So plot looked okay. There's a lot you can do with it and it makes for an interesting fantasy world. I guess world-building was fine, although there were some things that didn't seem right to me.

First was that whole 'upright' walking which sounds really weird for a dragon to do, a little too human for a book that doesn't seem to have any in it. Honestly, most of the human-like things these beings do in your story seemed a little too weird for me, personally.

The next thing was Zeritha. You say she's a griffin and then say "hawk owl-snow leopard griffin". Griffins are typically part lion and eagle, but that's not really an issue (this is your own fantasy world and you could have different types of griffins I guess). My issue is how you describe her. It's hard to read it and you don't say how she's mixed (body of the snow-leopard, head of a hawk, wings of an owl etc.). I feel you could describe her better and maybe first say that's she's a "hawk owl-snow leopard griffin" instead of just griffin - because I had the normal image of a griffin in my head until I read the second part.

I do like that griffins have different abilities and wished you touched more into that. You tend to do well in setting descriptions but then other descriptions aren't done that great. There are parts of your world-building that also feel lacking, like there's no reason for it or explanation. Feels a little like the reader should know certain things.

Maybe I'm being too critical here, but world-building is a big thing for me (personal as a reader), especially in genres like fantasy and sci-fi. It doesn't mean that world-building is less important in other genres, I just expect more in those two genres.

Dialogue in general was good, there were some awkward parts but for the most part you did pretty good in that department. Some with grammar and spelling. Things looked good too, just watch out for tenses.

Anyway, good job on the story.  

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