I've been biting my tongue a lot to keep from having an essay at the end of every chapter. So here's the bonus chapter to take care of that. Hopefully next bonus I'll have some drawings or something to share. might even try to see if I can get anything from an ai.

Current Story

We've arrived at the end of the second story arc, The Putrid Plot. A scheming rot filled ghoul, with the help of a benefactor sent to him by a mysterious organization, seeks to create a cursed necropolis. However his plans are foiled by someone who refuses to be a bystander to the evils committed.

Or something like that. (next arc's temporary name is Headstone Heist)

While the last chapter was an info dump on the Tenth there is still a great deal more of lore to the group. Especially in regards to Elman, something that would break some of the fundamental beliefs of the church. Which I have yet to fully lay out, but I will give a little tidbit here about the church. They believe that Elman's ascent gave a bounty or blessing upon the world. I'm hoping I can write it to parallel, but not intercept with the idea of dying for others sins. 

Perhaps I'm being a cheap copy, but I've found many famous works of fantasy tend to have strong christian themes, references, and moral ideas.

LoTR and Narnia being two prime examples.

World Building

The prior two examples of literature have direct connections to the real world, and as such can easily have all the same creatures and wildlife without anyone raising their brow. However, this one does not. Which is why I seek to create more originality even down to the animals. (Just ignore the boar at the beginning I'll rename it to Bodar and describe it a little different)

The Ardwoof is this worlds equivalent to a dog, notably with a rat's tail. A rat dog. Not terrible unique I suppose, but believable. The wolf equivalent is the Arfdol. I originally made the name with random syllables, but realizing I had integrated 'arf' the sound a dog makes I decided to make the rat dog have a dog sound in the name too.

I shouldn't say this but if you look closely at the races tab, you'll notice they're just reskinned fantasy races. But, they do have their own unique traits that you likely haven't seen before. additionally the history of their origins is definitely out of the norm.

One problem with all this though, I haven't figured out a good fantasy horse replacement. There's always the bird or lizard mounts that you'll see in other works, but realistically these have issues. The Lizard could only be used in warmer areas, of course more importantly reptiles are almost always obligate carnivores, so keeping one fed would be an issue. With the bird it would have to be flightless. As it would be of frailer constitution since birds have hollow bones to make themselves lighter. Not the biggest inconvenience, but it would still be bipedal making it have less stamina and carrying capacity.

Maybe a four-legged bird you say, but that's just a griffon. 

Glossary

As the world-building has progressed I've been adding to the glossary. I do intend to continue doing this and fleshing it out more. However, I'm uncertain at how much I want to add, as to avoid spoilers.

An example being if I give a explanation of the lore for an antagonist from the later part of the story, and a reader who is still in the early part goes to the glossary and discovers the current villain dies becoming the catalyst for the later stage antagonist's grudge.

Or the problem with providing even as little as I have with the race tab. It may ruin the reveal that a character has ancestry with a certain race, If I give too much detail. 

Removing Stuff

I've been thinking about going back and deleting the notes I've made on previous chapters. As some have been made irrelevant and confusing after having rewrote the chapters to have the same style I adapted as I progressed into the more recent ones. This also includes deleting the intermission chapter.

Questionnaire

I have long asked for feedback at the end of most chapters and have gotten very little. So here is a series of questions that may help people think of a critique or remember one they had.

OokamiKasumi from the forums provided this questionnaire. 

Is it BORING?

• Does any part of the story Drag?
• Are there parts that you skipped to get to ‘the good part’?
• Do I over-inform (info-dump) anywhere?

Did you GET IT?

• Did you understand every phrase / term I used?
• Did I forget to mention that someone was demon-possessed, half angelic, or had mystical powers?

Did it WORK?

• Did it make you laugh?
• Did it make you cry?
• Did it scare you where it was supposed to scare you?

Do the scenes FLOW?

• Does one scene lead logically into the next?
• Do the scenes flow smoothly from one action sequence to the next, or did they jump as though something was skipped?
• Is there enough downtime between intense scenes to allow it to build to the next?
• Were the Flashbacks smoothly integrated to fit onto the current scene, or did they seem plopped in, like a chapter that was in the wrong place?

Is it TOO MUCH?

• Is there enough down-time between intense scenes to allow it to build to the next?
• Does any part of it make you cringe in a Bad way?
• Have I crossed the Comfort-Zone line?

Is anything VISUALLY Confusing?

• Can you SEE every action clearly?
• If you went there in real life, would you recognize the locations?
• Did you have to reread any part of the action sequences to understand who was doing what?
• Could you SEE what the characters looked like clearly?
• Did I forget to describe their Clothes, their Hair, their Eyes, or any other distinctive feature?
• Was I smart enough NOT to use grade student descriptions such as: "She was five-foot, seven with double-D breasts"?

During DIALOGUE scenes…

• Does the Dialogue sound realistic for the individual characters?
• Could you SEE what the characters were DOING while talking?
• Could you SEE where the characters WERE while talking?

Did the Characters WORK?

• Do their actions & reactions seem logical & realistic?
• Could you feel the Emotions between the characters?
• Does the story stay focused on my Main Character?
• Is the villain actually Villainous?
• Were any of my female characters too much of a b!tch or a bimbo?
• Were any of my male characters whiny, wimpy, or overly dramatic?
• Who did you like best and WHY?
• Who did you hate and WHY?
• Who got on your nerves and WHY?
• Do any of the characters get in the way of the STORY?