This is the story of how the soul of Rosa Chesterfield, by the name of Kawahara Sumie, woke up one day in the body of a baby.
At exactly seven months old, a golden-eyed, brown-haired little girl named Rosa (no last name... yet) who was unnaturally always pretty, woke up in her crib and yelled so loudly that it woke her parents up at three in the morning.
"I'M A BABY!" was what she roared, in perhaps the first ever Rosa Shout to be recorded. But alas, she was seven months old, and so what the rest of the world heard was-- "BABABADAADAAAAA!" And, perhaps because the sensitive body of the baby could not take the amount of single-minded passion this new soul was channeling, the baby burst out into noisy tears. "BEEP," the baby sobbed, though the Heroine Buff Censor was already in place, so nobody knew what she really said.
That was the day everything changed for her parents, Lily and Rickard. It was a very sudden change, too, because the baby that had been everything adorable and nice and sugar and spice had suddenly taken a swift turn into spice, spice, and only spice.
She wouldn't be fed. Then she would cry. Her face would turn red (still pretty) with presumably anger, and she would yell out with a peculiarly loud voice at random times of the day. Then she would mutter, mutter, and mutter some more, babbling nonsense to herself.
As beautiful as the baby was, even her parents could not help but agree that this... well, this was..... strange. To say the least. After all, how could they know that their little girl Rosa was actually muttering Fibonacci numbers to herself out of pure boredom?
Two years or so later, Lily gave birth to a boy. They named him Ryan. And for the first seven months, they stayed cautious, for what if their little boy suddenly began muttering to himself or yelling out what felt like profanities but clearly weren't, like their daughter had?
Ah, fortunately for them, Rosa was a special case-- Ryan stayed the nice and happy (and occasionally irritated) baby he was meant to be.
At two years, Rosa was saying things with an articulate tongue, and her parents loved her for all her eccentricities, including her tendency to sigh in happiness whenever she saw a perfect circle. And, at two years, Rosa befriended Filian.
No, perhaps it is more accurate to say Filian befriended Rosa. For Rosa was entirely uninterested in two year old babies, despite being a two year old baby herself. "Hmph!" she said, turning up her nose at little baby Filian. Filian, being a little baby, didn't understand the implications of this action and joyfully attached herself to Rosa instead.
At three years old, Filian's father passed away, and Rosa cried and cried and cried. She was sad for her new friend Filian, of course, since Filian was only three years old! And her father had died! How sad! ...but also because she had actually been nursing a hope within her. A hope that, perhaps, this strange phenomenon of a second life (with all her memories intact!) meant she was in heaven, or some kind of permanent afterlife, where the deaths that had so plagued her in her past life would mean no more.
Alas, with Filian's father's death, the first death she'd witnessed in this life, she had realized that she had been cursed to live once more.
It wasn't until she was five years old and turning up her nose at Ryan's three-year-old antics that she happened upon the name of the Crown Prince.
"Crown Prince Alexander," someone murmured, and Rosa wondered why that name seemed familiar. She shrugged it off-- it was a common enough name. She continued her thick-fingered attempt at twisting around leaves into Mobius Loops while Filian trounced around next to her.
Then the same person continued, "I've heard he has a new friend he practices sword-fighting with."
"Oh, really?"
"Yes, delightful, is it not? The boy's name is apparently Drew Zimmerman."
Drew Zimmerman. Drew Zimmerman. Drew Zimmerman.
It was like the name echoed in Rosa's head for a good two minutes as she stood there, frozen from shock, until she gasped so loudly Filian fell backwards and she shrieked, "DREW ZIMMERMAN??!"
Filian began crying.
Lily rushed over. "What's wrong?" she cried, alarmed, gathering Filian in her arms and soothingly patting her. "Rosa?"
"No," she moaned, bringing her pudgy hands to her face. "It can't be," she squeaked. "It just can't be. Crown Prince Alexander? Drew Zimmerman?" The Crown Prince, she didn't really remember. But Glitcherman? The name she'd cursed every night before she fell asleep? The name she'd yelled at every end of a route that ended with his smarmy, smug face going 'My love!' at her? Of course she would not forget his name!
But what were the coincidences that someone of the same name as that game character would exist in this new world? No, really. What in the name of Durova... She inhaled sharply. "Durova?!"
Lily was rightly confused. Why was her little daughter looking so shocked at the name of their country?
Rosa ran over and gripped onto Lily's skirt, while Filian hiccuped and shied away from Rosa. (She didn't notice.) "Mother!" she cried, shaking her. "What is the name of the academy here?"
Lily blinked. "You mean, the Academy?"
"Yes!" Then she gasped. "Is it called the Academy?"
"Y-yes, that's correct. Are you alright, Rosa?"
She gasped even louder this time, physically taking a step back. "My name is Rosa!" she shrieked.
Lily only became more bewildered, and Filian whimpered in her arms. "Y-yes, my dear, that is your name."
"Noooooo," she lamented, falling on her hands and knees. "Noo," she half-sobbed. "My name can't be Rosa."
"But it is!" Lily pursed her lips. "Do you, do you not like your name, dear?"
Rosa did not hear her. "Roosaaaaaaa," she could only say. "Roosaaaa. I am Rooossaaaaaa."
And yes, that was the day that Rosa-- or, perhaps, the soul within her, that of Kawahara Sumie-- realized that she was in the world of <Love Academy: Love Love Catcher 3>, the otome game she'd only played to win a bet against Kawahara Mitsuo, her older sister.
She shivered. She shuddered. She screamed at random times of the night again, waking up the rest of the house and scaring poor little Ryan. (That was, perhaps, the beginning of Ryan's ingrained fear of Rosa that would continue for probably most of his life.) At times she would sigh things like "Glitcherman, no way" into their potato salad. And when Rebecca, their third child, was born into her house, Rosa looked at her with eyes filled with sorrow and whispered, "Why am I me, and why are you you?"
The next day, Lily gathered her newborn child into her arms and went to the apothecary's. Not to relieve her pain from childbirth, no, but to question what she should do as a mother if your six-year-old was having an existential crisis.
(She got no answer.)
The twins were born when Rosa was eight. She eyed the man she called father suspiciously. "That's a lot of babies," she informed him, and Rickard burst out into laughter, because he loved his daughter very much and found everything she said to be just delightful.
"Yes, and they're all your younger siblings," he told her, squatting down to her eye level.
Rosa harrumphed and went to stare at the squirming twins in order to establish dominance against these new arrivals. Ryan, being six, dove for cover so that he wouldn't accidentally be caught in line of that fire. Rickard ruffled the boy's hair affectionately and left for the apothecary's, so that he could get some soothing medicine for his beloved wife.
He was a good man, Rickard-- a loyal soldier, a devoted husband, a patient father. Alas, he would have benefited much if he hadn't been so loyal a soldier.
When their youngest, Ruth, was one years old, and Rosa, their oldest, was eleven, he went off to fight at the borders. He never came back.
Rosa did not cry at the funeral. She'd cried every day at night after he'd left for the border, so she didn't need to. The only thing she did was stare up at the sky defiantly, in her blackest garb and holding the small, fidgeting hands of her little sisters, and whisper two words as fiercely as she could.
No fair.
She had done everything an eleven-year-old could do to keep her father from leaving. But what could an eleven-year-old do? She'd clung to her father and threw tantrums she had never thrown before. Mildly embarrassing as someone who'd been seventeen her previous life, but she didn't have the time to be embarrassed. Rosa's father was absent when the game began. She didn't want that to happen again.
However, as all parents are wont to do, Rickard peeled his beautiful daughter off of him and gently said that he would be back, so she shouldn't worry.
Only she knew that wasn't true.
No fair, she declared to nobody and everybody at once, not letting the tears fall from her eyes. If she was going to be given a new life, even if it was the life of an in-game character, then shouldn't she be given a happier existence? After what had happened in her previous, original life, Rosa thought she deserved it.
So she developed a fear of what if I'm not living my life, what if I'm living through pre-determined cutscenes and plot points? which became a fear of the Academy and all things game-related. After all, that meant more people would die, including one character she remembered always dying. But she also developed a rather contrary determination to prove the game wrong, which would culminate into her proclamation of preventing any more deaths she had the power to prevent.
Thus, the plan.
And then her goal widened, because she remembered the pain of her passing father, the sobs of little Becca, the grief of her mother with Ruth still in her arms, and the shadow that had set into Ryan and perhaps never truly disappeared since then. But then again, it had only been five years.
So in the garden of the Winter Palace, as she overheard two traitorous, treasonous figures talking to themselves, she was reminded of all those waves of feelings, and decided that if she could prevent a war, she would.
When I came across this story on trending a while ago, I was interested enough in the synopsis to give it a try. Ever since then, I have been going through the story chunk by chunk. Now that you've reached the end of the first Season(?), I've decided to leave you with this comment essay review thing of my thoughts, concerns, and feedback on "They Were All Nobles" so far.
So, to start things off, I'd like to talk about my general impressions of this story. I'll just say this: the overall quality of this story is higher than those you see in other light novels and stories on this website. I did spot some typos and grammatical errors here and there, but they weren't egregious enough to detract from the reading experience. I would say that this story definitely succeeds as a "light-hearted, comedic take on the isekai genre." There are just certain things that I prioritize more in a story than others, so I won't be able to write anything more than a simple comment or two on many parts of your story. Instead, I would like to provide you with things I can talk about with substance. So, instead of trying to give you feedback on everything, I'll be focusing on specific parts of "They Were All Nobles." As a side note, this story is a little different than others I've left comments on, so this review is also a little different than others I've written. There's a lot of content in this story that I can't remember anything about, but I'll still try my best to give you something helpful.
Lindent shook his head. He pressed his lips together as if trying to fight off a grin and pointed at the turnip again. "It's pink."
Yes, yes it was. It was a turnip, and turnips were sometimes pink. "Yeah, so?"
Before I could stop him, he opened his mouth and said, "It might be" (he paused briefly here, pressing his lips together again) "possessed by the Pink-Eyed--"
He never finished, because he choked on his next words and dissolved into a shaking fit again. "Demon," he managed to wheeze out. "Of--"
The most notable aspect of your story is, of course, the comedy. I don't really find myself laughing that much from reading comedic books, but this story is one where I found myself laughing out loud a few times. This is notable for me because even just a few times is a few times (plus one) more than usual. Like how comedians read internet comments to know which of their jokes stuck, I'll give you a few examples of the jokes that I liked. Of course, I have to attach what is probably my favorite gag of the whole story in the quote block. There are others that I quite liked. There is Prince Alexander being scared of literally anything that has to do with Rosa. There is the running gag of Lady Lindvall and her cream soup. There is Mrs. Philip (Filian) being able to understand anyone with "Big Lindent Energy." There is Rosa acting like a villain and lecturing villains on being more villanous. There is quite a lot of content in this story that makes it entertaining to read.
The satirization of the common otome game story is another notable aspect of your story. With the explosive surge of the isekai genre sweeping light novels everywhere, it also brought its subgenres along for the ride. As we know, this includes the reverse-harem dating simulator subgenre known as the otome game isekai. Like every light novel genre, the otome game story is chock-full of tropes and archetypes. These tropes and archetypes are present in every otome isekai story, and "They Were All Nobles" is no exception. Unlike the typical novel, however, you use these tropes and character archetypes as the one of the central pillars that hold your story up. Acknowledging all the capture targets and the male lead, integrating a "heroine buff" as a discernible part of Rosa's existence, adding characters' reactions to Rosa's event flags, and more all make up significant parts of your story.
However, "They Were All Nobles" is not the only story that satirizes the otome isekai subgenre. There are other otome isekai light novels out there that make fun of the very same subgenre they are. There are other otome isekai light novels that abuse the tropes to funny proportions. Heck, there are even otome isekai light novels that are written from the point of view of another character trying to understand the reincarnator's ridiculous behavior. I'm not an expert on this subgenre, but I don't think there is anything in this story that is absolutely, completely unique. Yet, I still think this story stands out above the others, not just in the otome isekai subgenre, but also in light novel and ScribbleHub stories as a whole. To me, there are two defining characteristics that elevates "They Were All Nobles" from simply a nice read to a great story: the characters and the writing style.
"We are, but not right now." I looked over at Rosa, practically glowing red in steaming anger, and Ryan, who didn't seem to realize what situation he was in. "Ro," I called, and she barely acknowledged she heard me. "Ro, I'll talk to Ryan. You go after Becca and Roly."
She whipped her head around, seething. "What? No. I'll talk to Ryan, you go with Becca. If you think I'm going to let this BEEP BEEEEEEP BEEPing get away with this, you are so wrong."
"I know how you feel, Ro, but you have to go. You're only going make things worse." At this level of anger Rosa was in, I was kind of afraid Ryan would get really hurt. Rosa sometimes forgot her own strength. "You know I'm right," I said, not blinking.
"...argh!" she yelled, kicked the ground, then marched over to me, swept Ruth up, and sped off.
The characters in this story have a surprising amount of depth. Since you are doing a light-hearted comedic take on the otome isekai subgenre, you have a good deal of characters fall under a certain character archetype. This works well with some characters such as Drew Zimmerman. Glitcherman in "Love Academy: Love Love Catcher 3" was a bothersome playboy knight who existed to be an annoyance to the player. Glitcherman in "They Were All Nobles" is literally the same annoying character. Nothing else. And that's okay because that's all he really needs to be (as of now). You could have done something like this with the rest of the characters and this story still would have been an entertaining read. There are many light novels that are successful by doing this after all.
Yet, you did not. Not every character in this story is like Glitcherman. Even though the important characters like Rosa and Lindent and Prince Alexander follow all their archetypes like they are supposed to, they don't let these archetypes make up the entirety of their own person. Instead, they use their archetype as a starting point to become their own unique individual. And you didn't just use some of the average plain character development. No, you developed them with subtlety.
The events of the festival is a great example of both good and subtle character development. When Poly, Ruth, and Ryan went missing during the festival, each member of the family expressed their concerns in a different way. Roly being uncharacteristically quiet and gathering skewers for her twin, Mother Lily drawing the best she's ever drawn in order to make the "missing persons" poster as accurate and helpful as possible, Becca's frustration at everyone running off on her. This is good character development. By having them act in different ways, this shows that you are willing to add some depth to everyone in the story, even to the side characters. However, you go even further than this and add deep character development beyond what I would typically expect from a light-hearted story such as this.
Near the ending of the festival arc, there is one scene where they find Ryan in Chapter 30. After he explains that he left Poly by herself at the fountain, everyone gets understandably angry at him. Yet, even though Roly's anger is the biggest gut punch (literally!), the most notable reaction to me is actually Rosa. After Ryan's explanation, Rosa becomes absolutely LIVID. Like, she becomes so angry that Filian sends her away because she was legitimately about to hurt Ryan. I'm pretty sure that this was the angriest Rosa has ever been in this story and that this was one of her strongest displays of emotion. But why did Rosa get so angry? At first glance, it seems like this is simply an unexplainable reaction. However, you drop little hints throughout the story that can serve to provide a reasonable explanation. In the middle of the Idel arc in Chapter 9, Rosa is incredibly forceful in preventing Idel from giving up hope of getting answers from Paul. Rosa concludes with "If only I could-- So many people would kill to have the chance you have." Then, unexplainably to Filian, she becomes depressed just for a moment. In Chapter 55, Filian remembers Rosa being incredibly sad after the accident that took Filian's father. Rosa cried even more than Filian did, and she was depressed for days. All of this at the young age of three. It all comes together with the events of this Omake, where we learn that she had done everything she could have done to prevent her father from dying, albeit without any success.
Suddenly, her previously unexplainable anger at Ryan becomes explainable. She holds a hopelessness, a deep rooted sorrow whenever she thinks about the past. Her regrets linger past her thoughts and sometimes control her actions, like during the whole Idel case. She becomes extremely depressed when it comes to cases of death. And, she is extremely angry at the unfair world for killing her father, even when she did all she possibly could to prevent. These events and these feelings steel her resolve when it comes to deciding to prevent a war from breaking out. She wants to prevent the people she's close to from feeling the pain that she felt. So, for Rosa to face the possibility of losing another family member in Poly, especially for such a stupid reason like "I was busy," explosive anger is the only reaction she really could have.
I think it is this excellent mix of archetypal and deep development that make both your characters and your story great. To make this story light-hearted, the characters act in a, frankly, ridiculous matter a majority of the time. Maybe like 75% of the time. However, the story at this point is already pretty long. Imagine if we had a Rosa that only talked about mathetmatics and capture targets for 151,000 words. This story would still be a good read, but Rosa as a one-dimensional character (like the protagonists and deuteragonists in many otome isekais) would get tiring pretty quick. But, it is that 25% where Rosa is anxious about her missing family members, where Rosa is depressed thinking about all her unfixable past life regrets, or even where Rosa is arguing with Filian about their first kisses that the characters in "They Were All Nobles" are so excellent.
The Prince eyed his Mortal Enemy, his muscles as taut as an acorn. His Mortal Enemy, however, took no notice of him, and was eyeing her Mortal Enemy, her muscles as taut as a kangaroo about to kick the next person into oblivion.
"It's him," the girl spat to her companions, her light brown hair sparkling in the air. "Glitcherman."
Just a few meters away from the trio came a certain willowy playboy knight from the Zimmerman household, his flashy armor and ultra white teeth blinding the secret onlookers in the sun. Yes, it was he, Drew Zimmerman, the most hated capture target of all gamers who had ever played <Love Academy: Love Love Catcher 3>. It was he, the one who popped up in all possible moments to dive into the player's routes and forcibly change it to his own. He, who had been voted "Least Likeable," "Most Annoying," and "Most Likely To Be Assassinated By the Heroine" simultaneously for every year since the title had come out!
And at that very moment, this very Glitcherman was thinking to himself, hmm, why do I feel a sudden urge to laugh boisterously and as loudly and as arrogantly as I can?
It was the core of his annoying nature talking to him, of course, so that he could be as annoying as possible.
"Eh, why not," Glitcherman shrugged, and threw back his dirty blonde hair and squared his shoulders. His red eyes glowing in the hot sun, he began laughing so smugly and so self-assuredly that even the Prince, in his Danger Detected Mode, snapped his attention to him.
The annoyance meters of all creatures capable of hearing in the area jumped, and the Palace saw an instant rise in irritation.
If your characters are the wheels that move your story in the direction of greatness, your writing style is the powerful engine that starts your story up and keeps it moving forward. "They Were All Nobles" lives and dies by how it is written. I can't provide as much of an analysis of your writing style as I would like. All I can really say is that your writing style does everything it needs to. When you have a segment focused on comedy like the one in the quote block above, it really sells the scene. The descriptive paragraph of information about everyone hating Glitcherman in the game, the nonchalant description of Glitcherman's though process when he decided to laugh, the random Proper Nouns (Danger Detected Mode) and pop culture references, the emphasis on the ridiculousness of the characters. Your writing style is what really makes this story succeed so much as a light-hearted comedy.
Your writing style even accommodates for the not so light-hearted parts of your story. During Filian's fight scenes with Rosa/Idel and Lindent/Mother Lily, basically all the comedic undertones were thrown out. The street fights were written with the seriousness, intensity, and respect that they deserve. These scenes were carefully written out and the action was deliberate. The other serious scenes like Rosa's past life confession were written as if this story was a psychological seinen instead of an otome isekai. Your writing style is truly dynamic and versatile for the situation.
It hasn't been perfect the whole time though. I think there was one point where, for a span of like five or so chapters, the quality of writing declined. Some jokes were overused and the comedy wasn't hitting as well as it did in previous chapters. It came back to its former glory after some time though. I don't remember when exactly this slight decline started and when exactly this slight decline ended. I think it started somewhere around Chapter 51 where Prince Baltazar was repeatedly and the author left the chat because the fourth wall was broken. This slight quality decline occurred for some of the chapters past that one. It was fixed after you noted in the author's note that you were stylistically lost (don't remember which chapter that was). Even then, your writing style was still really good.
This writing style is pretty unique when compared to all of the other light novels and ScribbleHub stories that I have read. The only direct comparison I can think of at the moment is "Tearmoon Empire." I'm convinced that even if the characters and the plot start to weaken, your writing style will keep the story running. Even if the next chapter you release dedicates 5,000 words explaining how paint drys, as long as you write it like how you wrote the chapters in this story, it will be entertaining enough to keep me reading through it all. After all, your writing style is one of the defining characteristics that make "They Were All Nobles" so good.
I'll have to dampen the mood a little with what is really my only non-minor complaint about this story so far. I really wish that there was more time given to the serious character development segments. It wouldn't be necessary if this was just a standard, regular light-hearted comedy, but it isn't. Well, even now it isn't necessary considering all the character development you have already been doing. Still, I would just like to see a *little* bit more character development than what we are getting. Like, for example, when they found the last missing member Poly, we get to read Filian's reaction and relief. Then, the next chapter has a "couple days later" kind of timeskip. I would've wanted to get a little more content from the arc's ending, like everyone else's reaction to finding Poly, or the direct aftermath of the event. Or the content of this Omake #2, where Rosa's origin story before the prologue is described. I think it would have been better if the contents of this omake were spread out over the course of the story. Rosa's reaction to the death of Filian's dad was already done in Chapter 55. The rest of the contents of Omake #2 should have been spread out over the course of the story or explained at some time, like when Rosa confessed about her past life (I think it was a good thing that you didn't use Rosa for that purpose, as having her explain her whole past life and sadness would not have been character for her). This chapter, Omake #2, feels more like a summary and a bit out of place when compared to your usual writing style. If anything, I thought you were going to make it like Omake #1, the previous chapter, where there are little mini-stories of Rosa growing up. Regardless, I do understand that adding more of these serious character segments would begin to take away from the primarily light-hearted tone of this story, so I can understand if it is hard for you to do so.
And thus, though I did not know at the time, at approximately 8:30 AM that day, Rosa and I began a journey that would take us to castles, shark tanks, and hidden underground sewage systems. (Haha, just kidding. Of course we wouldn't go to hidden underground sewage systems. They're way too smelly!) When would it end? I had no idea-- but I did know one thing, and that was that wherever we went, whatever we did, I would probably never stop rolling my eyes at Rosa's strange and crazy antics.
And you know what? That was okay. I was probably a bit crazy myself.
I think I'll about wrap up here. I wrote way more than what I was expecting to write, but I still feel like I didn't really convey everything that I wanted to. Still, I hope I was able to provide something helpful through these long blocks of text. I had a good time reading about everyone's antics. I really enjoyed "They Were All Nobles," and I eagerly await the release of Season 2 in the near future.
P.S. I'm kind of disappointed in you author. There are so many jokes in this story, but, somehow, there is not a single mention of a "Filly Cheesesteak."
asjdkfldjskfl whoa/??? that was ??? incredible??!???? lolol thank you for taking the time to write this! I came in here to begin updating for the next season and was met with this beautiful surprise!??!????!!
this is so lowkey surprising because you caught onto so many like subtle stuff that I didn't really expect anyone to notice enough to remember, but then here you are listing stuff out that even I forgot I did. Thank you for your compliments, and thank you even more for your honesty! asjdkfldjsklf I don't even know what to say lol but wowwwww
I hope the story continues living up to your expectations man but really this is such an honor to be at the receiving end of this... haha thank youuuuu!!!!! (also I'm guessing you posted this here instead of under reviews because spoilers so I won't ask you to move this wonderfully mind-blowing spiel there lol)
@skillet
You took a lot of time to write this great story, so me taking the time to write this thing is the least I can do to show my appreciation. I wasn't sure if what I wrote about the subtle stuff was simply me just reaching or something. It's nice to know that I wasn't. And you're right that I posted this here instead of as a review because it would end up being a thousand words of straight spoiler text (lmao). I'll probably write an abridged, spoiler-free version of this and post it as a review soon. Seriously though great job so far.
(Also I just realized that I spent significantly more time talking about Rosa than Filly even though Filly is the protagonist. The heroine buff is truly not to be underestimated. Sorry Filly.)
@areader99 aww thank you!!! and I do have to admit there were a few stuff that kind of just happened without me really intending it (like Rosa getting only explosively angry at family stuff?? I hadn't really thought about that lol), haha xD
also, I've been meaning to say-- would you believe me if I said the words "Filly Cheesesteak" never ever ever crossed my mind this entire time?
@skillet sometimes you just forget the easy stuff. It really be like that sometimes.
If having a fancy meat dinner of beef tenderloin and mashed potatoes was enough to bring tears to Filian's eyes, imagine how touched (or exasperated) she will be when Rosa makes a completely new kind of food she's never seen before, using such luxury ingredients like steak ("can you believe I get to eat BEEF again?!") and cheese ("i've only heard of cheese from rumors"), and names it "Filly Cheesesteak" after her best friend (or so she says).
@areader99 Haha, I like that!! I'll have to see what I can do