Overall, this story is fairly typical of what is popular on scribblehub. Trans girl, sudden unexpected magical/supernatural awakening, fluffy tails, eldritch tentacles... It is not especially original, but it is well executed with likable characters and hints of mystery and plot. We have a low fantasy future earth setting, a not quite utopia that is doing quite well for itself despite recovering from a grimdark child soldier WW3 power apocalypse a hundred fifty years before the plot begins, but such future is where we find our MC.

Lily is 16 years old and just entering highschool (which seems to be 10th grade). She lives with her single mom who might be autistic. Said mom is eager to finally tease and cuddle Lily who till now had spent the last few years nearly catatonic from dyphoria. Lily's newly fluffy form is short, but not unrealistically so, about equal to the typical shortest kid in class. She acts a little young for her age, especially with her family. Her tentacles can punch a 6 inch hole through a meter thick wall of enchanted steel.

One thing that some readers have commented on is that there is a lot of nudity, but to me it seems more potty humor than lewds. The way Lily and her friends tell each other crude jokes is totally age expected, but not especially common in fiction. Overall a satisfying read, even if it is kind of a wallflower on scribblehub. 4/5 stars

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Status: chapter 3 the aunt

Aug 31, 2024

I have to say, this novel is...*shudder*

There's nothing particularly explicit to point to, but this feels like someone took MHA and added a ton of creepy cheese pizza to the mix. There are these moments where it feels kinda cute and wholesome which are absolutely ruined when the story proceeds to feature a mother who is f**king ancient (but looks like a sixteen year old because that's totally not the millenia old six year old vampire princess excuse with a coat of paint and a sticker over the barcode, no sir!) acting like Misato Katsuragi around her daughter.

Not to mention that it's very hard to figure out how old the main character is, but their behaviour implies a pre-teen, which makes a lot of the nudity in the first three chapters feel really off. Like, again, there's nothing explicitly wrong with it, and it's sometimes really wholesome, but then there's a point at which the wholesome cute foxgirl stuff crosses the line and becomes uncanny. All I got is the vibes I got, and that was enough to turn me away.

Not to mention that, on the whole, the story features some of the most unoriginal worldbuilding that I have ever seen. Not only does the opening infodump of worldbuilding (that's also delivered about as organically as reprocessed chemical sludge) essentially amount to "guys, why don't I just write My Hero Academia, but with beastkin???", but it also has some of the least interesting setup I've ever seen. Like, f**k, the moon exploded, but it's all good, it got put back together with, I dunno, celestial superglue, so it's all good, it's not like the moon exploding was the inciting incident of Seveneves by Neil Stephenson, an incident that leads to the entire surface of the earth being carpet bombed by bollidal orbital debris due to Kessler Syndrome (https://en. wikipedia. org/wiki/Kessler_syndrome).

like, honest to god, you had a interesting thing there, and it got solved off-screen before the story even started.

How do you beat that criticism wise?

1/5, Jesus Christ, that worldbuilding.

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