Most chapters are really enjoyable, a few chapters feel a little dull with the motive of "every person deserves a second chance to change themselves" (talking mostly about the field trip arc) but this story is a very good read.

The MC is overpowered, but she is kinda a god, so that is understandable, and it is always perfectly understandable when she uses or doesn't use her powers (even if I can't wait for the reveal).

3 Likes · Like

JHarp

Status: chapter 9: curiosity

Feb 2, 2025

Novels like this are a mixed bag. The idea is good and the writing is also pretty good and yet the story lacks trust to the reader.

Long lore dumps talking at the reader from chapter one, an extremely thinly veiled 'event' to start the MC on their journey without actually factoring in the evidence for the company who decided to leave the briefcase and any number of issues, I find myself not really caring about characters dying early because I never got to know them, there is more backstory explanation than character development.

The story would be a lot more interesting if I was actually shown many of the things going on that are relevant to the story, yet characters with barely 5 or 20 dialogue lines are put in a position to 'save the MC' mentally in short form after a drastic, world changing event, of which there was no investment for the reader in.

Some characters who only get three mentions of their name in the entire book are suddenly included just to absolve the MC of guilt before disappearing. King Juble, despite the supposed importance of his existence and relation to known characters, is present for exactly six paragraphs before fading into the background. There is no reason for an audience to be emotionally invested in empty platitudes.

1 Likes · Like