Too early to really provide a good rating in the story. I would say at this point a rewrite is in order. The MC seems to be ok personality wise, the sides appear a little to weird or childish. The story jumps constantly this early on. Obviously that’s something that can easily change as the story progresses. It makes the world building kind of blah because while the author gives overall descriptions of a giant continent, there isn’t much else. The time skips are making the story way to confusing, especially the last 2 chapter. Slow it down a little. It makes it seem more like notes for a writer than a story.  The magic concept of the world is clearly not completely thought out yet... I can tell because of how it is described while writing the story. Readers can tell each part is added as the author thinks of it. Sit down for a bit and plan out what you want on paper before trying to add those bits so you know the direction. Needs more chapters to really tell anything else. Could be a great concept but the start is very shaky.

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