“S-seriously?” I asked, looking over at the bunny with amazement.
I had been warned that there was some issues between animalkin and the foxkin variants, but that was something that happened in Dioshin. As for the city of Chalm, which took itself as a place that benevolently protected slaves, I was a bit taken aback by this sudden proclamation. I felt a tug on my shirt and looked back to see Miki there with her head lowered.
“It’s okay, Master… I’ll just sleep outside.” She spoke, her voice just a bit shaky.
I gritted my teeth and stood up, putting my hands on the table. “No, if you’re not welcome here, neither am I.”
Miki looked up at me, her fox ears slightly lifting hopefully and her tail wagging just a bit. She wasn’t healthy enough to be sleeping outdoors. What were we going to do?
At that moment, the door was pushed open and the Guildmaster walked in. “Deek, I just heard.”
I blinked. “Heard that Chalm is full of prejudice people?”
The Guildmaster looked like he had been slapped, while a couple of others had ugly expressions on their faces. The bunnygirl was biting her lip, looking back at me with a strangely regretful expression.
“Just bear with us a moment.” The Guildmaster bowed, showing me a bit of respect.
The Guildmaster walked forward and grabbed the bunnygirl’s arm, whispering some words into her ear. The two argued back and forth in hushed whispers while I remained standing, my arms folded in front of me, and a displeased expression I couldn’t take off my face. In truth, I had seen Chalm as better than this, so for them to show prejudice against this foxgirl, it really did make me feel sad, angry, and just a bit disappointed.
“Fine.” The bunnygirl finally said, shooting us one last look and then turning away with a huff.
It was the Guildmaster who approached me, lifting his arms with complicated smile on his face. “Deek, please, sit for a bit. I’ve resolved the issue for now.”
“I doubt that, sense she hasn’t apologized.” I said.
The Guildmaster winced. “We deserved that. I will apologize in her place. I’m sorry. After hearing you were seen in town with a sickly foxkin, I came immediately. I knew there would be trouble.”
“What is this about?” I demanded, still feeling anger, even with his apology.
“I’m sure you’ve probably heard. Foxkin variants have a tie to the spiritual world. Other animalkin have a sensitivity to it. They can pick up on the otherworldly aura. I reckon this foxkin has a really strong one. They fear it instinctively, and over the course of time, it became a cultural norm to keep spirit foxes away. They call them bad omens which only bring disaster."
The foxkin nodded sadly. “My own parents left me. You saw how Lydia was looking at me. She clearly hates me.”
“She doesn’t…” I wanted to say that, but I didn’t really know.
Lydia had been acting a bit weird since I had brought Miki back to life. It was very possible she was filling this unease just like everyone else. I felt bad about it. There had to be some kind of magical item or ability that would allow me to diminish the effect for her. I’d start looking for something tomorrow.
“What about our stay?” I asked.
“I’ve… convinced her to let the foxgirl stay with you for now. She’s close with that bunnykin that went into the dungeon with us. He’s alive because of you, and she feels she owes you this much. As long as you take responsibility for the foxgirl and don’t flaunt her in public too much, things should be fine. I’m human, so I couldn’t begin to understand how animalkin feel on this issue. However, I hope that perhaps with your friend here, I can finally change the town's mind on foxkin. Up until now, foxkin are the one type of slave we’ve never freed.”
“But Figuro brought her here hoping to sell her to you.”
The Guild Master sighed. “That guy always has been a bit of an optimist. He may seem like a shrewd guy who is only concerned about money, but as far as slavers go, he really does want the best for his slaves. He won’t sell to nobles who would treat their slaves bad, but he’ll quickly buy from them, even if he takes a loss. He’s that kind of guy.”
The door opened and Lydia came walking in humming to herself. In her arms were several bundles of supplies. When her eyes fell on the three of us, she cocked her head in confusion.
"Master?"
“I’m going to return to the Guild Hall. If anything comes up, send for me immediately.” The Guild Master explained. “Oh, and I’ll stop by the bathhouse on the way and make sure you don’t experience further problems.”
“A bathhouse?” I didn’t even know that was a thing!
The last few nights, we had been doing sponge baths with sponges. They gave us a hot bucket of water every night. However, it looked like this world had something called a bathhouse I hadn’t even been aware of.
“M-master…” Lydia suddenly said. “Can we go to the bathhouse?”
Apparently, she had a similar mind as me. “Yes, since Miki is still ashy from her death, it’d be a good idea if we all cleaned up tonight.”
“Master…” Miki, whose mischievousness had been muted since the incident, looked up at me through her lashes. “I am too weak. Master will have to bath me.”
The packs in Lydia’s arms fell to the ground. She leaped forward and put her hands on the table.
“M-master will also have to bath me too!”
Instead of offering to bath Miki herself, she went the opposite direction, it seemed.
Honestly I thought I'd already given this a rating, but apparently I was mistaken. I've since changed that because I really do enjoy reading this, and you do an excellent job writing it. I was admittedly disappointed that the nsfw chapters were reserved for patrons but that's mainly due to my financial situation more than any issues with you.
I can't personally see any reason why story would deserve 1 or 2 stars ratings. To me, those should be reserved for stories that have obvious issues.
i will second this comment. being unenployed sucks.
It does have a few issues but they are spaced out enough that I don't get upset, also I've read way worse
@kpta no it doesn't (it's more of the no money part of unemployment) if you had
3 billion to 1 trillion would you care about working
Thanks for the chapter!
Honestly though, from all the stories I'm following it seems like whizzer's stories always seem to have rude entitled readers in the comments. It's not like others don't have it, but it's so much more frequent on whizzer's stories.
Probably cuz it's wish fulfillment, along with the smut tag.
@Yamemai There's also proper criticism around too, and, unfortunately, most of them cover only the more basic set of problems. The inconsistency of the MC is one of them, but I'm pretty sure the MC was written in a way that makes him unlikable to a substantial amount of people. And no, it's not because of the self-depreciation and negative self image (which apparently went poof).
I, myself, do not really care for a weak-minded, easily swayed MC that slowly transforms into his own after experiencing a journey. I'm fine with reading something like that even if I don't like it that much as there is development (as long as other characters don't act like they are always holding the idiot ball).
This MC's traits were given at the summary, expanded on in the first few chapters, and… huh… what was his personality again? He just "knew" what a Slave trader does in this world? He gets told what to do and gets forced into it? He is cautious and takes things slowly and with calculated estimates? Uh… wait, now he knows how this works? That works?
Yeah, that's the main problem. Some consistency would be nice.
It's like watching a DID patient playing foosball but the other three voices are on the opposite team, only for you to score a field goal at half time before one of them cross-checks you.
@winterFox2 maybe but I really haven't found any real substantial proper criticism though. Just stupid shit. Like really making something out of nothing kind of bullsh*t criticism. I don't consider people bit*hing about something that doesn't suit their taste too be criticism (not talking about you) and I haven't seen any inconsistencies with the MC. The slave trader talk is a misunderstanding that y'all didn't read right... just saying... and even if I'm wrong about that, it's f*cking slave trader. How hard is it to figure out how to do his job?
Lol, I just want to say I was mad that the po*n was hidden as if it didnt relate to the story. In the grand sense that may be true, but to me the story seems incomplete without it. So like the good lil boy I am I decided to pay a dollar and see for my self.
In the end it didnt change much, but reciving 3 chaps a at a time feels way better than the short chapters read here on this site. My personal pref really... so for now I think ill stay, like one of your slut heroines. Begging patiently...
Well worded response and I appreciate your honesty. I look forward to every new chapter of this novel, so I was a bit sad to see the release rate drop, however at the end of the day, you're the author and I respect your decisions in regards to the novel. Even if you dropped it, I would just be sad that one of my current favorites is gone.
Release however much you like. I'm just grateful for you writing this novel in the first place.
"I doubt that, sense she hasn't apologized." I said.
Shouldn't it be "since" instead of "sense"?
And to the paywall stuff: It disgrunteld me because a chapter is behind a paywall. It didn't bother me because that it wasn't essential and was just a s*x scene, so I was happy I can easily skip it. So minus + plus = neutral, so in my opinion everything is okay.
The decreasing rating could also be because of the situation with the "kidnapping" of Lydia. Around this chapters it felt to me that the author didn't care about the inconsistency the reader felt and bulldozed forward. I even stopped reading at this point because I didn't wanted to read this drama. And like @Thorium put it in his comment in another story: Watching this happen to a character you like is like watching your sister getting taken away, without being able to do anything other than leaving a disapproving comment.
yeah at the moment of him going *welp cant do anything about it since sche's a slave and belongs to some1 else* i wanted to write welp another spineless japanese mc...without it being japanese wn!
There is a big reason why people complain about NTR if the tag isnt included and they find out, and this incident was close to NTR. Some pple love ntr drama, others hate it, there is no middle ground!
It'd be downright disrespectful to Lydia to sleep with Miki, and given Miki's status as a slave, it even could be considered inappropriate whether she could give consent. (Realy now? We both know she jump on you the moment you agree... And don't write slave harem stories if you add such hypocrite words.)
Thanks for the chapter! :-)
I read what you said, but I don't feel so optimistic about things.
You say that giving us more chapters is a reward, but rather, I felt like the last two chapters were a ton better than the ones before them.It really felt like you took the time and effort to push the quality, and I think they were the best chapters you released.But this chapter you fell back into old habits. There were a bunch of obvious typos and you added a ton of things that haven't ever been mentioned.
Yesterday, it felt like you had a plan. Today, it felt like you winged everything. I worry that if you go back to 3 a day, you'll just wing everything, and the story won't make any more sense.
Sometimes, I saw what you were doing, and when you actually did do them, I just thought "awesome!", but going back means more of stuff coming out of nowhere.
Like, that line about how Lydia changed when Miki came back to life. She didn't change then. She changed when Deek got her on loan. The way she acted after meeting Miki wasn't really different from how she suddenly started to act like a jealous girlfriend. I think that change was ok. It was forced and annoying at times but it was ok. But then you suddenly said she did something that she didn't? It was like you just got an idea, or remembered something you forgot, then just added it after, rather than spent the time to work it out.
You keep saying this happened or that happened, but just being told is boring. I wanted to see it. Is increasing your releases going to let me see it? Cuz last week, I didn't really see much at all. You just told us everything and we weren't allowed to see things for ourselves.
You said that you'd make things better if we gave you high ratings, but if it means that you'll drop the quality so that you can release more, then I won't do it.
You called it a bribe, but I don't mind. Sometimes a bribe can get some good moonshine on the market. But if that moonshine ends up being bad, I won't take that bribe.
LoL, Thanks for the chapter
Thanks for the story!
“I doubt that, sense she hasn’t apologized
- MC is getting more irritating with his weak heartedness first his slave talk over him another manipulated him and now he is demanding respect people from 21st century don't even care if someone offended them unless it is very serious or they are shamed in public