A very good story so far. While there are some grammar or spelling mistakes, none really stand out. It’s a very easy read. The leveling system/ stats are loosely based on cyberpunk. The story is more original and characters different. Some of the dialogue is a little to stiff and doesn’t really fit but overall it’s just fine. The setting of the city needs to be described more. There is very little detail about surroundings. If this is improved the scenes can be established better and cause people’s imaginations to stir. This is part of building a world. The MC isn’t hardcore or underwhelming. Hangs out around the middle which isn’t bad. I would definitely give a recommendation to read the story. Others should definitely help this other improve this by providing productive critiques so the author can improve more. Promising at this point.

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Directive58

Status: chapter 84

Mar 10, 2024

An enjoyable read with an MC who make generally smart choices from start to finish. The MC's personality could use a bit more fleshing out I think. There are times where he insists "I'm not a good guy I'm just in this for the profits" within his head I can't tell if he really believes that or just doesn't realise that by the standards of the world he is in he is 100% a good guy.

He can be a bit of a murderhobo but that's to be expected with a system that gives xp for killing and he goes out of his way to kill scumbags.I think the only real disappointment I have so far is that he has invested so many skill points into cybernetics but as of chapter 84 only has one that is custom built.

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