A/N: After reading the comments from last chapter, I've decided to move on. Looking at the poll, it seems most people want me to just move on, so I will. Thank you to everyone that commented, it helped me a lot.
If I was to redo it again, it would most likely be changed in such a way that it would build more tension and meaning behind Chiaki's "arc," such as the build-up of the stalker starting small with his attacks, while gradually moving up to the house fire, and then more attacks that are life-threatening, and then the final arc, where Isamu confronts him.
I still wouldn't change Chiaki's sexual assault backstory, just because this was originally what I had planned for her, but I do wish I could of made it in such a way that it did impact Chiaki a lot more, and more meaningful for her acts and actions; For everyone to empathise with her greatly. Re-reading the arc again, I can see that her "story" isn't that "gut-punching" or "nerve-wracking," as I suddenly introduced it with no real "meaning" in such a way that it had caused her problems before the arc.
I wanted the Chiaki's arc to be resolved in a way, where Isamu didn't give a shit about the whole "r*pe" incident, but alas, it turned out to be rushed, with no real character building. I also saw some comments about Isamu not acting like a "normal" person, such as having these strange "impulses" of violence, and having this "hero" complex. This aspect of Isamu IS actually explainable, and you'll see why later, so don't worry. If you noticed at the start of the novel, Isamu is somewhat acting normally, such as calling the police and not intending to reveal himself until they started to strip Mei, but this time, he straight up chose the "hero" route and went by himself. Like I said, this will be explained in future chapters.
Anyways, moving forward, I won't be bringing up sensitive topics, and like always, thank you for supporting me and reading the novel. This novel started off as just a light hearted "what if a normal guy got reincarnated and didn't want to interact with the heroines," idea, to people actually enjoying my novel way more than I thought. I can't promise a good ending, but I hope that the future me is able to create an ending that I, myself, and all my readers are satisfied with (even if some are unsatisfied).
To everyone, thank you for leaving comments, and reading my novel.
I thought you meant to change the assault part... But that doesn't matter now. I like the story and stop the kidnapping acts 3rd time it will be overused. OK?
My only problem was how fast the story was going, I mean I clearly remember at one point the protagonist I think? Asked himself something along the lines of "How can a person become so attached to a stranger they just met, when they already had someone they've known for much longer, in just a week?" So like, not only was the story progressing too fast, even in the world of the story things where happening real fast too, which makes actually getting to know the characters and as such care for them, very hard.
Nonetheless I like the idea of a cool mc that's not a pushover so I'll stick with the story and see where it goes from here on.
Have you planned the ending ? If you're writing without clear outline or draft, writing the ending and deciding where it would end will become a nightmare since you will have hard time thinking how it should end.
The last few chapters where indeed a bit weird and rushed in my opinion, the idea of the stalkers aggression starting with small pranks to full on violence would have been more logical and show more of his backstory since at first most of us thought of him as a third dimensions character standing in the way of Isamu (like a player who think that the MC is a bug like character in a game). It would have transition well to Chiaki's inner struggle better aswell since it could have prepared us about the sexual violence she went through in her past.
Still, I do think your story is great, it has a familiar setting but with some original plot points. I do have to say though, if you really want to rewrite this Arc, you should write what you wish and no one has the rights to tell you what to do and what not to, it's YOUR story after all.
Well, its okay i guess, for me i dont have any problem with previous chapter tho, it kinda gives more depth into the character. But i cant say the same for other, anyway keep it up author!
Love your story author, keep it up!
People actually cared about that crap lmao. I personally like some suffering in the past so I'm cool with it.