Wow, what the fuck? Can't you like... stop making these things as chapters?!
I mean I could...
- Regarding the poll, I mean that, if I see the need to make a chapter on "earth" should I make it or simply skip it and pretend it happened inside the story? Kind of like "Oh right, I had family." But it ends at that instead of showing the family and their relationships.
Anyway, today on Azrie news, author makes notes as chapters and completely disregards readers! In all honesty, I just wanted opinions. For I... Am impatient, and wanted to know what everyone thought about the story; I know it has gaps, it's not perfect and at times feels like a bait and switch.
I wanted to kindly ask anyone that felt like it to review my story.
But, why?
Well, I can't tell why, I would simply like critical opinions about things, wrong and right things done in the story. Please don't tell me you'd like better descriptions since that's just my trash writing style.
So what am I exactly doing here. Well, aside from a poll. I am here to say, I am going to incorporate a break in my schedule!
Preposterous! Azrie, must post daily! — Literally no one ever.
I know people have been insisting on taking a break at times, I didn't want to... I refused to do it, but at this point I am basically forccd to. I actually cannot process scenes at times because my headcanon is bone-dry, I know roughly where I want it to go, but that's about it. Usually I can make pivotal points, i.e: I want the character to realize something as they walk there. Now it's kind of like they walk there. The more this goes on the longer it takes to write a single chapter.
I also kind of fainted and had to go to the doctor. But that's not important!
So, yes. My new release schedule is mostly going to attempt to be the same, by the same meaning: 2 chapters one day, 1 chapter next. Note: I will release either 2 chapters or no chapter, if there is supposed to be 2 chapters in that day. So I will be taking a break on weekends! It's not really a break, but at least I go free from pressuring myself to get a certain quality before a same-day deadline.
So, this is the "second chapter" today, I am justifying myself by saying I released two chapters today even if it's entirely not true. Which is why I believe I had to make the statement above. Because I """promised""" two "chapters" see the problem? I am simply relieving guilt from myself at this point. I like my work ethic, but life keeps getting in the way of writing, so it's been hard. I would love to post Rin art here, but I don't have the time to draw things anymore. So have a bird instead.
*Author posth picture of random bird instead of Rin*
*Angry nerd noises in the background*
But okay, you want criticisms? Here are some: don't you feel Leah lacks determination?
What's her goal? Buy and save Rin? Then do it, even if it makes other side characters notice something's strange with her new behaviour. No wait, I should stop here, that basically sound more like a "suggestion" than a "criticism".
I don't know what you plan for Leah, nor do I wish to be spoiled. But the absence of a main plot at the beginning was more or less covered with the need for Leah to survive her first day, so it was fine. But now she's settled, has an unethical work and an unamused but kind(?) boss. What is she trying to survive now?
Actually I think that's just me complaining... But anyway. Stop saying you don't know what to do with your characters. You can't *know* what they want to do, because you're not them. The moment you imagined them, they became themselves. You can *imagine* what they would do as you can *imagine* what people in the street want do to. You can't tell if you don't love them.
Do you love Leah? Do you love your story? If you don't... Then we will be here to make you remember.
Hope we'll see you soon on the discord. Take care.
You forgot the desert option
Hey if you don’t take care of yourself there is no story, also I’m enjoying this story so far it’s a bit confaluted but it’s coming together. that goes back to what I first stated without the author there is no Leah...
So first nice bird really.
For the story perso I like it. You're story is not perfect yes but honestly what stories are perfect ? Like really ? A perfect story would be loved by any and everyone but that don't exist Blob Highfive
Finally you take breaks. Really go for 2 chap one day, 0 the next or 1 chap one day, 0 the next. Take your time for make it right.
And get some damn sleep! No fainting does not count.
Which brings to mind an experiment the Soviets apparetnly did sometime during the Cold War(I think) I read about long ago. Keeping people awake by any means for extended periods of time to observe the effects of sleep deprivation on them. It really was not pretty. It drove people mad. Get some sleep.
@Arkus86 And to make matters worse, them fainting did not, actually, make it any better.
And in addition to making them crazy (which was able to be mostly fixed, just some PTSD and a bit of mental self-doubt along the lines of "Am I seeing this right, or is it a hallucination?"), it also made them have problems falling asleep and staying asleep as a permanent effect.
Also it was done on what were essentially PoWs without the same protections because reasons, so when whatever country got those people back, they got malnourished insomniac lunatic PoWs with several extra sides of PTSD instead of... the standard malnourished PoW with a small side of PTSD that they were expecting.
@CaTastrophy427 em, what?!?!
@Azrie You just need to sleep ok
@Azrie Yeah, that was my reaction. It's also not exactly the best chapter to include in a 6th grade history textbook, but... *shrug*
But also, SLEEP. For you, it's, what, 15 minutes until ass o'clock right now?