Location: The Galvin Mountain
In the Mountain Home to Dwarves.
Deep in the Earth Below their Ancient Hordes.
The Queen and Her finest Smiths and Runic Lords had their bodies locked in horror.
From what they'd just heard.
From the Tita...no...the Innocent they had Ripped from a World he himself likely had barely know...
A child's voice.
Sent their hearts cold.
These Heroes of Legendary Skill.
Stood absolutely stunned in the realisation that they had brought a child so young into a war that would decide the fate of their race.
In this trying moment the Dwarven Queen Stood and Opened her mouth.
Only for no words to come out.
She was trembling...She was so desperate...She couldn't breath...Her Body Locked in place...The Pain in her throat and lungs was growing beyond her ability to bear...Tears welled in her eyes...She felt Helpless...Confused...a Child wandering in the Dark...
Just as her tears started to stream down her face...she snapped out of it...this was not the way of a queen...This Was Not The Time To Show Weakness...Not again...Not like last time...
"Child..." she spoke in a Soft tone
The Amorphous Ball of Metal squished itself down like a Child to a Parent's disciplining words
"What's yer name little lad..."
The child spoke...in a high-pitched but curious voice...
"Um...Nate...wha, What's yours pretty lady?"
At this, the Queen's Tears...Stopped flowing, Her Stunned and Pained expression changed into a Beautiful Smile and she Laughed
"HaHaHA, Hello Nate welcome to the Galvin Mountain, My Name is Tyr O'Callahan, I hope you enjoy yer stay with us...yer Mother and Father thought that you'd enjoy this place whilst they went away for a little while"
"Awwww, They must've gone on another trip with big brother...well at least it's better than grandma's, she always smells funny..." Said the Annoyed Nate
"Yes, Yes, Yes...Now Nate Could you say 'Status' for me?" Said the Queen
"Uh ok Miss Tyr, Status!"
Name: Nate Stewart
Species: Living Metal(Human)
Age: 2 hours(5.2 years)
Level: 1
Con: 243
Res: 187
Str: 160
Dex: 10
Int: 5
Cha: 9001(This Child is Too Pure)
Wis: 3
Skills:
-Change Form
Description: Change your shape, size, density, etc
-Change Composition
Description: Change what type of Metal makes your for(WARNING: must have the necessary material or use Equivalent exchange to get these Materials)
-Enhance Enchantment
Description: By absorbing magical energy you can gain New functions and Better control existing abilities
-Absorb
Description: By Breaking down the Chemical Structure of a material(The Molecules)(E.g Dna, Rna, Oxygen, Water) you can recreate the abilities of the Absorbed Material or Creature
Chapter: End
Interesting thing you got going on, will hold judgment till more.
Please give me some feedback that way I can stop doing the things that make this novel bad and thus improve it's quality in the long run
@TheCursedMan If anything comes to mind sure, but i am by no means somebody who knows the intricacies of writing. Just a dude who like to read.
@5Names that's where I started out too, but by reading you can replicate and learn the tropes, then you try creating something a little different, that's what I've been doing, maybe you will too
@TheCursedMan I'll kick you in the scrode with a foot soaked in Holiwater if you stop moving forward with this story
@Tendo 2 years have passed...time to get the holiwater.