Rooooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaaaaaaar! Boom! Rumble.
The entire cave was filled with light flashes and sounds. I had thought that a dragon was strongest when it was out in the open. It could fly up and out of your range. It could swoop down with fire attacks. It was truly the master of the sky. However, Dragons didn’t do so bad in caves either. I got knocked around a few more times, desperately casting magic on myself to heal the damage. I was pretty sure I was struck with the claw of the dragon at least once.
The worst part was that I had no clue where my girls were either. I couldn’t heal or support people if I couldn’t see them. There were dozens of shadowy figures running around just out of the range of my light. The one set back of light was that it had a range and then sort of died. Real light could reach to the corners of a dark room. I remembered once as a child even being in a cave and shown that a single match was sufficient to create enough light to see. However, the spell light gave you a range of about 40 feet, and then it went to the infinite darkness of the cave.
The one thing I could see within my forty feet was the dragon, whose form filled the cave as it spun wildly, unleashing roars and sweeping attacks. I remained just out of its range as I glanced around, looking for the familiar tail or ears of one of my girls. I had never been in a battle like this before. Is this what a battlefield felt like? It was very confusing and disorientating.
“Lydia!” I called out.
“Lydia…” A mocking voice suddenly called nearby.
I glanced toward the voice to see Balrack there, grinning in my direction. I let out a sigh.
“Really? Now?”
“Now that I see you without your pretty little escorts that you cower behind, let’s see if you’ve really got strength when it’s one on one.”
“We’re battling a dragon! Everyone’s lives are on the line, you idiot!” I cursed, pulling out my sword.
“Shut up!” The man cursed. “You think you’re better than me? I’m going to kill you, and then I’m going to take all of your slaves and rape them to death!”
“Rape, rape, rape… it’s all rape with you. Is it because you have a small penis that you can’t seem to enjoy a woman outside of rape?”
“Y-you… take that back!” He lunged at me with his ax.
I just managed to deflect his blow. He was really strong and I did find myself being pressed. His attacks had a berserker-like quality to them, and he really was stronger than me. This fight actually really was humbling. I felt fear for a good thirty seconds until I realized that, simply put, my skills were better than his. In fact, the more attacks from him I experienced, the weaker I began to realize he was.
“You pampered noble!” He cursed. “Just because you got taught all those fancy skills doesn’t mean I won’t be able to kill you. Don’t be thinking you’re better than me.”
He was getting angrier by the moment, and the dragon suddenly roared, bringing my focus back to what was important. While this idiot was having a pissing contest, my girls were fighting a dragon without my support. I had been too cowardly to attack him outright, and thus this fight had dwindled on for several minutes. However, enough was finally enough. I started to feel a tinge of anger at how much of my time this idiot was wasting.
“Actually…” I said, changing my grip and preparing a spell. “I was normal like you. I’m not beating you because I’m a noble. I’m beating you because I am better than you are.”
As rage formed on his face over the words I said, I cast an air and earth spell and sent dust up into his face. Using a quick attack, I sliced heal and then did three more rapid attacks. Balrack collapsed to the ground in a heap. I didn’t kill him, but he wasn’t going to get up any time soon either.
"I didn't kill him"......
Balrack: "Greetings, I'm an unapologetic asshole who wanted to kill you, and have non-consensual sexual relations with a bunch of people that you care about. You spared my life once before, and in return, I still want to have non-consensual sexual relations with these innocent people who have done nothing wrong, and then sell them off to a life of abuse and mental, if not physical, torture when I get bored of them.
I think you should keep letting me live, after all, I can't try again if I die - you never know, maybe a miracle will happen, and I'll get some magic experiment done upon me, or get possessed by a ghost, or somehow beat a dungeon and get an amazing lore ability, or just train a crap ton, get strong enough to beat you, and then I'll make everyone you care about live out a wretched rest of their existence. "
MC: "You know, I like the cut of your jib! You really sound like a totally nice, and redeemable guy! I'm gonna let you live again!"
Balrack: "Great! I'm going to think about in which specific ways I should viciously rape each one of your companions now! I can't wait until I can put it into action!"
MC: "I'll be glad to see it! "
Balrack: "No you won't! Because I'll have killed you!"
MC: "Oh. Right, hahaha "
Me: "Why does this piece of refuse continue to exist?"
Because Deek hasn't killed any humans yet and doesn't like the idea? He gets there eventually, but it's still a few volumes. I know how y'all love your protagonists being murderhobos after the first chapter, but this is a story with a long and gradual change.
@whatsawhizzer even without killing him, there are still more cathartic resolutions. It just feels like he basically slapped him on the wrist. He could have, I don't know, parried an attack, then kicked him in the crotch or something, at least give a little catharsis.
Also, I wouldn't call killing a single murderer / rapist after surviving several weeks in a world sometimes fighting for your life against albeit monsters being a murderhobo - not like those stereotypical chinese MCs "did you just sneer at me? Damn, now I'm gonna have to kill your entire clan AND sect."
It just feels like the MC didn't do enough. When someone harbors a great amount of ill will towards you and or people you care about, you have to do something! Anything! What, is he planning on turning him back in to the guards? If the Bandits (besides Balrack, of course) don't turn on them after the dragon is dealt with, do you think they'd just be fine with that? And even if he did manage to turn him back in to some guards, it didn't work so well the first time, yeah?
Just feels like the formation of another loose end. A loose end that can eventually have the possibility to tie itself into a noose for the MC.
I'm only being critical because I really like your story, btw, don't get me wrong - I'm not just hating on it.
@whatsawhizzer errado.
Nois gostamos de um MC que parece um humano.
É como se um estuprador invadisse a casa do MC e falasse que vai abusar da mulher dele na cara dele, eo MC batesse no cara e jogasse ele na rua. Só para isso se repetidr de novo e de novo.
Sendo que o MC sabe que esse mundo não é a Terra, e já está nele a um tempo já. Mas a mentalidade dele é daqueles heróis da justiça que pensa que todo mundo tem salvação e não faz nada com os vilões.
Não queremos que você faça o MC matar uma pessoa só por olhar torto para ele ou por ser parente de um bandido.
Queremos que o MC não seja um cara que passa a mão na cabeça de bandidos e estupradores como você faz ele fazer.
Mesmo quando eles fala na cara dele que vai matar ele e estuprar as mulheres dele, como já fizeram com outros. Você faz o MC perdoar ele dando desculpa a esquerda e a direita.
@Dr.Smut Agreed. Granting mercy to scum while on a battlefield where every second could mean the life or death of yourself or your loved ones makes the MC look like a weak willed fool. Going through even a single life and death situation makes people reevaluate themselves and their outlook on life. Multiple battles for survival will cause even the most even tempered of people to become willing to kill. The fact that he isn't there yet just highlights how truly pathetic he was at the start and how slow he is to adapt. It is frustrating on multiple levels because this was a perfect moment for him to take his first life in order to toughen his character up a bit. When will he start learning and growing as a person and not just through his stats?
@whatsawhizzer mc is in this world more than three months, and most of this time is spend fighting and in mortal danger, he even fights with intent to kill some creatures that show intelligences and resemble humans but when a bandit tries to kill him twice he is unable to kill him because he is human. You seem to have very poor undestanding of people and their behavior.
@whatsawhizzer condescension. Cute, though hardly surprising.
I'm glad he can sleep well at night. Honestly, though, he feels like a sociopath. All this fighting and killing, threat of rape and bodily harm, even dying, and hardly an emotion shown by him. No nightmares, no PTSD, he's been fighting monsters for months and he shows no battle weariness at all. And yet you want me to believe his feelings are stopping him from even attempting to end the reign of terror of a murderous rapist? With or without resurrection?
I know you justified it earlier by saying it wouldn't make a difference (he could get resurrected and come back at the MC (as if he isn't already doing that)). It's not his problem, right? Ballsack's future victims certainly aren't his problem. No reason for them to prick his conscience, right? One murder by your hand is definitely worse than who knows how many future murders and rapes. Not his problem. The guy might not stay dead anyway, right?
Then why the hell is he sticking his nose in all these other anthills if they're not his problem? He's probably not going to be able to kill this dragon (except of course he will), or so he's said several times, so why bother trying? It's not his problem. Plot armor solves everything.
Butchered and burnt corpses of villagers affected him not at all but killing the filth of the earth would break him... why? Why would anyone think that was realistic. There's less armor on a battleship than on your story.
As an aside, you have the shortest chapters of any story I've read on this site and you have the balls to condescend to folks and claim we want blood after the first chapter? We're more than 200 chapters in and you sneer at us claiming we wanting something chapter 1? It's no wonder your characters are cardboard cutouts if this is what you think of real people.
What reason do you have to post chapters this short? You do it to pad your chapter numbers (so people looking for longer stories see yours) and to keep your story on the front page (posting smaller chapters more often is more visible than longer chapters less often). You do this to shill your website. I normally wouldn't criticize folks just trying to make a buck, but you then come into the comments and condescend and sneer at people questioning your plot choices. I'd tell you you're better off not reading the comments, but you only care enough to condescend to your readership. You clearly don't even care enough to fix the spelling and grammar errors in your story pointed out in the comments. *Chuckles* and the person you got to edit your stories on your website (or so they said) posted in the comments and didn't even bother to use capitalization or punctuation.
All of this comes around to the conclusion that you don't actually care about the quality of your writing as long as people will pay for it. Which, fair enough, but you can hardly be offended when your weak writing is pointed out considering you very clearly don't care about quality in the first place.
Funny thing is dude literally said he wasnt gonna chance and dumbass MC still let him live lol so its not even like he tricked him MC just that stupid