Hinako introduced Toshi to her friends at her regular lunch table, but as she was about to sit her brother down, a boy from Toshi's class came up and dragged him away. Hinako thought about making Toshi stay with her, but figured he needed to get to know his classmates, ~Maybe I'll get lucky and he'll start to figure out how to be a guy from them.~
Hinako was the toughest girl in school. She also was going to graduate this year so there was going to be a power shift. Her crew was called Shi'suma behind the group's back. It was a mangling of the various nicknames over the past few years. Originally it was Angels of Death then Daughters of Death, then Hinako took offense at both, and eventually people just started calling them Shi'Suma. Hinako was originally called Sukeban then she got angry about that and some people started calling her Hina-Ban just to piss her off.
As much as Hinako worried about the group's reputation, they were the student body's internal 'law enforcement' and Hinako was the boss. She might not be the class president, but when it came to laying down the law, Hinako was the one everyone else looked to for order. Hinako was the toughest fighter in school and had proved it enough that nobody questioned it anymore.
Just like any organization that depends on the strength of a single individual, things were going to change when she graduated. Half of Shi'Suma was disappearing this year so they needed to recruit fresh blood to keep the group going. People hoped they would because, as harsh as they were, things had never been more peaceful since Hinako took over.
Of course, the other rising power was Naora. She had two loyal followers and while they couldn't take on Hinako alone, Hinako was the only other person in school who could. The three jumped Hinako once and she managed to walk away fairly unscathed with Naora and her pals taking a visit to the emergency room. Thanks to that incident and getting held back a year, Naora was a year behind Hinako. If Hinako didn't find a strong replacement, it was going to be Naora's time next year.
At least, that was what the primary concern of Hinako and her crew up until today. Hinako was shifting gears and moving over to the Toshi problem. Niwa Abi leaned out into the row to eye Toshi as he walked away, "Now I see why you rarely talk about your brother." She let out a low growl. Hinako let out a well-placed kick to Abi's chair under the table. Abi flailed about trying not to fall, "HEY!"
Hinako glared around the table, "Maybe I didn't make it clear this morning. That's my brother and I want you guys to keep an eye on him to keep the other girls from taking advantage of him. NOT take advantage of him."
Madoka looked thoughtful, "There is something off about him..." As she watched him leave, "He's... not walking right."
Fukami looked confused, "I wasn't here this morning. What's going on?"
Hinako sighed, "My brother had an allergic reaction to a medication and stopped breathing. He spent three days in a coma and now his brain is all screwed up. He doesn't understand... well... much of anything. But especially anything related to socializing. He's relearning everything from scratch. He is going to be easily taken advantage of and I don't want anyone preying upon him because he's got the commonsense of a five-year-old." She pointed around, "You warn everyone my brother is hands off and if anyone so much as makes eyes at him, I want their name and I want them dead." She paused then added, "The order doesn't matter."
Madoka pushed her glasses up on her nose, "Then you are going to have to kill about half of the student body." Hinako looked at Madoka who in turn pointed at Toshi. Hinako looked over at Toshi, sitting at a table of boys from his class. Most of the boys were just talking to each other, giggling, and in general being like boys. Toshi wasn't part of the group. His body language was all wrong. He was too quiet while sitting too boldly. He was aggressively shy, or passively intimidating. He just wasn't right. He was trying to keep up with the conversation, but seemed to keep fading out. The real problem was he kept looking around the room. How a girl knows a guy is interested in them is eye contact. The girl stares and the guy either ignores them or stares back. That's how it works. That is how it has always worked. The guy only stares back if they want the girl to respond.
Toshi was making eye contact with every girl in the lunchroom.
The more Hinako watched, the more insane it got. Girls all over the room were laughing and pointing and clearly talking about her brother by their glances and gestures. Toshi just smiled and sometimes even waved. Everyone started watching as this impending disaster unfolded. Abi muttered out of the side of her mouth towards Hinako, "Is your brother a slut?" Hinako's smack to the back of Abi's head was so fast all anyone saw was Abi's forehead bouncing off the table.
hes taking this too lightly!
Thank you for the chapter, continue with the good work!
the story is being very different from the comedy that is the manga but it is still being very interesting
Funny chap, but where’s the juice…
Why is everything so sexual? Like i get that it's just that kind of story but simply looking at somebody won't make you a slut. And then there's that sexual assault that so many of these stories have. The amount of gull some of these people have while still in school is f*cking crazy. The prisons must be overrun by now lol
Well, the focus of the story is to highlight the aspects of the alternate universe. So, I am focusing on the differences more then the plot, but... Uh... wow. This is going to be so weird, but uh...
I worked on a suicide prevention hotline as well as a councilor in a TLS. Hate to tell you this, about 95% of what you are going to read is a personal experience or a story from someone. I just flipped the genders. The story of the girl who went to a new school and sat down at a table and "looked at too many boys" on her first day at a new school?
Let's just say it wasn't a happy ending.
Hell, If you found yourself talking to me in a professional capacity, you and happy were as far from one another as was physically possible. I'm holding back, dude. I have multiple cases of men who I couldn't even CONVINCE that they were raped by women, no matter how much it was obviously ruining their lives.
"Dude, you were 12, she was 38."
"But I got laid"
"Your first sexual experience being a blow job before you hit puberty is bad."
"ThAt AIn'T R*PE! WoMen CaNNot R&PE Men!!!"
(Is it bad when the horror stories all just blend together and it's hard to tell them apart?)
@TheEldritchGod Maybe im just unclear on what kinda story this is? My assumption was a more generic (not in a bad way) reincarnation/transmigration story, where the gender roles are reversed. Basically like "The Man of the House" by whatsawhizzer. But if you say that 95% of the story are personal experiences of people who called a suicide prevention hotline, this'll take a much darker turn.
I don't know what you have planned, but it definitely shouldn't all be about rape, sexual assault, blackmail, etc. A story needs light moments to highlight the heavy ones and that would be perfectly done by implementing shy woman, simps, fans and so on.
Readers are supposed to immerse themselves in the protagonist. Reading a story only about heavy subjects like the ones above, is not gonna be fun. (unless that reader happens to have a fetish of course...)
There's always 2 sides of a coin.
As for your question. That really depends. Doing a mish mash of terrible things happening to the protagonist would make for a great psychological novel. You could unravel all the things the mc has gone through, eventually making him realize just how f*cked up all this has been. Right now we don't really have an actual goal for the story. Is it to get laid as much as possible? To fight against the norm of the gender roles?
@Magoth - I set up the situation, decide where all the characters are, then let things progress. Will it go dark? Here's the problem, I'm a bit desensitized. I think I'm sticking with the "light" stuff. The quirky things. And i try to include the positive as well.
What i can say is the characters, within the world they live in, are logical. Or logically illogical. I hate the idiot ball. I dont do plots where it can be resolved just by talking, unless there is a good reason for the parties in question to not talk.
But are people screwed up? Do people behave on stupid ways when they are stupid? Yes. Are things not as they appear? Yes, but i give hints. Eventually i flat out tell you what's going on.
If you want a story with a goal, that's the other one I'm writing. This one was just something I half-assed because lulz.
This one is a slice of life. A side story in a greater setting. I honestly don't know how it will turn out. The characters are writing this one. I am just the CPU slowly grinding out the equation. I have no agenda. I have no point.
Otherwise, no sacred cows here. I'll slam any archetype. I don't strawman, I steelman. I present characters, you choose whose right and wrong. I want you to actually feel for the villain. It is a much better story if the message is real, rather than "the point".
Life is messy. The story will be as well.
The only thing i should point out is that it isn't a 100% flip. I have reasons for the gender flip and those reasons lead to an imbalance. The reasons the numbers don't match up is a plot point. Why it is happening is a plot point. I'll explain why eventually, but just understand if what is told about the world doesn't match up with expectations, it isn't a mistake. Its on purpose.
@TheEldritchGod Fair. I guess I was just worried of the way the story would go due to all the sh*t that happened in the first dozen chapters. But that was most likely just premature judgement on my part seeing as how the 13th chapter went.
@TheEldritchGod dude, please please please write a 177013 in this reverse world with all the "personal experience or story" you have, i can already imagine it being crazy.
@Desustar - I was summoned is most likely the more crazy story you are looking for. For now, however, I'm cycling back to finishing up some older projects I put on hold. So I'm trying to catch up HKN. I found an old story I half finished called Hotrod Lantern that I'm putting up as "filler" until I can get HKN to the end of Book 1, then I'll be coming back to FTS to finish up to the end of book 2, then Back to IWS to finish up book 1, and at THAT POINT...
It'll be reader's choice as to which story I devote to continuing.