Spoilers ahead? Well, you got enough of a rise out of me that I finally made a scribblehub account for this, so congrats on that I suppose? This fic reads like if Dorley Hall was drenched in 4chan slang, bringing me back to the toxic forcefem days on sites such as literotica. Out of the 4 main characters you name in this story (Catherine, Belle, Kyle/Kathy, and Bryce), you've created maybe half a character to root for. Bryce and Belle are designed to be hate-able, which I can totally understand for a story like this. What's less excusable is your writing for Catherine and Kathy.

By all means, I will not pretend like I am above the idea of a forcefem story, I clicked on this story despite it being named in the summary, after all. Catherine loses all likeability the moment you take the kidnapping seriously. Forcefem where the protagonist is supposed to be the one you're rooting for needs to be done with levity, stuff such as a witch casting a subtle spell, or a gal pal subtly feminizing her friend's wardrobe and giving "him" nudges where they are supposed to go. Taking a more serious route could have worked as a measure to deal with how toxic her "victim" was towards her. This stops working once it's made clear "he" hasn't interacted with her in MONTHS, and that her chat regularly sees behavior as bad as this, if not worse (not that this is ok to have to deal with, but it shouldn't have stood out to her THAT much).

Kathy has a different problem in that she's designed to be hated... at the start. Her clear attachment to toxic 4chan mentalities was clear from the get-go (although that doesn't excuse nearly every character in the story being familiar with and using said language at least occasionally), and her coping methods, while unhealthy, are sadly not unheard of. Her issues mostly come in two forms: how you skipped over her struggle with the transition in between the kidnapping and her return (showing just a single skirt wearing scene before she gets busted), and the fact that she becomes just as bad as her initial captor, seeing Catherine as a role model even (to the point where you could argue Kathy is short for Katherine, even imitating to the name).

It's clear that you want them to be troubled characters who come out on top against much worse people, but they did not improve themselves enough to be worth rooting for a win. I don't know if you'll read this, considering you clearly just pasted this from another site all at one time, but you needed at least a few more beta readers to give you some different perspectives on these girls (and guy) if you wanted a story worth coming back to, and probably a half-dozen more drafts, at minimum.

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