Honestly with how your writing Alice feels Hollow and barely even a character in the story you keep with canon to the point you are ignoring the fact your making a fan fic with a different protagonist if I were to be honest with a rating 3/5 at best story wise because it's essentially just Fairy Tail with additional dialogue no difference no exploration no changes outside of Alice being mentioned the focus still seems very much on Natsu and Alice's addition feels shoddy the good side is I like the idea Alice in Fairy Tail is interesting but That's just it it's Alice in Fairy Tail not Fairy Tail honestly think it needs a re write with more emphasis on Alice and her character and less in canon of the story don't be afraid to go AU because it's a Fan Fic not the actual story explore a bit
Honestly with how your writing Alice feels Hollow and barely even a character in the story you keep with canon to the point you are ignoring the fact your making a fan fic with a different protagonist if I were to be honest with a rating 3/5 at best story wise because it's essentially just Fairy Tail with additional dialogue no difference no exploration no changes outside of Alice being mentioned the focus still seems very much on Natsu and Alice's addition feels shoddy the good side is I like the idea Alice in Fairy Tail is interesting but That's just it it's Alice in Fairy Tail not Fairy Tail honestly think it needs a re write with more emphasis on Alice and her character and less in canon of the story don't be afraid to go AU because it's a Fan Fic not the actual story explore a bit
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