Eric a person killed in a mass shooting gets reincarnated into the marvel cinematic universe as Godspeed? Luckily he has the sign in system…that gets to be used only once a year…Who will Erick take a fancy to?
Disclaimer:Please keep in mind that this is my first story, comment if there’s a part in the story that doesn’t make sense or I misspelled something
(PS:I do not own marvel or anything ONLY my OC and it’s storyline
Like the concepts but..
It's very poorly written, the characters make none choices,
0. The living tribunal just 'JUST' told him his life would be surrounded by loss and misery & what does he do the moment he comes back, 'he decided to stop training because his mom asked him' he could have atleast took wanda & his family and run away to safer country.
1. MC could have used 100 reasons to persuade his family to migrate & brought wanda along. Or at least he could have tried. No one would willing live in a warzone.
2. Tribunal & tva just find insane reasons to let him be. (Seems like the author just wanted to incorporate the new marvel shows & muddied the story)
3. Why/how did phill get found out when hydra were able to sneak around & monitor m.c.
4. Why would MC not ask help from shield..
5. How would shield know who hydra is keeping tabs on? How would the even know hydra is operational?
6. Why is he scared of the ancient one, where he decided to be uppedy with the freaking living tribunal?
7. Why would he not clear things out with Wanda & making it clear that Tony stark is not responsible for the bombing?
8. He gets photographic memory out of nowhere, and completely memorized all fighting skills. With no explanation..
9. His power clearly says he is immune to the pain. But the hidra are able to make him feel pain.. somehow....
10. How had hydra not brainwashed either of them after 20 years????
11. Why did he not run away from the hydra, moment he got his powers??
Nothing makes sense in this story, the entire thing reads like a fever dream & a bad one at that
And on top of that...
the grammar and the spelling errors in this story are horrible, forget editing, the author doesn't even read what he has written before posting it.
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Great concept, terrible execution. What’s the point of having the speed force if he never uses it? What’s the point of having a sign in system if he stops using it at the beginning of the story for a stupid reason? What’s the point of writing him as a reincarnated character if he’s going to basically follow the script? There are so many unnecessary plot points that can be solved easily by the powers and abilities he has but for some reason never uses. It honestly started off great then ya killed it with a chainsaw.
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I love these sh*t posts and I never expect a masterpiece from what obviously is amateur work but sweet Jesus this wasn't well thought out. Aside from the usual problems these kinds of stories have they always lose the plot, there's no structure of anything and it feels so flimsy a small breeze could knock it over, like it's not hard to think for a sec and be like, "oh, that doesn't really make much sense" I applaud your effort to put stuff out and I believe you can do better if you would just think out an actual story
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