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[This novel has been published to Amazon and Google Playbooks. The entirety of volume 1, namely chapters 1-75--in addition to all the side chapters--have therefore been taken down. However, you can read chapters 75 and onwards for free.
https://play.google.com/store/books/details/CupcakeNinja_My_Sister_The_Villainess?id=cVXUDwAAQBAJ
https://play.google.com/store/books/details/CupcakeNinja_My_Sister_The_Villainess?id=cVXUDwAAQBAJ
...If you love memes, cute tree spirits and general random chaos fueled by weed and soda, then you, my friend, have come to the right place.]
72
The god of lolis has returned
Ralph meme + Sekiro reference. This is getting out of hand.
Thanks for the chapter! I was already afraid you dropped it, when no new chapters came out. Yours was the first story i read here and the reason i created an account to keep me up to date for new chapters! Please continue to entertain us!
A quality counter is a mikiri counter.
Chuck noris beign a towel boy is pure gold
You're not gonna rob Vera of her regular spankings are you? That would be too cruel.
Haha those references!
Don't worry, Damien. Those onee-sans are out there somewhere! Or you could wait a few years for the girls to grow up.
Lol that ass chief is funny. But I guess anyone would become insane from being ass poked so many times.
"anti" --> "ain't"
"you would you" --> "you would"
"my on" --> "me on"
"is not right" --> "is it not right"
"a brought my foot down hard offending weapon" --> "and brought my foot down hard on/upon/something? the offending weapon"
".p" -> "."
Thanks for the chapter!! Ha, he finally realised he's been rewarding Vee :D Hope he confronts her somehow lol, also I feel like devil's left might turn some more maidens to the dark side...
Ok, got a word choice critique to make on this one.
"The dust storms and monsters forced them to never stay in one place too long and while there were numerous water sources here and there they weren't normally large enough to sustain too large groups of people. Not to mention that other creatures had to drink too so even if they weren't attacked by monsters due to hunger they'd have a hard time driving off all the beasts in the area who would come for the water. "
Both instances of the word "too" in this case are definitely a sub-optimal choice of words in the situation. It just feels clunky. Normally being succinct is the preferred method, but somehow it just doesn't work right if the "proper term" you use is too far in the simple language direction.
In this case, the first instance, "large enough to sustain too large groups of people," is by far the worse of the two instances, and I likely wouldn't have even been bothered by the second case if it weren't for how bad this one comes off. Just replace "too large" with "a significantly large" and it will flow a lot better.
The second instance, "other creatures had to drink too so even..." This one is a far more legit actual grammar mistake. You just need a comma after the "too." Alternately, it could be replaced with "as well," but it's probably just how bad the first instance was and the fact I was triggered by it that makes me want to push for the second solution over the first.
Huh,missed that. Yeah using the same words two or three times in the same paragraph always feels too noticeable. Like it messes with the flow somehow. I'll redo it a bit.
Nearly caught up, huh. Maybe leave a review after sometime? Would like to know your thoughts after reading everything
@CupcakeNinja I can tell you this much, the words "genre parody" are definitely going to enter any review I write about this WN