I've tried to get into this series several times, but dropped it each time. The concept is great, I want to learn where the story goes, how the world evolves. However, the author's writing is pretty rough. It needs serious copy editing help. There are spelling & grammatical mistakes throughout every chapter, making it hard to read. Some chapters are better than others, but it's persistent. With some editing polish, it could be a great story.

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Okay author this is actually serious, and I'll start with I'm personally okay with blackmail/rape in stories but the way you handled this is bad, one that was our MCs first full s*xual experience that shouldn't be left to a fade to black moment, if you weren't comfortable writing a scene like that you should of had cassy interfer stopping it instead of her leaving the woman she claims to love to be raped, if you want Tisha to be a harem member and not the villain of the story then you could even make her stopping make sense as cassy stopping her makes her break the control the charm has on her enough to leave, the way it is you heavily implied it happened while pu**y footing around the topic, that is only going to make people drop the story because there was very little warning it was going to happen and then it was handled poorly please take this as valid criticism that it is, otherwise the rest of the novel is good, except now Tisha is a rapist and cassy is a pathetic person who doesn't deserve to call herself Veronica's bf after letting it happen without trying anything to stop it, it's fine that it aroused her but she should of tried to stop it, I needed to put this once in the chapters it happened in and as a review so that it is seen

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