My first impression of this one was lowered a bit by grammar mistakes. However I liked the premise of a urban fantasy centered around a bullied high school main character. School settings have really broad appeal.

The high school students actually act like high school students which is a plus.

However the bad outweighs the good after a while. Very little is done with the conflict with Tom and his gang. 

This one also suffers from spending way too much time in Eli's head space.  Having to read angst for hundreds of words at a time gets old fast 

Also the traditions are really jarring. There are times when I read and then all of the sudden think wait what? How did we get here?

The power crafting thing is not a compelling system. Frankly it just becomes a pain to try to understand after a while. Good power fantasy stories stick to a theme for a character's ability.  It seemed like this was the case at first. Teleport then telekinesis, breaking space, working towards portals...

However, eventually it just turns into a hard to understand mish mash of different stuff. What is void shadow photon powered body augmentation shadow strength? After a while it just reads as gibberish.

Run on sentences are the norm. Very little is clear and concise.

So my conclusion is that this fiction has good and bad but one outweighs the other.

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