Introduction to the story “Aldar: The Saint's Sensual Desires”
Welcome to "Aldar The Saints Sensual Desires," an erotic story set in the realm of Imzara. Here, the roles you're familiar with are flipped: Men are protected by women, shelved into safe spaces, while the women don armor, wield weapons, and call the shots.
Nestled in the land of Eryndor, you'll find the captivating city of Illudin. old capital of the elves, A city for adventurers searching for action, people looking for higher education and acolytes in search of their pantheons love.
In this city, the heartbeat of belief pulses through the Pantheon of Xane, a collection of gods and goddesses who govern everything from life and death to love and hate. And at the heart of this swirling cosmic dance is the Sanctus Luminary—a role of sacred role of aiding the heroes as they protect the world.
Enter Aldar, our protagonist, an orphan with more than a humble background. Raised in Moonshade Orphanage, Aldar bears an unusual birthmark. This isn't just a mark; it's a sign. A sign that Aldar is chosen as an saint candidate, a sacred figure who embodies both spiritual guidance and sensual allure.
Aldar's tale isn't just one of fate; it's a journey through his life as he wanders the realm of Imzara to both develop his character as well as ascending to the titel of saint and acquire the role as Sanctus Luminary for The Pantheon of Xane.
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Yes Votes: 9 17.6%
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No Votes: 21 41.2%
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Dont care Votes: 21 41.2%
I actually like this short intro good job author
Thanks! My first try at writing. So im trying my best. Any feedback is good feedback :)
Will any of his women be virgins ?
I haven't really thought of it, but i guess some of them will be.
I restarted the poll as i remade the whole introduction. So for all of you who are reading it now, please comment or vote on what you think of it.
How should I say this... It's just- too AI-like? It feels like what an AI will make, I guess?? Sorry if that offends, mate.
Not offended at all, all feedback is good feedback. I did use chatgpt to help me with the Intro, though most for the grammar and rephrasing paragraphs. I wanted the Introduction to seem more archaic which AI is good at doing. Should you have any other feedback, feel free to post it. I am gonna heavily edit the story in the future as this is my first ever story
@CorruptedDirtyMind I've tried it, not chatgpt but an openAI focusing on story writing. It did good writing non-smut content, amazing even. But when it comes to smut, well...the scene turn out weird 😅
@Boobaslurper I don't have the AI write my story or content, merely correcting it or help me express it.
And at the heart of this swirling cosmic dance is the Sanctus Luminary—a role of sacred role of aiding the heroes as they protect the world.
This is just a general writing tip but you should avoid using the same noun or verbs close together unless you are trying to emphasize something. ie try using a synonym for role here for one of the uses
It's "too stiff" not "to stiff". Might also be helpful to explain (if there is a reason) for why the gender roles are reversed.