[Open Starter Pack]
As Ben was rowing his boat, he heard the system speak again. He had been rowing for about an hour.
(Starter Pack?)
[Congratulations you have opened the starter pack and obtained the Hito Hito no Mi, Model: Akuma no Inkubus. It allows you to transform into a powerful incubus, a creature that is half-man and half-demon.]
All of a sudden a devil fruit appeared in front of him in a red light. Ben started examining the devil fruit, it looked like a red apple with swirls on the top.
(Hito Hito no Mi, Model: Akuma no Inkubus so a Human Model: Demon Incubus. Wait what is this starter pack and was this random or did someone plan to give me this devil fruit?)
[....]
(You can't stay silent. I need answers)
[...]
There is something deeply wrong with the system. Goddess Athena said she was working on it. If she is based on Greek mythology then she will be the goddess of wisdom. She can't get something wrong like this. If there is one goddess from Greek mythology there may be more. Ben thought to himself.
Ben thought back to reading One Piece with his sister in the past. All the epic adventures Luffy and the gang got to do. From fighting warlords, admirals and even yonkos to exploring new islands and making friends.
Ben looked into the sea and saw his reflection. He saw his brown eyes and fair skin inherited from his mother. His blond hair from his father. At age 19 he was about 6 feet tall and with a broad chest. He did the occasional exercise in school as part of his school education and playing football with his friends. He was not the smartest in the class but did well as he did not take many things seriously.
That life is over. As he was holding the devil fruit in his hand, Ben realised if he was going to survive he needed to get serious.
Ben took a big bite of the fruit. It tasted awful. He thought no wonder the character in the anime hated the taste.
Suddenly, he felt his stomach twisting. His lower region started hurting. Before he knew it he had passed out.
On a raft in the middle of the sea he eats an akuma no mi.... He's not very smart is he?!
There would be more mistakes like this so don't expect the most perfect character with a master plan.
@Pop12 it vould not take a masterplan to understand that while being stranded on a small raft in the middle of a sea , that u should not eat a devil fruit that makes you unvalible to swim lol thats just common sense
Way too short chapters.
Initially, the chapters were around 700 words. This felt too short therefore the latest chapters (bearing in mind some of these are written in advance) are around 1000 words. This felt okay however it seems that average chapters are actually above 2000 words. I will try to address this in the current chapters I am writing.
I feel that Athena probably would have pointed him more towards the Rebellion rather than being a pirate.( I mean it is a military unit that is going after the corrupt portions of society)
True, however, this will be an element soon.
She cant get something
Should be "can't".
region started paining
I think "hurting" would be better.
Thanks changed!
chapters are too short
Hi, They increase over time. The first dozen chapters are pretty short however they will average 1000 words later on.
The system said he would get a logia no?
I think it was just a devil fruit.
Holding the devil fruit in his hand made me realise
He holds the fruit, I realize, makes sense
Hi Thanks, That sentence did not make any sense and it switched from third person to first person midway. I have amended it accordingly.
Tired of the short mcs mam. So many tall af im one piece but lets go for 6ft which is short af for that world..dropping. Tired of cliche looks and height