A young girl dressed in horrendously gaudy attire from what looked like the victorian area kept laughing hysterically.
We were in what seemed like, an old mansion of sorts, crystal chandeliers, walls coated in a idiotic amount of gold, and… Servants? But these servants, although looking human, had a never changing robot expression on their faces.
“I just can’t get enough of you Leona really, out of all the misfortunes I’ve arranged too. You going out of your way to protect your long lost love from another heartbroken dame, my so delicious.”
I, was dead. There’s no doubt about the fact that the bullet which shot me killed me and I bled out. But, what then is this, thing? Out of all the mythology and stories of beautiful and caring gods why is this thing in its place?
“You know, I don’t much take appreciation being called a thing.”
With a snap of her small delicate fingers my body turned inside out. Muscles flipping to become skin with an excruciating burning sensation everywhere imaginable. Out of all the suffering I’ve experienced I can only feel pain now, it burns.
And with a snap once again it was gone.
I lay panting on the ground sweat leaking from every pour in the aftershocks of what happened.
“You would thinkkk me being so courteous as to invite you here you’d treat me with some respect, don’t you agree meatsacks?” And all of the lifeless servants proceeded to nod in response to her demand.
“Exactly! Now of you’d actually listen to what I have to say without interrupting worm you’ll know how caring I truly am! Like I was sayinng what happened, it was truly amusing to me! And I want you to perhaps amuse me in other ways.”
Fiddling with the tea set in front of her, her smile started to grow into inhuman proportions as she continued ominously.
“Most souls do not get this opportunity to reincarnate and deal with me directly. And so, it goes without saying that this will be a one time deal! I want you to go into this uhh fantasy realm I’ve drawn up in my free time and do some killing! The creatures there stopped battling a couple eons ago and since then it’s been a snooze fest.”
“B-but why, why is there a need to kill then?” I muttered still out of breath from the pain I endured.
“Because I said so duh? Gets dull sitting around here all day sooo what do you say we got a deal worm?”
Her hand reached down towards my body almost in a way as to initiate some sort of twisted handshake. But, I refused to entertain this psycho any further.
“No.”
“No. No? NO! Hahahaha no no no you don’t understand do you? You do what I want, okay? You HAVE NO CHOICE.”
“You literally just have me a choice?..”
“You little- Ahem. I was gonna be a good girl and give you a good time, but you’re obviously not worth my trouble. You will kill a creature of high sentience once every full day. If you do not you will be punished accordingly. OOH OH and I’m gonna add some people in to spice things up too don’t you worry. This is gonna be so much fun you’ll see, bye bye now.”
Love it! Also ya misspelled eon in paragraph 12
I hate that kind of person, idiots who think they are superior. in this case we have the classic isekai goddess with a superiority complex, and it is, she is a goddess. but it is unpleasant to see that she protagonist has to be manipulated in a game, if it were of her own free will and in revenge I would gladly accept it but I can see that the main character is a typical holy girl. I hope I'm wrong since I how you advance the story is interesting, it is only the beginning and I hope you know where to take the plot and that it is not the typical cliché.(I literally complain about the personality of the goddess and end up talking about the plot XD)
For this story I want there to be plenty of surprises and for keep to stay on their feet for what happens next. And I uh, won’t spoil anything but the protag will be anything but holy lol.
Finally a god that does not kiss isekai's ass
Sweet
Could use a bit of editing, and the pacing seems just a little fast, but it's pretty good.
Yeah! I don’t write stories often but I wanna get into it more in the future. If you see any edits you think will make the story better lmk I don’t have the money or ability to hire professional editors lol.
OOH OH and I’m gonna add some people in to spice things up too don’t you worry.
Wait does that mean she's gonna add more reincarnates or does that mean that she's gonna give them specific people to kill?
Whooo knowwws? Perhaps both
reincarnates are trash, lynch him