"Go! Seal the archive away!"
Amidst the chaos of a burning capital, a tall bespectacled man was leading the way to carry out the last order of his master. Holding on to his gloved hand was a flaxen-haired girl, silent tears running down her cheeks. Feeling distraught, the girl stops her feet, causing the man to glance at her.
"Milady? What's wrong?", the guy spoke in a gentle voice, with a tone of respect.
The girl trembled and asked, "Sebas, would I see Papa again?"
Sebas' expression darkened, carefully selecting his words.
"Maybe. I don't know.'', before he decided it was best not to say anything, urging the girl to enter the tall ornate tower.
Attached to the top of the entryway was a plaque that wrote: Prohobitus Autem Bibliotheca. The forbidden archive of the Ancients, it was the nexus of the capital, where all the knowledge in the realm was gathered. The Ancients were the most advanced civilisation in Wairua. Having had the blessings of the seven great elemental spirits, they created great technological advances in all fields, leading to richer lives. However, this sparked their greed, and they tried to become Gods themselves. This sparked the anger of the Gods, leading to the destruction of these people who were once great.
Having entered the tower, the pair quickly ascended to the highest floor as more explosions shook the capital. The girl was confused, looking around the floor they entered. It was the suite of the head librarian, the position of her late father. Taking out a signet ring, the man opened a hidden door through a switch on the desk. Within that room lay a capsule.
Recognizing what the capsule was, the girl could only feel sorrow. Sebas urged her to lay down, and she willingly complied, knowing her duty.
As the capsule started operating, the machinery made ticking sounds, like a bomb counting down to destruction. Sebas looked at the girl mournfully, knowing the duty that the girl is shouldering. Looking for words to say, he gave up and murmured a soft "Good luck".
The girl's eyes flashed a hint of sadness before saying, "May we meet again in Valhalla, Sebas."
The man smiled mournfully and replied, "See you too. May the Gods forgive us."
The girl's eyes fluttered shut as she entered a long slumber.
The tower disappeared as the capital was razed to the ground. From that day on, the great capital of the Ancients ceased to exist.
Many millennia had passed. The world had changed greatly. Kingdoms came and went, empires have risen and fallen, people have come and gone.
Opening her eyes, a faint beep sounded. Seeing the ornate ceiling above her, the girl was momentarily confused. She quickly got up and glanced around, taking stock of her surroundings. Seeing no one but her with only the silent tick of machinery to accompany her, a tear trickled down her cheek as the memories flashed through her mind.
Drying her eyes, the girl slowly walked around the study. Glancing at the many papers and books strewn about the library, the girl smiled ruefully, imagining the scene where her father had worked here.
Snapping herself out of her delusions, she approached the pantry. Preparing a cup of kaffe and opening the item box to retrieve a sweet bun, the girl enjoyed her small breakfast in silence.
Having finished it, the girl stretched and got ready for the day. Dressing up in the uniform for female librarians, the girl took a look at herself in the mirror. There stood a girl, looking about 16, with golden flaxen hair, gentle curves, looking chic in her uniform.
Pumping herself with motivation, the girl began her duties as the last librarian of the archives. Katia Librorum will do her best.
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From the little bit here and from the synopsis, you have a solid start for a story, but it is a start and could go in many directions.
In your poll, you are asking about revising the plot, but as yet, there is no real plot to revise. Is she going to get revenge on the Gods, go exploring the world, or what? You don't have to answer that, but the only real hint we as the readers have is that she will continue taking care of the library. We haven't even seen enough of her to get a real feel on her personality yet.
Honestly, if you are having concerns of your plot, and you are aiming for something longer than a short story, write out an arc or book or even ten to thirty chapters so you can get a feel for where your story is going compared to whatever you have in mind for the overall story, and if you don't like it for whatever reason, then revise. If you do it chapter by chapter or page by page depending on how long one of these posts is to the overall story, and you are doing major changes every increment, maybe it'll work for you and turn out okay, but more likely, you'll miss whatever bigger picture you had in mind and end up somewhere you weren't expecting, whether it be good or bad.
Oh and one general piece of advice, which I'm sure you have heard before in some variant: take criticism or suggestions (honestly, interactions in general) with a grain of salt. We, as readers, can often spot stuff you as the writer don't see or miss, didn't consider, or whatever, but we also, usually, don't have access to your master plan, so try to not let us get under your skin too much.
Thank you for your advice. In that case, I'll write on. Well, I'm a little too much of a perfectionist, so you may see lots of revisions.