A completely average middle-aged banker dies in a traffic accident, but reincarnates as Verzix Valrien, the second son of the Valrien House. The only complication? He remembers that Verzix Valrien is the name of the first antagonist from a popular eroge, "Magical Harem Academy."
While it wouldn't be hard to avoid a Bad End, Verzix wants more than that. The Hero can keep most of the girls; Verzix will just take his favorite two.
Grammar is readable, but I think that you are trying way too hard to make this antagonist the Eugeo of your supposed protagonist in the eroge and a bit much on his power scale, so much so that it is blatent that the character is just there for the current protag's taking.
As for your thirty year old guy who got isekaied... I feel like you are hitting way too close to home.
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