Arriving back at the house, I fall into and start being absorbed by my bed. It's only been two hours since I left, but it felt like days have passed.
"Hey, Kazuya, you wanna air out your mattress?"
Burying my face into the mattress, "Ehhh... Do I have to? I wanna fuse with this mattress, it feels so warm."
Jumping onto the mattress with me, I nearly fell off. We both laid there on the bed. I slept on the floor with a makeshift mattress last night so this was an experience.
Staring right into each other's eyes, I could feel my cheeks burning up.
Resisting the instinct to look away, we just stare at each other. Being this close together, I started becoming more and more conscious there's a woman in my room.
From this distance, I started noticing the small features all about Minami. Her fair skin that shined in the sun, her thin eyelashes that seemed to wave every time she blinked, her plump and full lips, her round breasts that pressed onto the bed.
"...They grew, huh," I slipped out.
Giggling, Minami nuzzled my face before closing the distance and kissing me.
Her lips felt like a bed with how soft they were. Swirling our tongues against one another, we broke our kiss with a thin thread of saliva between us.
"Hey, Minami?"
"What is it?"
"I love you."
She smiled.
"I love you too."
Wrapping my hands around her hips, we embrace each other.
A few hours later, we finally aired out the mattress. It got a lot dirtier than it was a few hours earlier.
"Hehe, sorry about that," Minami said as she stepped out of the bathroom.
Wearing my shirt that was a size or two larger, she sat down on the bed frame. I couldn't help but gawk at her breasts which, like I let slip earlier, had only grown more.
"At least hide your intentions," she stated with a giggle.
Scratching the back of my head, I apologize.
"It's fine. At least you're honest."
The atmosphere around was awkward. What happened earlier was definitely new to both of us and we didn't know what to say. It's like being thrown a surprise birthday party by people you didn't consider friends.
Trying to break the ice, I ask a question.
"Not gonna ask what my outing from earlier was about?" I blurt out.
Am I an idiot? That was the worst topic I could have picked to talk about.
Putting her cheek on her palm, "It was with Amiya, right?"
"You knew?"
"Well, now I do, haha!" she replied with a hearty laugh. "It's fine, I don't really mind."
"You're rather calm."
Standing up, she walked over to me and booped my nose.
"Of course, I do. I trust you, remember?"
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Afterword
And so, the story draws into its conclusion.
So, if any of you have read the info section in the auxiliary volume (which I don't have on Scribblehub hehe), you'd know that I initially wrote this as a middle finger to cheating stories all about getting revenge. But the more I wrote it, I realized that I could actually say a lot more than just parodying something.
And so, I did. It became a story more about the difficulties of moving on, something I experienced firsthand a few years ago. I had just broken up with my girlfriend at the time and I spent months crying myself to sleep.
In an attempt to heal the pain, I desperately tried getting back together with my ex, but she thankfully never answered back. I spent many, MANY months after that thinking about what she meant to me.
And, despite our breakup being quite messy, I still hope that she's happy with life. So yeah, I guess you could say Amiya's just a reflection of the desperation I felt when dealing with my breakup.
Also, I'm quite happy to say that this is actually the first published work that I finished. All the others I dropped because of a lack of motivation. It's not perfect but I think I'm happy with how it came out, even with all its faults.
Anyway, enough of that depressing topic. What I wanna ask you guys now is this; do you want me to write a few special chapters about Minami and Kazuya's future life, an epilogue of sorts. Or a version of the story where Kazuya stayed with Amiya despite finding out she was cheating.
I'll be writing both but whichever one you guys want more, I'll write first.
I honestly would rather read about Amiya slowly falling in love with the boy she was cheating with. What made the guy so special that intimacy with Kazuya was unneeded? What did he do to convince her it was OK? These are highschoolers so they know what they are doing is wrong so how did it happen? Did it stop when Kazuya found out? Amiya spread rumors about Kazuya after did the other boy bully him?
You made her so iradeemable that she was almost childlike. And because she's so childlike it almost makes up for her mistake.
You would bring up Kazuya thinking about their past, yet not give examples.
There was never intimacy with Kazuya or Amiya and they were together for years. Amiya gave her virginity away for a thrill? And Kazuya dumped his on the first girl that would talk to him without even being in a relationship with her. I feel that Kazuya and Amiya were only together because they were used to being near eachother.
Amiya even said that she asked herself why did Kazuya feel hurt because of sex. Why does he think s*x is so important. This showed that s*x was never brought up between them apparently, and its somewhat contradicting that she's saying this because she HID HER CHEATING s*x from Kazuya. If she honestly thought it was ok she wouldn't of lied, yet she still chose s*x over Kazuya. The entire talk about betraying trust was unnecessary because Amiya could have literally robbed a bank or murdered someone, and Kazuya would have forgave her. So it was about sex. It was about why Kazuya wasn't good enough for sex. What was the reason amiya had not only to cheat, but to not have s*x with Kazuya? His self worth was so low and there was nothing there to ever lift it up. He never stopped wallowing, he never stopped over thinking, he went to meet amiya and went to lose his virginity immediately.
Amiya didn't know Kazuya's sister died? And she couldn't detect a change in him when she died. Kazuya couldn't detect a change in his once virgin girlfriend who became a s*x addict who loved cheating public sex. It really seemed like they only liked eachothers company.
I can understand that you are projecting a personal experience into your work, but the audience has to relate to the characters. Even the villain. But Kazuya didn't even move on as promised. He never faced Amiya at all. He never told her why what she did was wrong, he never talked to her about his feelings. He goes around saying he wants her happy but does nothing to make sure she doesn't do this to someone in the future again. He avoided responsibility of making someone happy by running away from her, never flatly rejecting her, and leading her on and giving her hope.
"Will you let me to continue to love you?"
Amiya is clearly broken and Kazuya is allowing it to stay that way. Both parties never reached closure and they both had faults that was not pointed out to themselves to help them grow. Kazuya having a virgin ready to bone in his apartment without even looking into himself or fixing something he disliked about himself made the experience and Minami's boots call feel just that.... like an empty booty call.
Also, the time skip was a little unnecessary because you immediately did a flashback to right after Kazuya and amiya broke up. I suck at flashback scenes, but I'm just saying it would have been smoother to stay at the break up part and just transition to a time skip of the graduation.
These are my opinions and I wrote them to invoke thought. That's it. If you find it helpful, there you go, if not please disregard.
It's actually immensely useful!
A writer's journey is full of criticism, it's what makes us improve. Thanks so much for taking the time to write out your thoughts on the story.
And yeah, I do agree with you. I made Amiya unlikeable to the point where it was almost comical. Looking back, I want to rewrite a lot of things. Clear up some things, shouldn't have tried to give everyone a happy ending, etc...
I'll be keeping in mind what you told me here in my future works as a lot of what I write are people going on journeys through life.
@Slusher It's not like I wanted Amiya likable, but I agree with Blur that their shouldn't be more context about why she felt the need to cheat and have s*x with someone other then Kazuya, her boyfriend she says she loves so much. In a way, this story felt like an end to Kazuya's arc, which I am happy that he moved on and found someone better to live his life with, but was the problem I found. It only gave us Kazuya side of the story.
What I thing is that you should continue the story, but with focusing on Amiya and Mirani next, like how Amiya deals with her life with regret and pain of never having Kazuya's love because of her own mistakes and doing, how she deal with seeing someone else taking the place she had once held, and most importantly, why the hell does she think s*x is not improtant. I mean, no matter how you look at it, thing issue was simple not only about trust. Why did she felt like she had to give her virginity and have s*x with some random dude then her boyfriend she was her so called beloved person. I felt like you really needed to explain that issue more.
And in Minami's case, maybe a bit on her side of the story and maybe a meeting between those two, having an exchange on their points, maybe their she can ask Amiya why she taught s*x was to do with someone else other then Kazuya, who she was dating at the time, and might even ask a question that was on my mind for quite a while, would had Amiya been ok if Kazuya cheated on her, cause I feel like she wouldn't even when she was doing it. Basically, we needed more comtext to help understand the story better.
But I am happy you wrote this and was able to deal with your personal issues.
Hey, if you think of make a ling rewrite version of it, to answer all the lingering questions all the readers are having, give me a knock if you need help in it.
I feel cucked out of an ending tbh.
welp, maybe some good closure in the Kazuya & Minami epilogue?
the rest of us who like drama of course want the Amiya specials...
Same...
I don't want a version of the story where Amiya gets back together with Kazuya. But I do want to see a story on where Amiya moves on. Her side of the story after the café meeting.
I could do with a chapter of Amiya finding Kazuya and Minami together and then somehow see them having s*x and feeling what Kazuya felt that time.
I like this story. Reading this reminded me of my own difficulties letting go someone I loved. Thank you for writing this story, it's one of the few around here that has characters I can empathise with.
Unlike the sociopathic edge fest that is so common on this site.
I don't know what to think of Amiya's character, she's really a character full of contradictions, first she says she doesn't understand why s*x is so important to him but at the same time she needs to hide it from him and also from her friends, which means she was perfectly aware that what she was doing was wrong, also, why didn't she want to do it with her boyfriend (who she says she loves) but wanted to do it with a guy she didn't like, I don't understand, and finally after mc found out and broke up with her, she didn't even apologize properly and wanted to make up with him again as if nothing had happened even though she had sullied his image in her friends eyes, what's wrong with this girl's mind, how can you say you love someone and at the same time hurt them so much.
In the end, she really comes across as a selfish, immature, shallow and insensitive girl, I don't doubt that she really loves the mc, but she never really cared about him or his feelings, she only thought about herself and took their relationship for granted, she thought that no matter what she could do he would always be there for her, but she, what did she do to keep him around, she said cheating on him was fun and she didn't think for a sec how he might feel about it until he took her to his sister's grave, nor did she realize a change in mc's attitude after his sister's death or anything, she really didn't seem interested in him until he broke up with her, if she had, she would have known a lot sooner about his sister's death and how she died, I mean, she didn't even take news of his family or anything? wtf, for a childhood friend and girlfriend who knew his sister, it's still strange not to take news, mc really made the right choice not to get back together with her, such an egoistic and immature little girl can't make you happy, even though I know it's not impossible that she'll change in the future and become a better person but it won't be by mc's side, if she really wanted a chance to make things right she should have taken it much earlier and shown him her resolve and determination instead of cowardly dodging him until they graduated and sullying his reputation like she did
That being said, she's ironically the character I found the most interesting out of the 3 and I would have liked her to be a little more developed, honestly I wouldn't mind a chapter on her redemption and how she manages to overcome her break-up after the final chapter, seeing her realize her mistakes and manage to become a better person, find love again and not repeat the same mistakes, that would be very interesting, in any case thank you Author-san, for this story I enjoyed reading :)
I really enjoyed the story. I was worried after reading it was a story with a person who cheated, but decided to read in hopes of character development and you did not disapoint.
"Of course, I do. I trust you, remember?"
Now marry her MC!!!
Amigo me rompiste el corazon cuando lei final en el titulo del cap.
Siento que esta historia daba para mas capitulos,pero bueno es tu desicion, me gusto el progonista mucho, aunque me hubiera gustado mas drama.
Gracias por todo y a esperar esos especiales
Psdt: Amiya perra
Psdt2: Si alguien sabe de alguna web novel parecida a esta(NTR) con venganza o simplemente donde el mc salga adelante me la pasan por favor.
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