I was reborn as a minor character, the mother of the main character, and the deposed ruler of the kingdom of Azeroth, Leriana Ashfordt.
My husband's younger brother will stage a rebellion against him, and only my young children will be able to escape. The unfortunate Queen Leriana is waiting for a joyless end. According to the plot, my heroine will sacrifice her life during the uprising to save her children. In the future, when her daughter Brisney grows up and reunites with her brother, she will lead a rebellion against the traitor king, and become the new ruler.
That's just not like that! To die at twenty-seven is too early for me, and I'm going to change the tragic plot of this novel.
I was lucky, and I was reborn ten years before the events of the novel began. At the time when the future King Philip and his brother Razor just fell in love with me at the royal Academy, and their fight for me led to enmity.
In order to survive, I decided not to become a queen, and to live a quiet life with my father, the duke. And in order to save myself and the whole kingdom from future tragedy, I had to take extreme measures.
— Your Highness, I'm sorry, but I can't be with you. My heart has been busy for a long time.
— What...?! — Prince Philip was furious, — Who is this?! Tell me his name, and I'll fight him in a fair fight! You'll see that I'm much better than him!
— Your Highness, you see, it's not really a man...
— What are you talking about?
— I'm afraid that the daughter of the cursed duke stole my heart at first sight.
Oh boy...
First off, this story has some weird grammatical issues, like switching between first person and third person in one paragraph. Also, for example, in a later chapter the second prince was talking to the MC about "your brother" which confused me, because there had been no mention of a sibling. Until I realised he was talking about his own brother.
Secondly, the formatting when it comes to dialogue is confusing. You either get
- I'm talking. - said a person. - I'm talking some more.
Or
"This is how I talk."
Or a mixture of the two, but there's no discernable pattern to which is used. (Also a few times where thought is formatted as speech.)
Onto the story. I really liked the premise, and the beginning... But as it went along, it became increasingly frustrating because the MC seems to lose braincells at an alarming rate.
Then we get the cliffhanger ending to book one:
So our MC is told by one of the love rivals that he can see the future, in which Rachel (the main love interest) in anger, because our MC left her to marry the prince, kills both princes and her. Our brilliant MC decides to run away with the love rival, as to avoid this fate. Does anyone see the exceptional leap in stupidity here? To avoid death because of abandomnent issues, our MC... Abandons her.
But... What really brings the rating down is because the author decided to paywall the rest of the story after this trainwreck of a cliffhanger.
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The writing style is not bad its readable and sometimes enjoyable the only problem for me is the - for talking id prefer " " as its less confusing and when the characters switch to 3rd person and back to 1st person is also very confusing for me. I really did enjoy reading this, but the MC is really dense and it can be annoying sometimes. I would like to read the rest and support you by paying for it but I sadly cant as I do not have the money for that, so if you do post the rest that would mean a lot bc I cannot be left on this cliffhanger.
where our DENSE AND STUPID MC leaves our love interest!!!!!
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It's alright. The storyline is interresting. The character aren't 2d. There the grammar error like quotes sometime it's " other time it's -. Sometime the quote appear in the middle of sentence that isnt need. My only real crit is the ending for volume 1.
The MC is very naive. Makes promises one minute then broke that promise the next, which destroy someone mental and physical.
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