I've read up to the 3rd chapter so far. I started reading because honestly, the author asked for a review so here goes!

The story is well written. Descriptions are clear, grammar is good, word usage seems correct and there seems to be some direction to the plot. Characters act more or less as would be expected and the world such as it is so far seems to have some coherence.

As for what I'm not necessarily thrilled about, the story starts out waking up in a new body with nothing showing their previous life. It's mentioned as fuzzy memories, but I prefer the show rather than tell method of conveying details. Also, the character clearly isn't on board with this new body or location. I'm not the biggest fan of dark themes and this looks like it's heading in that direction. If it continues getting darker I'd probably drop it. That's a personal preference thing, a lot of people seem to enjoy darker stories. I have a preference for stories which aren't doom and gloom (unless they're funny.) There's enough doom and gloom in the real world in my opinion.

Now it's early in the story still but if I were to make changes, I'd probably put in a chapter before the change. Flesh out the main character a bit on Earth so we have some idea of who they are/were and perhaps how they ended up dragged into this situation. Losing clarity of memories is one thing, starting with a cardboard MC is another. It can be considered a stylistic choice but it's one that rubs me the wrong way.

Do you want to read this? If you like isekai stories with systems it certainly seems like a start. The writing isn't a mess and the story has direction. If I haven't turned you away with the previous paragraphs and the tags don't indicate subjects you don't want to read about, I don't see why you wouldn't enjoy it up to this point.

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