By Temple
Erind Hartwell, a first-year law student with psychopathic tendencies and an obsessive compulsion to follow an arbitrary set of Rules, tries to live a normal life in a world where superhumans battle eldritch horrors invading minds. Society frowned
I have to say that titles make me interested in a story, and Key to the Void is far more interesting of a title than what it previously was. Before your rewrite I would not have even given your story a second glance, but now I find myself intrigued. Titles are our first introduction to an author's work, and so many webnovel authors don't realize this affects their stories perception; often in negative ways. Kudos to you author.
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This is the author's rewrite of reincarnated as the goddess's sister. This time round the story is much better paced, after 18 chapters we are on the same level as chapter 40 of the orginal. With just as much story told. Definately woth the read.
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I made it to the end so that says that this is good. This novel has some of the most detailed world building of anything on this site. The characters are all very well described and very easy to identify. I never found myself getting confused about who is who or what is going on.
The bad?
I think the number one problem with this is over explaining things. A fight where one elf gets shot with arrows in the dark and runs to a tree. Expect that to take several chapters. There are other jarring transitions where a chapter ends right in the middle of the action. Instead of continuing where the action left off things start with several paragraphs of explaining mediation techniques. It is jarring and when I came across this a few times I considered dropping it more than once.
The last thing that I dislike is the divine-vision-get-ganked mechanic. The way that the enemy knows everything about the MC, and can invade her dreams at will is skirting concepts like loss of agency. Luckily, this only happens with Asa sleeps which she doesn't have to usually.... oh wait... no it can smack her out of the blue with no way to defend herself while awake too. This might not bug other readers but it is a pet peeve of mine. It is like having an antagonist who is an earth quake, or a tidal wave; only it is worse because forces of natures don't single someone out.
Overall though I believe the good outweighs the bad or I would have dropped it well before chapter 120. I skipped any chapter labeled lore and never got confused.
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