I stared at Velariah.
“Let’s get you all cleaned up.” She smiled.
“It’s late already, Vel. I can do this myself and make it fast.”
“Nah, I insist I help you with it.” She said as she turned on the faucet to let the water reach its desired temperature.
She walked in front of me and lifted my shirt up to take it off.
“You really made a mess, you know? You got this shirt all sticky as well.”
Well, obviously. I hadn’t cleaned my skin yet. There was bound to be more of the strawberry juice that got itself stuck to it.
“And whose fault was that again? You know I hate spiders. Letting them surprise me like that when I’m climbing a wall is bound to cause issues.”
“You’re right. I’m sorry. How can I make it up to you?” She smiled as she urged me to lower my human torso with her hands on my ‘hips’.
“Well, if you insist on making it up to me, you could wash my hair with some of that lovely shampoo,” I said and smiled.
“Hm, that’s a good idea.” She quickly kissed me and reached for the shampoo bottle in one of the baskets under the sink. She grabbed two sponges as well and laid the towels in the sink.
She started undressing, leaving on nothing but her panties, and stepped into the tub where she plugged in the stopper, preparing for my ‘first clean’. She placed the bottle of shampoo just outside the tub and beckoned me over.
“Let’s get those legs of yours cleaned up, shall we?” She said with the most beautiful smile.
I removed the two pieces of clothing that I wore and joined her in the tub. She used the sponge to absorb some of the shallow water and wrung it out above my head.
“You’re making this more complicated than it has to be, you know?” I smiled.
“Doesn’t matter. I’m enjoying this.” She said before repeating the action she made several times, to get my hair all wet. She then ran her fingers through it, getting the sugar from the spilled drink out, before rinsing it with more water.
“Hm, I do enjoy your hands in my hair,” I said, earning a smile and a kiss from the kneeling elf before me.
“And I do enjoy your lips on mine,” She said seductively.
She took hold of my two filthy legs and brought them forward so they were in front of her. She ran her hands over them gently, earning a smile from me as I closed my eyes and enjoyed her touch. She then started scrubbing them, slowly wiping off the insect blood that stained them.
I opened my eyes again to see her checking out my other legs.
“Seems the others are still clean.” She mentioned and crawled towards the stopper, which she unplugged and then plugged again after the water had drained.
“Yeah, I told you I would be finished pretty quickly,” I replied after she knelt back in front of me.
“But then I couldn’t do this.” She said before placing a hand on my belly. Her touches so close to my belly button sent shivers through my entire body.
She put her other hand in my hair and ran it over the skin of my scalp as she pressed her body against me to kiss me again.
Heat rapidly built up again everywhere in my body, and I had my pedipalps around her back before I even realized it.
“Hmm, El, you’re delicious,” Velariah said as she broke away and reached for the shampoo bottle outside the tub.
I didn’t know how to respond to that and simply stared into her blue and green eyes when she turned to face me once more.
I regretted that she broke away, I was getting lost in her lips…
The elf shook the bottle vigorously to try to mix all the different ingredients before putting some on her hands and putting the bottle away again.
“You look like you’d like some more of that.” She smiled seductively again.
I nodded.
I wanted more…
“Happy to please you, El,” She said as she reached for my long hair and started rubbing the shampoo in it.
The scent of flowers only served to stimulate my senses more when she pressed herself against me again and kissed me passionately. I returned the favor by running my hands through her still dry hair and holding her head while we made out. My second set of hands were guided to her hips by the elf.
Velariah’s hands rubbing the roots of my hair were driving me crazy and I could feel my resistance weakening as she started kissing me more and more passionately. Eventually, her hands were removed from my head which caused slight disappointment to fill me.
It wasn’t for long. Soon, her hands were both running over my stomach as she gently ran her fingers from my carapace upward.
“Vel.” I moaned softly in the little time I had between two kisses.
The elf broke away and looked into my eyes and stared into my soul. The heat within me started to become unquenchable when I looked at her.
“Are you okay?” Velariah asked softly. “Should I stop?” She looked slightly disappointed.
I shook my head. “No,” I answered softly before she closed the gap again.
Velariah ran her hands over my belly again and didn’t stop this time. They reached my breasts which she gently caressed.
My defense was completely gone. Her soft, loving touches became irresistible for my body and mind.
“Do tell me to stop if I’m going too far,” Velariah said softly.
It only served to fuel my love for her. She was so caring and sweet. It only made me want her more.
“No, Vel. I love you.” I admitted with a soft voice as I placed my pedipalps around her back, joined by my front set of legs. I used them to press her closer to my body.
“I love you too,” Velariah said, word by word, because I kept interrupting her with my mouth.
I ran my hands over her legs, up to her hips, while my other hands ran up from her stomach to her breasts. She was slightly smaller than me, but there was plenty to hold and caress.
“Hm, El.” She moaned softly.
I closed my eyes and let my instincts take over. I slowly ran my fingers over Velariah’s soft skin, completely lost in my desire for her. Our kissing never stopped, and before I knew it, I held her with four of my legs while I slowly ran my pedipalps over her back.
“Elania, you’re amazing,” Velariah said while still running her hands over my skin and cupping my breasts.
“As are you, Vel. You’re driving me crazy. How do you do it?”
She pressed herself against me, her chest against mine, and ran her fingers near my belly button again, causing me to slightly close my eyes and enjoy the pleasure that jolted through my entire body.
“I have no idea, El. I just love you. I do what my body wants to do and it wants to make you feel good.”
I pinned her down to the wall of the tub and brought in yet another set of legs. This one took hold of the elf’s legs, while my other two sets were still around her frame.
“So do you, it seems.” She smiled but was interrupted as I forced my mouth on hers again. I didn’t reply. I simply let my hands and limbs do the talking.
I ran a few fingers up her long ears and felt her body shudder beneath me in reaction. I continued doing that and felt Velariah’s heartbeat rise and rise as our intimacy grew stronger and stronger.
I felt her sensations through my limbs. Every time her heart beat, it was registered and redirected to my brain. It only served to make me want the elf to feel even better. The dam had completely broken. I wanted her more than anything in the world.
The rising water only added more heat to our show of love and affection. It seemed Velariah had put the temperature higher than I was used to. I didn’t care, though.
Velariah lifted herself up with her arms around my neck. Her head didn’t reach further than my chest, as she was sitting on the tub floor, but it gave her plenty of height to put her mouth on one of my breasts. She started sucking on it softly and skillfully played around with her tongue, causing all sorts of pleasure to flow through me whenever it connected with my nipple.
“Vel.” I moaned softly, losing myself to the elf.
Velariah reacted by moving her hand up to my other breast and mimicking the movements of her tongue.
I closed my eyes and let her do as she pleased.
“At times like this, I really wish I had four hands, too.” She spoke. Seconds later, her lips were on mine again, and her fingers were now doing what her tongue was doing moments ago.
The heat was becoming unbearable. I needed release, but Velariah seemed too occupied with making it worse and worse. Her tongue was forced into my mouth and started exploring the insides of my lips. It then found my tongue and played with it.
She pressed her chest against mine once more as she found a way to escape from my third set of legs that held her. She was kneeling before me once more and started to take the lead that I’d obviously lost.
My legs and pedipalps were still on her back, and my hands were still on her breasts and hips, but she started to push me back as her tongue invaded my mouth and drove me crazy.
“Do you want to go further?” She asked softly, as she broke away for a second to speak, before kissing my neck.
“Yes, Vel. I want you.” I let out softly, followed by a slight moan as she pinched my nipples gently.
“I want you too, El.” She spoke in a whisper before kissing me again.
I was completely at her mercy. The way she made me feel… I was in heaven. My love for her, combined with all the stimulations she caused brought tears to my eyes. I’d never felt this way before. I didn’t know what was going on, but I wanted it. I wanted to be with Velariah and hold her close.
“Are you crying, El? Are you okay?” Velariah sounded worried.
“I’m okay. They are tears of joy. Please continue...” I almost begged.
Velariah reacted to that by bending me over so that my head was against my abdomen. The flexibility of this body continued to amaze me. I still had my legs on her back and my pedipalps were now holding on to her legs.
“Be careful with my fangs, Vel,” I whispered. I knew full well where this was going, and the location of my fangs was close to where I knew Velariah would end up sooner or later.
“I’ll be fine.” She spoke as she soaked the two sponges and rubbed them over my human body, all while suckling on my breasts again.
I had my eyes closed and simply held my hands in her hair as she added more fuel to the fire. If she continued like this, I was going to explode. She scrubbed gently, causing waves of pleasure to ripple through me as she slowly worked up again. Velariah really knew how to play me…
Her mouth reached mine again and I heard one of the sponges fall into the water next to me. I had my eyes closed again and let the elf exploit her leading position to the fullest.
She ran her hands from my breasts all over my skin to my hips while kissing me eagerly. She then moved them up my belly to my breasts with which she started playing gently. Her tongue played with mine as we kissed with mouths wide open. My breasts were kneaded by her strong fingers as she continued to drive me crazier and crazier.
I used my lower set of hands to gently caress hers as she moved around on top of me as she continued to take her lead further in the kissing battle we are competing in.
Her hands touched every inch of my skin with a light touch, causing me to want her. I wanted Velariah to drive me to the edge… and beyond. She then moved her hands lower and lower, touching and gliding over my exoskeleton, which was incredibly sensitive to her touch for some reason.
I felt her hand stop on my chitin, near the orifice that hid my lady parts, and felt a finger try to make its way inside. I didn’t object. In fact, I held Velariah tighter with my extra limbs.
The opening seemed to expand without issues and the white-haired elf eagerly accepted the invitation to gently worm her entire hand inside. I then felt her fingers reach my most sensitive parts and moaned softly as she felt around.
“Vel!” I let out softly in reaction.
Velariah didn’t reply. It seemed I’d only served to please her with that reaction as I felt her emotions strengthen through my limbs.
She felt around which, in itself was already pleasant, but she had obvious trouble finding what she was looking for.
“Going well, Vel?” I asked, chucking at her hapless efforts to please me.
Velariah seemed slightly annoyed.
“It’s my first time. You’re not exactly human anymore. I don’t quite know where everything is located.”
I smiled and gave her a quick kiss. “Relax, it’s okay.”
I then moved a hand on her arm whose hand was looking for my sweet spot. She stopped moving her fingers in reaction, as I guided her movements.
“Here,” I whispered with a soft moan as I felt her fingers connect.
She smiled and moved her fingers over my knob. I gritted my teeth at the sensations.
“El, you’re so cute when you make that face,” The elf spoke softly.
“Mmmmm,” I moaned softly as she continued playing around, sending jolts of pleasure throughout my entire body. My legs resonated with the jolts, causing Velariah to laugh.
“I can’t help it, okay?” I said half-jokingly.
“It’s cute. I love seeing your reactions at my touch,” She replied.
She slowly moved two fingers inside, not far, while stimulating my clit. She stimulated my inner walls carefully and slowly while keeping one finger on my most sensitive spot.
Tears sprung to my eyes again. My fangs reacted to her touch and crossed over her arm while she continued to carry me to heaven. Another pair of legs had found its way onto her back as well. It seemed my spider half wanted to hold on to the elf with all its might.
I wanted to hold on to her with all my might.
Her kissing was draining all my strength...
My limbs were becoming weaker by the second as my heart started working overtime to process the emotions and pleasure Velariah was bringing me. I even started to notice it in my human arms.
I somehow found the strength to bring my hands down from her hips to her own nether regions. I had no trouble replicating the actions she took with me; she was soaking wet. Even through the water from the tub, I could make out her own. She reacted to my touch with a soft moan of pleasure of her own. I knew she enjoyed my touch, every inch of my body knew it to be true and I loved making her feel this way.
I had a far easier time finding her pearl. Velariah broke away from the kiss to let out a soft moan of her own. I didn’t offer her any reprieve as I forced her back onto my lips with my spidery limbs.
I also moved two fingers inside her, slowly and carefully, and started slightly rubbing her inner walls with them, while continuing to stimulate her jewel.
Her kissing assumed a more frenzied form. It was as if she was ravenous and needed to be kissed to be satisfied. Her mouth and tongue took full control as she pressed herself against me tighter and tighter while continuing to move her fingers around inside me.
I didn’t dare to open my eyes. I felt as if I’d wake up from a dream that was long overdue. I wanted to experience this feeling with all my heart and mind.
I still played with the elf’s chest with my other hands as we continued to make love. Our breathing intensified and I could hear soft, quick panting coming from the elf while my legs held on to her for dear life.
Her heartbeat became faster and faster. It felt… empowering to be able to feel it. It was as if I had her tight in my legs and she was my prey. I couldn’t describe it any other way.
I was doing one hell of a sucky job at being a spider, allowing my prey to take hold of me instead. I couldn’t help but love the feeling, though.
Velariah’s movements inside me intensified in speed, causing my hands to replicate it without even thinking. My calling out her name was suppressed by her lips and tongue still being in control.
I started to move my body forward and backward as her fingers were still playing and pleasuring me.
I wanted her more and more.
I wanted to shout her name.
I wanted her to know I loved her with every fiber in my body.
I wanted her to feel the same way I was feeling right now. She was taking me higher and higher into the sky.
She’d granted me wings.
I exploded with pleasure and I could feel my spidery limbs twitch as my climax washed over me, followed shortly by Velariah’s own. When she did, the sensations picked up by my legs only served to intensify my own more. The girl I loved experienced the greatest pleasure I could bring her, and I loved the feeling.
Our kissing never stopped, continuing on, even as we both rode out our climaxes.
I didn’t want to break apart.
I wanted her to feel loved forever.
She brought her hands back into my soap-soaked hair and continued kissing softly.
I imagined she felt the same way. I didn’t want this to end.
“Vel,” I softly moaned again in the short time that I had when we broke apart. “I love you, Vel.”
“I love you too, Elania.” She whispered back.
I took hold of her arms and pinned her against the wall of the tub again, my legs supporting the underside of the elf’s frame once more. I relaxed deeply as the hot water almost completely submerged us now.
I continued the kisses and ran my fingers across her soft skin’s curves once more, making my feelings of love all the more clear to her.
I closed my eyes again and soon found myself in a hazy state where I could only feel the elf and her body. Her touches on my skin and mine on hers were all that I felt. All worries, all cares, all problems were gone. All that remained was Velariah and my love for her.
I prayed I’d be able to stay with her forever.
If you leave all the spoilers closed, the dialog starts getting messed up in places... to be honest, hiding the explicit stuff behind spoilers in a chapter already marked as NSFW feels... superfluous, pointless really, and it's clunky and awkward to open each one individually every few paragraphs....
Enough has been said about what's in the spoiler tags, or what should be. I have a different thing on my mind.
My fangs reacted to her touch and crossed over her arm while she continued
Considering that some spiders eat their mates, this could have been a scary moment.
Then again, some spiders keep their mates around. Elania seems more the type to settle on a partner and keep her for life.
I figured the fang crossing is like thigh clenching but more spidery
@kaithar
It's very vanilla. It's more of sweet loving than anything else. Nice NSFW content considering you are rather reluctant for this sort of material. At least, from what I was understanding. If you are going to continue making NSFW content, --if you do decide to, rare as they might be-- then this level is perfectly fine.
EDIT
Advice, if you don't mind receiving it, when you are writing NSFW content never break away from what you are comfortable writing. It will quickly spiral out of control and turn into something you are not satisfied with.
@illomened I'm not necessarily reluctant, but this is the style that I prefer to do it in
@Faragi especially considering the characters
The spoiler box make it feel like peeking at po*n but just the sound you can't see the image you could get caught ♥️ Witch actually make it more naughty 😈
@lolodu09 LOL
I honestly thought that this was a very tasteful way to organize a NSFW chapter. You essentially had the R-15 version if you chose to ignore the spoilers and the R-18 version if you chose to pop them open. In regards to some people finding all the spoiler boxes annoying, I can only shake my head, they were fine, hardly an inconvenience.
The only thing I will say, and this isn't even directly about the chapter, is a reminder to keep the NSFW love chapters fairly far apart from each other. Too many authors on this site fall into the trap of, when their characters' relationship has advanced to a certain stage, making a NSFW love chapter every 2 or 3 chapters, which is just obnoxious and unnecessary, since at its core, their story was an adventure story (with sprinkled slice of life).
(off topic, but for example, one of my absolute favorite novels on Scribblehub (I'll refrain from naming it) is on a weekly release. This was fine, until the author included NSFW content nearly every chapter. Pretty much nothing has happened for over a month in their story because the MC is too busy shagging all the time. Fun once every dozen chapters. Obnoxious if every chapter's content is filled with it, taking away from what originally drew us, the readers in)
Overall, I guess I'm trying to say that I thought the spoiler box option to "up the action" so to speak was clever and well put together, and a reminder to not fall into the NSFW chapter trap.
@sun1244
If you are writing NSFW anyway and even warn people at the beginning, just leave out the spoiler tags. I read on my cellphone using reader mode and that skips all the spoiler parts. The first time I read this I was wondering where any of the NSFW parts are.
Thanks for the yuri!~
Just wait till she tells Vel about the whole female s*x toys industry that existed back on Earth, then things will really get interesting~
"I love you too," Velariah said, word by word, because I kept interrupting her with my mouth.
=> "I..." "Love..." "You..." "Too,.." Velariah said
She'd granted me wings.
[beginning spoiler tag]
I exploded with pleasure and I could feel my spidery limbs twitch as my climax washed over me, followed shortly by Velariah's own. When she did, the sensations picked up by my legs only served to intensify my own more. The girl I loved experienced the greatest pleasure I could bring her, and I loved the feeling.
Our kissing never stopped, continuing on, even as we both rode out our climaxes.
[end spoiler tag]
I didn't want to break apart.
Honestly the ending of it feels lackluster. For either a revision of the end or potentially future NSFW content, try to give it more of a buildup rather than kinda offhandedly transitioning directly into the climax itself.
Also are we sure they've never had s*x before? Because while I can get maybe Elania had heard about it or read about it back on earth and therefore know about it, how did Velariah know what to do, let alone find El's sweet spot?
Velariah seemed slightly annoyed.
"It's my first time. You're not exactly human anymore. I don't quite know where everything is located."
Or maybe the explanation is that Velariah has masturbated before and since Elania never asked about masturbation and only if she's been in a relationship with another person, we the readers never knew.
Anyways, it feels like they both had a bit too much experience with how to do it for being first timers who never researched how it was done. Like, even if elf school taught about it like on earth, there is a difference between reading and learning about it vs actually doing it.
Good job thought with the nsfw chapter!~
Maybe we can see more in the future?
how did Velariah know what to do
... um ... "home field advantage" I would assume
I think from the start of the second spoiler box to the end of the last one could all go into one box to tidy things a bit. What I'd consider the essential story development - the part where El goes from shying away from relationship stuff to being all-in - is all at the start of the chapter, and the sections you have between the boxes aren't really any less NSFW just because they don't feature body parts. Rather, if you'd written it as the last chapter ending somewhere around the first/second spoiler boxes and then jumped straight into the next one, I think the chapter would have been much more optional.
OTOH, I kinda still get that jarring feeling even this way, since it's unclear to me what did make her change her mind. Sexytimes feel good, sure, but it didn't feel to me like Elania's resistance was at a level that could be overcome just by something like that, especially since they've already gotten pretty worked up from kissing before now.
It also feels a bit like the whole issue with the spider pet was left unresolved - was El not still upset about falling like that? She must be pretty heavy, so it must have hurt quite a bit, and it's not like Vel couldn't have predicted that happening. It feels like a proper communication moment would have been the difference that made this scene easier to handle in my mind.
Thanks for the chapter!
I think it would be better to just put the whole chapter in one spoiler box for those who don't want nsfw.
@pharaun666 <3 that's what I aimed for