 'corrupted' *controlled* enemies (Demons) -- the main body will be handled by
a certain pair on *****s mentioned in a dream.
@Tek I see, a lot more reasonable.
@Fulanoide It is much too early for a true Eldritch Horror; though if it were Death March, and the MC had his Magic -- he could erase one (In the original, within a few chapters of getting his magic he kills giant space creatures that (unless the translation, or my memory are bad) are almost planet-sized.
@Fulanoide And in DM (the original) as soon as he gets Magic, he makes the whole sky glow--because he uses a spell in space that would wipe out the entire planet if it had been hit *he gets Aze to cast a massive hologram and say that the Elves did something (or was that the second time he almost destroys the planet by accidentally miscalculating the power of the Magic he casts from his orbital space-station--because he can't use most of his Magic on the surface)*
@Tek Slice of life isn't boring, per se... provided there is character development. How our MC's relationships develop with the harem is important. So are the details as they add new harem members.
Even after that, I remember when reading the original story that the relationship with Roxanne was the "main" one... or so it seemed to me. That was a thread of a slow romance that helped to keep the novel going too. =)
@Lomyril The relationships in the original were very unbalanced (the MC only seemed to like Roxanne, while sleeping with/leading on the other girls) which is why I have removed 90% of it and made it more equal (and will continue to do so--since a harem like that, would fall apart, ending badly for everyone.)
Though there wasn't anything even remotely approaching character development that I remember (I got bored around chapter 100 - 150...since it was the exact same stuff over and over; even the MC never learning and constantly causing everyone danger when he acted like an idiot in fights). It may have gotten better later--
Slice of life is quite boring, mainly because you can skip 10s of chapters (only reading the romance/s*x scenes...if the MC isn't a Beta-Cuck), and not miss anything. The main thing that bothers me about it is that there is never any change, it's too much like real life--nothing ever changes...
@Tek I can't recall how many harem members he had before I quit reading it too. I think at least 4. I hope your story gets to that number as well simply because I like the characters. =)
Still, some of why I stopped reading it was because of the slow translation rate.
In any event, keep up the good work! I look forward to seeing how this goes.
@Lomyril I hope to keep the same harem characters (with a few minor changes...like giving the cat-girl a personality--she didn't have any, or any intelligence in the original (Almost more cat than humanoid, at least mentally) if I remember correctly).
Thanks; I hope I can keep the work good, or at least readable